Wimpy Woolies
Inverted Refrain - Potlatch Practice19 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Loved the tightly-knitted bunch in your Wimpy Woolies Inverted Refrain poem and following them right through to the 'fleeces spun to fuzzy thread - sounds a bit like my spinning. Enjoyed reading your light-hearted, woolly sheep,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Loved the tightly-knitted bunch in your Wimpy Woolies Inverted Refrain poem and following them right through to the 'fleeces spun to fuzzy thread - sounds a bit like my spinning. Enjoyed reading your light-hearted, woolly sheep,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thank you. You do spinning? A lady of many talents.
Comment from judiverse
Very interesting subject. The reader really gets a sense of place and of the sheep. It sounds like a ballad, with the man telling about giving his wife two baby lambs and pinking shears. Shearing the sheep is beneficial for the useful wool and to the sheep as their coats would be unmanageable without it. Great work with your inverted refrain. Lovely picture, too. judi
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Very interesting subject. The reader really gets a sense of place and of the sheep. It sounds like a ballad, with the man telling about giving his wife two baby lambs and pinking shears. Shearing the sheep is beneficial for the useful wool and to the sheep as their coats would be unmanageable without it. Great work with your inverted refrain. Lovely picture, too. judi
Comment Written 26-May-2019
reply by the author on 27-May-2019
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Thank you, Judi, for this wonderful review.
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You're welcome. Very impressive poem! judi
Comment from Pantygynt
Living as I do on a sheep farm I was most taken with the idea of shearing a flock (rather than a herd) with pinking shears. I think the resultand thread might look like this:
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reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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Living as I do on a sheep farm I was most taken with the idea of shearing a flock (rather than a herd) with pinking shears. I think the resultand thread might look like this:
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Comment Written 26-May-2019
reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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Hahahahaha. It would certainly take a while.
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
You wrote an excellent poem using Potlatch structure, which is new to me. I enjoyed your story about the growing herd from a pair of an eve and ram.
Mt best,
Deborah
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Dear Author,
You wrote an excellent poem using Potlatch structure, which is new to me. I enjoyed your story about the growing herd from a pair of an eve and ram.
Mt best,
Deborah
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thank you, Deborah.
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My pleasure
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Interesting form and you did a great job with it. I like that you followed his having lunch with the woolies having lunch on the grass. Clever.
Lambs are the cuuutest things! My aunt had some on her farm for a while. They gamboled about just as you'd expect them to, and they really DID follow the kids everywhere. Baa-aaa! :)
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Interesting form and you did a great job with it. I like that you followed his having lunch with the woolies having lunch on the grass. Clever.
Lambs are the cuuutest things! My aunt had some on her farm for a while. They gamboled about just as you'd expect them to, and they really DID follow the kids everywhere. Baa-aaa! :)
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thank you. I've always wanted a sheep and a cow. I don't know why, I just do.
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely written poem describing sheep and their lives in this entry for the inverted refrain for the potlatch. Perfect picture choice.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Nicely written poem describing sheep and their lives in this entry for the inverted refrain for the potlatch. Perfect picture choice.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thank you for reviewing.
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My pleasure.
Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written inverted refrain about the herd of sheep stand in waiting for the shearing season and everyone who can have their own shearing scissors to get the work done quickly.
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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A very well-written inverted refrain about the herd of sheep stand in waiting for the shearing season and everyone who can have their own shearing scissors to get the work done quickly.
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from LIJ Red
I believe you have written an excellent poem for the potlatch challenge...I have not approached this one yet, it looks--complicated. I guess sheep are the animal best at both feeding and clothing humans world wide...Arby's Greek gyro is pretty good...
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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I believe you have written an excellent poem for the potlatch challenge...I have not approached this one yet, it looks--complicated. I guess sheep are the animal best at both feeding and clothing humans world wide...Arby's Greek gyro is pretty good...
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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I've never cared for sheep's meat in any form. My sons do, though. Thanks for reviewing. Looking forward to yours.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Yvonne. This is an interesting poetry form. There are so many of them. I'm intrigued by this one which you've penned well. So far my fave is the Retourne which I'm enjoying. Marilyn
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Hi Yvonne. This is an interesting poetry form. There are so many of them. I'm intrigued by this one which you've penned well. So far my fave is the Retourne which I'm enjoying. Marilyn
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Thank you for reviewing. I like the Retourne, too.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a super job, Yvonne, with your inverted refrain. To begin, the picture selection is beautiful. Good job, too, with the rules of this complex style.
I like how your couplet in each verse gives more meaning and the words/lines are not just a repeat of the earlier ones. Those lines describe more than the obvious each time. For example, one use of the line has the observer eating lunch. When that line appears again, the sheep are having lunch.
Good job with your rhymes, the smooth flow of words, the great color scheme, and the storyline. All work together to create an enjoyable, well-written poem.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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You did a super job, Yvonne, with your inverted refrain. To begin, the picture selection is beautiful. Good job, too, with the rules of this complex style.
I like how your couplet in each verse gives more meaning and the words/lines are not just a repeat of the earlier ones. Those lines describe more than the obvious each time. For example, one use of the line has the observer eating lunch. When that line appears again, the sheep are having lunch.
Good job with your rhymes, the smooth flow of words, the great color scheme, and the storyline. All work together to create an enjoyable, well-written poem.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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What a wonderful review. Thank you.
