Summer Rains
A sonnet34 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Rod. An excellent job on this well described and beautifully illustrated poem. Congratulations for your win. Your sonnet's ending couplet is very nice. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Hi Rod. An excellent job on this well described and beautifully illustrated poem. Congratulations for your win. Your sonnet's ending couplet is very nice. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Marilyn, very much for your lovely review of SUMMER RAINS. Rod
Comment from Clive Byerley
Strong rhythm; clear images; I felt I was there. In line eleven should that be 'roar', not soar? I am not really a sea person so I'll be guided by you.
Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Strong rhythm; clear images; I felt I was there. In line eleven should that be 'roar', not soar? I am not really a sea person so I'll be guided by you.
Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Clive, for taking the time to read and review SUMMER RAINS. So pleased I could put you there. Originally, I did have ?roar,? but realized I was repeating myself with ?bellow.?
Rod
Comment from Heather Knight
Your poem is beautifully nostalgic. I love the artwork you've chosen to go with it.
These are my favorite lines:
When showers came they danced along the shore
like ballerinas high upon their toes
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Your poem is beautifully nostalgic. I love the artwork you've chosen to go with it.
These are my favorite lines:
When showers came they danced along the shore
like ballerinas high upon their toes
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Maria, for your kind praise of SUMMER RAINS. I am especially pleased you like those particular lines as they are my favorites, too.
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A nicely written sonnet capturing the four required words. Your descriptions created visions that kept me engaged throughout your work such as "transparent curtains rose." Good work.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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A nicely written sonnet capturing the four required words. Your descriptions created visions that kept me engaged throughout your work such as "transparent curtains rose." Good work.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Lance, for sharing SUMMER RAINS. I am delighted the sonnet kept you engaged throughout.
Comment from Boogienights
This is lovely. A very creative and descriptive poem, about my favorite weather...rain! I was going to enter this contest, but I'm glad i didn't because now i can vote for this. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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This is lovely. A very creative and descriptive poem, about my favorite weather...rain! I was going to enter this contest, but I'm glad i didn't because now i can vote for this. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for your gracious response to SUMMER RAINS. I didn't mean to scare you off, but certainly welcome your endorsement and kind praise.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
You did an excellent job of blending the word list into your poem in such a way that they were seamless.
Wonderful imagery! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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You did an excellent job of blending the word list into your poem in such a way that they were seamless.
Wonderful imagery! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Many thanks, Rhonda, for sharing SUMMER RAINS. I am delighted you thought my blending of words was "seamless" and that you enjoyed the imagery.
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is an interesting poem! bouncy to read because of the rhyme and rhythm being well done. I agree how it feels like on a hot steamy day and the humidity sky high. Jeep writing! Very enjoyable reading.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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This is an interesting poem! bouncy to read because of the rhyme and rhythm being well done. I agree how it feels like on a hot steamy day and the humidity sky high. Jeep writing! Very enjoyable reading.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for sharing SUMMER RAINS, Patricia. I am very pleased you enjoyed the "bouncy" cadence and rhyme.
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you're welcome!
Comment from juliaSjames
This is a beautiful, accomplished sonnet in its own right. Masterful really! Some of the imagery is amazingly creative, showers dancing like ballerinas en pointe, ragged chains of clouds.
Very nice intimate touch with the use of direct, everyday speech, especially contrasted with the high poesie of the sonnet form.
With regard to the contest you have incorporated the required words seamlessly into your write.
Good luck. This has all the marks of a winner.
Blessings, Julia
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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This is a beautiful, accomplished sonnet in its own right. Masterful really! Some of the imagery is amazingly creative, showers dancing like ballerinas en pointe, ragged chains of clouds.
Very nice intimate touch with the use of direct, everyday speech, especially contrasted with the high poesie of the sonnet form.
With regard to the contest you have incorporated the required words seamlessly into your write.
Good luck. This has all the marks of a winner.
Blessings, Julia
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Julia, for taking the time to read SUMMER RAINS so closely and response so graphically! I am thrilled you enjoyed my use of everyday speech as I try to write to all-aged readers.
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You're welcome:))
I find that quality of any kind elicits a response from all age groups. I recall my three grandkids, 9, 7 and 5 listening dumbstruck as the three tenors performed on television.
Have a great weekend.
Blessings, Julia
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent sonnet and a lovely poem illustrating the beauty of summer rain in contrast with mood and age.
This is a fine entry into the contest and I wish you great luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Excellent sonnet and a lovely poem illustrating the beauty of summer rain in contrast with mood and age.
This is a fine entry into the contest and I wish you great luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for sharing SUMMER RAINS, Gloria, and your kind praise of my sonnet.
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a lovely use of those words. You went above and beyond with this prompt. In fact, I just voted for this poem. I see it is doing very well. I'm not surprised. I like the little clauses that you use at the end of lines--like "a welcome fleet," and "small relief." I like lots of your images as well. My favorite is "youth's quick song." The entire poem is simply well crafted.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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What a lovely use of those words. You went above and beyond with this prompt. In fact, I just voted for this poem. I see it is doing very well. I'm not surprised. I like the little clauses that you use at the end of lines--like "a welcome fleet," and "small relief." I like lots of your images as well. My favorite is "youth's quick song." The entire poem is simply well crafted.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Debbie, for your wonderful review of SUMMER RAINS and your endorsement. I am especially pleased you like my phrases and images so much.
