Pilot My Dreams
Rhyming contest entry5 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
You nailed it for me in this one. While I usually don't particularly like these repeating line thingies, the line you have chosen to repeat slips its unobtrusive but impactful way through the verses. I really like the slightly old-fashioned tone of your poem, through the rhyme and with such words as faith, misled, quest, quill. To my understanding, the sentiments expressed here are EXACTLY how my poetry (and obviously yours) come about... take your mind out for a sail with an unknown destination, trusting your instincts about the way to get there, giving yourself free rein, then you find the treasure when your idea and writing craft realise your dreams.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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You nailed it for me in this one. While I usually don't particularly like these repeating line thingies, the line you have chosen to repeat slips its unobtrusive but impactful way through the verses. I really like the slightly old-fashioned tone of your poem, through the rhyme and with such words as faith, misled, quest, quill. To my understanding, the sentiments expressed here are EXACTLY how my poetry (and obviously yours) come about... take your mind out for a sail with an unknown destination, trusting your instincts about the way to get there, giving yourself free rein, then you find the treasure when your idea and writing craft realise your dreams.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Yes, that's exactly what it's saying, Lisa. Just let my mind go, jot down a few different ideas and just let the waves take me in whatever direction they choose. Thank you so much for the fantastic review and the giant sixer, Lisa. I agree with the repeating line reference. It's only enjoyable if it's gracefully flowing throughout. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars, L. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day and thank you again.
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It's a nice feeling, isn't it, to be flowing along following a star or a beckoning shadowy figure luring you onwards.
Comment from LyndaS
How easily this dances across your mind. I love a solid meter when it's carried throughout. What a powerful message to just let go and trust in what you write. This was beautiful. So descriptive and well written. The art is the icing on the cake. This was so soothing to read. Also very clever moving a single repetitive line down with every stanza. What an effort here. Just excellent. I'm positive I just reviewed the winner of this contest. Exceptional work, poet. Lynda
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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How easily this dances across your mind. I love a solid meter when it's carried throughout. What a powerful message to just let go and trust in what you write. This was beautiful. So descriptive and well written. The art is the icing on the cake. This was so soothing to read. Also very clever moving a single repetitive line down with every stanza. What an effort here. Just excellent. I'm positive I just reviewed the winner of this contest. Exceptional work, poet. Lynda
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much for the beautiful review and gracious sixer, Lynda. Once I came across this picture I just knew it was the one for this. I dearly appreciate the generous rating and kind words, Lynda. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. Thank you again. Have a great day.
Comment from Beri Bee
Oh my gosh! I bow to the master! This is outrageously awesome! "What path my pen unveils" is a gorgeous line and deeply felt by this reader. "I'll lose the helm with faint concern" is another one that grabs me by the heart. "Pilot My Dreams" is a dreamy title for this ode to the muse, or the pen, or the writer! Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Oh my gosh! I bow to the master! This is outrageously awesome! "What path my pen unveils" is a gorgeous line and deeply felt by this reader. "I'll lose the helm with faint concern" is another one that grabs me by the heart. "Pilot My Dreams" is a dreamy title for this ode to the muse, or the pen, or the writer! Well done!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Beri. I'll loose the helm with faint concern is my favorite line of the piece. I love just letting my mind go and see where it takes me. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words, Beri. Also glad you see you jumped on the fan wagon. Thank you again. Have a wonderful day, B.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the form here with the repeated lines in each stanza like a waterfall of dreams falling from your pen like magical floating scenes, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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I love the form here with the repeated lines in each stanza like a waterfall of dreams falling from your pen like magical floating scenes, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Dolly. I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Have faith, it is nothing impossible to fulfil pen pilot dreams of mind, words and thoughts will make every dream feasible; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Have faith, it is nothing impossible to fulfil pen pilot dreams of mind, words and thoughts will make every dream feasible; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Dr. Alcreator. I'm glad you liked the piece.
