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Comment from sunnilicious
This was a morbid ode for mother. Death and process of it is wretched. I have some memories that I'd rather not remember. I hope you get through this and remember some good times. God bless you :)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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This was a morbid ode for mother. Death and process of it is wretched. I have some memories that I'd rather not remember. I hope you get through this and remember some good times. God bless you :)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thank you Alicia., it was a sad experience.
Comment from Johnny-artist
One can learn better than so, my dear Treischel. What incredibly wonderful wordage, put in such a forthright and heartfelt manner of discourse.
A way of deep and caring and sensitive and tearful live, with remarkable imagery.
You know, I came across a consideration that could find a home. The very last of it all. A dismissal of an exclamation point. It could have for an easier read.
Thank you very much for sharing.
Yours with great regard,
white
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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One can learn better than so, my dear Treischel. What incredibly wonderful wordage, put in such a forthright and heartfelt manner of discourse.
A way of deep and caring and sensitive and tearful live, with remarkable imagery.
You know, I came across a consideration that could find a home. The very last of it all. A dismissal of an exclamation point. It could have for an easier read.
Thank you very much for sharing.
Yours with great regard,
white
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you White. Sorry it took so long to reply. I have been off the site for several months dealing with publishing and marketing a book. I appreciate your comment and the suggestion.
Comment from WryWriter
The one thing that rings so loud and clear in this poem of remembrance is that your mother knew she was loved. To have family take care of her in her last moments surely meant the world to her. The thoughtfulness of the Alleluia chorus being sung and the prayers for her proved how special her life was, and how complete.
I especially liked this:
We slept where we could,
someone, or several, always keeping vigil.
Talking gently or singing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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The one thing that rings so loud and clear in this poem of remembrance is that your mother knew she was loved. To have family take care of her in her last moments surely meant the world to her. The thoughtfulness of the Alleluia chorus being sung and the prayers for her proved how special her life was, and how complete.
I especially liked this:
We slept where we could,
someone, or several, always keeping vigil.
Talking gently or singing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you WryWriter. I appreciate your caring comments. Your reference made me smile. Sorry it took so long to reply. I have been off the site for several months dealing with publishing and marketing a book.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That truly brought tears to my eyes, Tom. I love that song, and how lovely that you all sang it to her in her final moments. My dad died in December of that year, and my mum followed three years later. I miss them both. Your poem really is emotional, but very beautiful, my friend. I am so sorry for your loss, I know just how your feel. Big hugs, my friend, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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That truly brought tears to my eyes, Tom. I love that song, and how lovely that you all sang it to her in her final moments. My dad died in December of that year, and my mum followed three years later. I miss them both. Your poem really is emotional, but very beautiful, my friend. I am so sorry for your loss, I know just how your feel. Big hugs, my friend, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2019
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Thank you Sandra. Sorry it took so long to respond. I have been very busy with promoting my current book - Take Flight: The Sonnets, as well as getting my new book - Animated Stills published. I really appreciate your sentiments.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Mother's Day definitely is the perfect time to recall the words, thoughts and memories which we hold dear.
It sounds like your mother was much loved and cherished and supported when it mattered the most.
I hope you find some time to recall the love and happiness you shared this Mother's Day.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Mother's Day definitely is the perfect time to recall the words, thoughts and memories which we hold dear.
It sounds like your mother was much loved and cherished and supported when it mattered the most.
I hope you find some time to recall the love and happiness you shared this Mother's Day.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Thank you Shirley.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for conveying your experience of the loss of your mother in this compelling free verse. I especially admired your including her sense of fear and someone saying it was alright to "go now," along with your dramatic "alleluia" repeats. Her ninety-three years are well proclaimed on her gravestone. I hope you can share this touching ensemble with some of your family on Sunday. Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you for conveying your experience of the loss of your mother in this compelling free verse. I especially admired your including her sense of fear and someone saying it was alright to "go now," along with your dramatic "alleluia" repeats. Her ninety-three years are well proclaimed on her gravestone. I hope you can share this touching ensemble with some of your family on Sunday. Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you Joan. I will.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is one of the most touching pieces of free verse I have ever read. Quite clearly and simply you have told it like it was. It is so detailed and yet so respectful.
Not a pleasant end but the one she wanted, in her own home, surrounded by her family. That has to be better than in the impersonal atmosphere of a hospital.
No wonder it has imprinted itself so indelibly on your memory.
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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This is one of the most touching pieces of free verse I have ever read. Quite clearly and simply you have told it like it was. It is so detailed and yet so respectful.
Not a pleasant end but the one she wanted, in her own home, surrounded by her family. That has to be better than in the impersonal atmosphere of a hospital.
No wonder it has imprinted itself so indelibly on your memory.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you Jim. I appreciate your sensitive comments. I do feel it was one of my best free verse. The emotions just flowed. I also appreciate the stars.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem for mother's day. Those last few days with a parent is hard to forget, and that is why we always have to remember to make the memories powerful and memorable for years to come.
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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A very well-written free verse poem for mother's day. Those last few days with a parent is hard to forget, and that is why we always have to remember to make the memories powerful and memorable for years to come.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you Sandra. Yes. It becomes new every mother's day, birthday, and Christmas. For sure.
Comment from MissMerri
Wow... you said it all and so amazingly real too. I was in tears before the end. I miss my mom too. Thank you for writing this. I will remember your vivid description for a long time.
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Wow... you said it all and so amazingly real too. I was in tears before the end. I miss my mom too. Thank you for writing this. I will remember your vivid description for a long time.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you Miss Merri. For sharing this emotional memory with me.
Comment from damommy
Oh, Treischel, this is such a beautiful poem about your mother's passing. It was almost too hard for me to read because I love my dear mother just a year ago this month. This is the first Mother's Day without her. We were fortunate enough to keep her home with caretakers. I love it that you sang and prayed together. I have no doubt that she knew you were there. The last thing my mother said to me was, "Will I get better?" and I told her, "Yes, sweetheart, you will get better."
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Oh, Treischel, this is such a beautiful poem about your mother's passing. It was almost too hard for me to read because I love my dear mother just a year ago this month. This is the first Mother's Day without her. We were fortunate enough to keep her home with caretakers. I love it that you sang and prayed together. I have no doubt that she knew you were there. The last thing my mother said to me was, "Will I get better?" and I told her, "Yes, sweetheart, you will get better."
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you damommy. It is hard to lose a mother. My heart goes out to you too. Bless you for you comments.
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Thank you for understanding. I'm an only child so there was no one there but me and caregiver.
