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Comment from Beri Bee
This is a really beautiful poem! The love between an animal and a human is such an amazing thing, almost intuitive, as you've captured so well here! Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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This is a really beautiful poem! The love between an animal and a human is such an amazing thing, almost intuitive, as you've captured so well here! Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you so much for this great review. It brightened my day. :)
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Yay!
Comment from AprilViolet
Exceptional poems! Very well written with good stanzas. I've always been afraid of horses for some reason but that is a beautiful picture you used as well! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Exceptional poems! Very well written with good stanzas. I've always been afraid of horses for some reason but that is a beautiful picture you used as well! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you for your support and for this wonderful review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a refreshing write and the art work is spectacular, the horse seems to be enjoying the freedom and entering the sea to have a good soak splashing about. My favourite verse is:
Across the fields, we fly so free, as if we'll touch the sky.
Pegasus, the winged horse, could never fly as high.
Love that you mentioned Pegasus, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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This is a refreshing write and the art work is spectacular, the horse seems to be enjoying the freedom and entering the sea to have a good soak splashing about. My favourite verse is:
Across the fields, we fly so free, as if we'll touch the sky.
Pegasus, the winged horse, could never fly as high.
Love that you mentioned Pegasus, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you, you are so kind.
Comment from humpwhistle
I like this affirmation of the relationship between you and your horse. You acknowledge uncanny bond between steed and rider. This is not a casual relationship, but one that is nurtured and won. I envy you such a bond.
Peace, Lee
there's nothing we can't whether, --weather
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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I like this affirmation of the relationship between you and your horse. You acknowledge uncanny bond between steed and rider. This is not a casual relationship, but one that is nurtured and won. I envy you such a bond.
Peace, Lee
there's nothing we can't whether, --weather
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you for such a nice review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork.
-You have a good poem
with the correct stanzas
and good rhyme.
-The imagery is effective,
and you show how much
you love riding this horse,
and how special it is.
-The opening lines are
very good and visual.
-He sounds like a great
horse, and you have a
special bond with him.
-A very good conclusion, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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-Nice artwork.
-You have a good poem
with the correct stanzas
and good rhyme.
-The imagery is effective,
and you show how much
you love riding this horse,
and how special it is.
-The opening lines are
very good and visual.
-He sounds like a great
horse, and you have a
special bond with him.
-A very good conclusion, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you for your advice. I've contacted him and hope he can fix the problem. Thank you also for such a great review.
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You are very welcome. You are now on the poetry side, and it looks great. I love the picture and thought you had a very good poem.
When you enter something, just check to make sure it is poetry or fiction. You can change it yourself as long as you haven't released it. After that, Tom has to fix it. I also took out all of the instructions from your review.
Comment from Coco Jane
Some great imagery here.
In stanza 2, is "load" the right word? You and the horse are partners, and "load" makes you sound like a burden.
Stanzas 1-4 have the same meter pattern. Stanza 5 has a shorter first line. Stanzas 6-8 have a longer first line. Is this intentional?
"Lightning speed" seems to be a cliche. Consider something more fresh such as "splashing speed" or "silent speed."
In stanza 8, you accidentally used the wrong form of "weather." The form you use indicates a choice (I don't know whether to wear a raincoat or carry an umbrella).
I like "his senses at the ready." Powerful line.
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reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Some great imagery here.
In stanza 2, is "load" the right word? You and the horse are partners, and "load" makes you sound like a burden.
Stanzas 1-4 have the same meter pattern. Stanza 5 has a shorter first line. Stanzas 6-8 have a longer first line. Is this intentional?
"Lightning speed" seems to be a cliche. Consider something more fresh such as "splashing speed" or "silent speed."
In stanza 8, you accidentally used the wrong form of "weather." The form you use indicates a choice (I don't know whether to wear a raincoat or carry an umbrella).
I like "his senses at the ready." Powerful line.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your valuable advice.
