An Unwanted Puppy
The Life Of...contest entry7 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is such a fantastic write, Dragonskulls. It broke my heart throughout, then bestowed that happy ending (thank you; I was worried...) You're an immensely talented writer Congratulations on the win. xo
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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This is such a fantastic write, Dragonskulls. It broke my heart throughout, then bestowed that happy ending (thank you; I was worried...) You're an immensely talented writer Congratulations on the win. xo
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review and kind words, Rachelle. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and congrats. I'm glad you liked my sad little poem. Have a great rest of your weekend.
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Ron
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That's like thanking me for eating ice cream, Ron! xo
Comment from BlueMarble
This very well written poem about the life of an unwanted, abused runt of the litter hit a soft spot for me. Im so glad you gave it a happy ending - too often these stories don't. Wonderfully well done and a sure winner. Thanks for writting it.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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This very well written poem about the life of an unwanted, abused runt of the litter hit a soft spot for me. Im so glad you gave it a happy ending - too often these stories don't. Wonderfully well done and a sure winner. Thanks for writting it.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and big sixer, Blue. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked my little tale. Have a wonderful night and thank you again.
Comment from trimple
Hello there, Mystery poet
A sad poem about an ugly pup. I think though, you need to rewrite a part of this because you say;
Unwanted by anyone passing.
"Too ugly," I'd hear them all say.
I knew that this was my prison
[until slowly I passed away.] -- until slowly, I'd pass away?
Because your poor ole dog ends up being re-homed by an old man?
Aside from that, it's all good :)
kind regards
trimple
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Hello there, Mystery poet
A sad poem about an ugly pup. I think though, you need to rewrite a part of this because you say;
Unwanted by anyone passing.
"Too ugly," I'd hear them all say.
I knew that this was my prison
[until slowly I passed away.] -- until slowly, I'd pass away?
Because your poor ole dog ends up being re-homed by an old man?
Aside from that, it's all good :)
kind regards
trimple
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the great review and fix, T. I changed it. I had a different ending when I first wrote it and what I had fit there. But no one would have liked it if I had the poor dog die off, lol. Thanks for catching that. I really appreciate the generous stars. Thank you again.
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Kin unbelievable, Ron
The poem made no sense the way it was and yet ya still at the top of the table! lol
Jeez...
Right, that's it. No more fecking serious stuff from this end... From now on, it's gonna be sick puppies, kittens that have been rescued after getting tortured on gas stoves and wingless butterfies holding signs, screaming 'Help! as they shuffle along the ground in search of a fecking geranium from now on!
All I'll have to do then is learn how to add a short film and I'll be well away! :)
hugs
tracey
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Comment from LisaMay
aww shucks, you might have a winner here... appealing to heart strings for the underdog with soppy puppy love. I bought into it myself and wanted to take the ugly one home but that little old man Willie beat me to it. He was probably an ugly old dog himself. This poem speaks heart-warmingly of loyalty and second chances.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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aww shucks, you might have a winner here... appealing to heart strings for the underdog with soppy puppy love. I bought into it myself and wanted to take the ugly one home but that little old man Willie beat me to it. He was probably an ugly old dog himself. This poem speaks heart-warmingly of loyalty and second chances.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Lisa. Yeah, sometimes I actually stoop down to the heart sting level for these contests. Lol. It's actually a lot better than what I had at first. I had him needled off in the end before I changed it. But I didn't think that fly over too well. Haha. Thank you for the generous stars, Lisa.
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I am so glad you didn't go to the dark side. I nearly had to get my cat needled this week. She's hanging in with intensive TLC.
Yanking on those heart strings is best for winning on FS. And now look at your poem... a leader in the pack. I'm trying to snap at your heels but the gap has widened.
Comment from zanya
A-w-w here is a poem about the life of an unwanted puppy to tug at the heartstrings - someone saw the inherent beauty 'saw past the pain and the scars '-
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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A-w-w here is a poem about the life of an unwanted puppy to tug at the heartstrings - someone saw the inherent beauty 'saw past the pain and the scars '-
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Zanya. I really appreciate the generous stars. have a wonderful night.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, now, that's a heckuva downer to start the day off, yeah?....of course, that means that you did a great job portraying both image and feeling through your rhythmic write here! :) Great offering for this contest -- good luck in the polls! :)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Well, now, that's a heckuva downer to start the day off, yeah?....of course, that means that you did a great job portraying both image and feeling through your rhythmic write here! :) Great offering for this contest -- good luck in the polls! :)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the great review and generous stars, YMR. Yes, a bit of a downer, lol. Have a wonderful day.
Comment from RodG
Oh, I wish you had not written this. I want a dog badly and if I saw this one--puny and homely--I could not leave him in that shelter. I shudder when I think how many dogs share this one's fate. What really did me in was your last two lines. Rod
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Oh, I wish you had not written this. I want a dog badly and if I saw this one--puny and homely--I could not leave him in that shelter. I shudder when I think how many dogs share this one's fate. What really did me in was your last two lines. Rod
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Rod. Yes, it's a shame how many poor animals this happens to. I appreciate the generous stars.
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Your poem makes me want to sit down immediately and write a check to the local Humane Society. Rod
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I changed it, Rod. Now there's a happy ending.
:)
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I am so glad Willie came along. Yes, I like your poem so much more and I think young readers will too. Rod
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Thank you, Rod. Have a great day.
