Seeing In The Dark
A heightened sense of awareness.12 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is both a juxtaposition and metaphor. The imagery definitely draws the reader in. This could very well be a real-life sitiuation. It is very poignant. This is a lovely tribute to the love the blind hold in their hearts. It is a special study for all of us to reflect on how they strengthen other senses and challenges us to examine how easily we take all of this gift for granted. It behooves us to pause to be grateful. Very well written. I am voting for this one. I give this A+
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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This is both a juxtaposition and metaphor. The imagery definitely draws the reader in. This could very well be a real-life sitiuation. It is very poignant. This is a lovely tribute to the love the blind hold in their hearts. It is a special study for all of us to reflect on how they strengthen other senses and challenges us to examine how easily we take all of this gift for granted. It behooves us to pause to be grateful. Very well written. I am voting for this one. I give this A+
Comment Written 17-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Thank you so much for supporting this poem, through your considered review and your vote. I appreciate both very much. your insights about love, senses, and gratitude are at the heart of this poem.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfetlt poem about a couple who are both blind and they seem to see each other as they are in a different perspective as what we would imagine with seeing eyes.
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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A very well-written heartfetlt poem about a couple who are both blind and they seem to see each other as they are in a different perspective as what we would imagine with seeing eyes.
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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I think being in the dark really concentrates the senses. I know that if I am feeling something, such as a small screw that needs doing up, I will shut my eyes to concentrate.
Comment from LG Wolfe
This poem is exceptional. Every line is meaningful, carefully constructed but so emotional. My favourite, 'In our echo chamber - your ears hear my heart.' Also, 'our tactile world makes sense.' Your narrator is so comfortable, loving and loved, she makes her world sound very appealing. And I have the feeling she finds beauty in whatever her world is at the time. Amazing.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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This poem is exceptional. Every line is meaningful, carefully constructed but so emotional. My favourite, 'In our echo chamber - your ears hear my heart.' Also, 'our tactile world makes sense.' Your narrator is so comfortable, loving and loved, she makes her world sound very appealing. And I have the feeling she finds beauty in whatever her world is at the time. Amazing.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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What a lovely reviewer you are! I was most proud of using 'echo chamber' that you picked out to mention. Thank you so much for that 6. I am touched.
Comment from Rmocruz
You have masterfully complied with the being blind writing prompt.
You have poetically presented a heartfelt message.
The use of repetition is effective.
I enjoyed reading this promising contest entry.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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You have masterfully complied with the being blind writing prompt.
You have poetically presented a heartfelt message.
The use of repetition is effective.
I enjoyed reading this promising contest entry.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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I like your reassuring review words: masterfully, poetically, effective, and promising. Thanks so much.
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You're welcome, my pleasure.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is absolutely exquisite, Mystery Writer. In the dark, they are equal, and "see" all the same things - just with their other senses: their "textures and tastes," "ears hear my heart," "you'll see what you mean to me." This is poetic perfection that seems like a no-close-seconds kind of entry for this contest on Being Blind. Absolutely masterful. Good luck to you, though you will NOT need it. xo
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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This is absolutely exquisite, Mystery Writer. In the dark, they are equal, and "see" all the same things - just with their other senses: their "textures and tastes," "ears hear my heart," "you'll see what you mean to me." This is poetic perfection that seems like a no-close-seconds kind of entry for this contest on Being Blind. Absolutely masterful. Good luck to you, though you will NOT need it. xo
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thank you so much for your all-seeing positivity about this poem's perfection. I hope you are a seer about its success!
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Me, too!
Comment from RodG
There is something both exotic and erotic about making love in the dark, as your other senses are so much more acute. He is blind to your flaws and vice versa. Good use of the refrain "in the dark" to emphasize the mood. Rod
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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There is something both exotic and erotic about making love in the dark, as your other senses are so much more acute. He is blind to your flaws and vice versa. Good use of the refrain "in the dark" to emphasize the mood. Rod
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thanks for your review Rod. The older we get the darker we like it perhaps.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is difficult to imagine being blind and most of my inspiration comes from what I see, so this would be a difficult challenge for me to write, I loved your presentation here and I am not sure if you are blind or not, but animals and very sensitive to touch and can tune into peoples feelings, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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It is difficult to imagine being blind and most of my inspiration comes from what I see, so this would be a difficult challenge for me to write, I loved your presentation here and I am not sure if you are blind or not, but animals and very sensitive to touch and can tune into peoples feelings, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thanks for reviewing. It seems that you write from witnessed inspiration and I mostly write from imagination. I am not blind, but I kept my eyes shut for a long time before I wrote this poem. It heightened my awareness of the little things, but I surely would not want it to be permanent.
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You kept your eyes shut? I admire you for that, love Dolly x
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Not while i was writing it! But yes, for a couple of hours to get the feeling.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
This is a sensuously beautiful offering for this contest and your final line there of the light in the darkness really seals the deal -- gonna be tough to beat this one!! ;) ;) Great job and great formatting -- best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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This is a sensuously beautiful offering for this contest and your final line there of the light in the darkness really seals the deal -- gonna be tough to beat this one!! ;) ;) Great job and great formatting -- best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks for your supportive comments. I tried to keep it simple and understated.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Your dog and you can see in the dark, the dog can see what you mean in this light, you know each other's textures and tastes; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Your dog and you can see in the dark, the dog can see what you mean in this light, you know each other's textures and tastes; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks for reviewing. Our other senses are so important when one is lost, and the dog can make up for it because his senses are so sharply attuned.
Comment from Nika2016
Very beautiful presentation and words describing the sensual feelings of love, tastefully. A very nice poem to read.
I love the dog in its blond appearance. They have great personalities.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Very beautiful presentation and words describing the sensual feelings of love, tastefully. A very nice poem to read.
I love the dog in its blond appearance. They have great personalities.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you so much for this review. I wanted to capture the feeling of using the other senses and I am pleased you noticed the tasteful aspect. And the dog... such an important companion.
