Summer Rains
A sonnet34 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
I've always wished that God would water the earth at night - as He did in the garden. That would be nice - then days could be saved for getting out in the beauty of nature.
Yet I know some places yearn for rain - no matter when.
Good poem, using the words and telling how rain is needed.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I've always wished that God would water the earth at night - as He did in the garden. That would be nice - then days could be saved for getting out in the beauty of nature.
Yet I know some places yearn for rain - no matter when.
Good poem, using the words and telling how rain is needed.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Gail, for sharing SUMMER RAINS and your kind praise.
Comment from nomi338
Congratulations. You hit all the required spots. Growing up on the East Coast, I well remember how good it felt to get some relief from a humid day with the occasionally brief downpour. Now that I live on the desert called LA, my best chance for relief from the searing heat is to go inside where the air conditioner is going 24/7.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Congratulations. You hit all the required spots. Growing up on the East Coast, I well remember how good it felt to get some relief from a humid day with the occasionally brief downpour. Now that I live on the desert called LA, my best chance for relief from the searing heat is to go inside where the air conditioner is going 24/7.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I grew up in L.A., so I know what you?re talking about. Many thanks for sharing SUMMER RAINS and your interesting comments.
Comment from June Sargent
Summer rain is like summer love. Short and sweet, and sometimes all too brief! But comforting and encourages growth of greener pastures for the future. Nice job of using all the specific words.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Summer rain is like summer love. Short and sweet, and sometimes all too brief! But comforting and encourages growth of greener pastures for the future. Nice job of using all the specific words.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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What a great comparison and so true! Many thanks, June, for sharing SUMMER RAINS.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This sonnet is excellent in every way. It vividly conveys a longing for relief from suffocating heat, and the rhyming and metrical patterns are sustained throughout. Figures of speech are excellent The second, deeper
theme of youth's brevity, likened to the rains, is very moving.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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This sonnet is excellent in every way. It vividly conveys a longing for relief from suffocating heat, and the rhyming and metrical patterns are sustained throughout. Figures of speech are excellent The second, deeper
theme of youth's brevity, likened to the rains, is very moving.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Janice, for your wonderful response to SUMMER RAINS. I am especially pleased you like the secondary theme of youth?s brevity.
Comment from LIJ Red
If no judge thinks steamy the adjective(or adverb) is distinct from steam the noun, you met the word-list prompt, and otherwise, the sonnet looks excellent to me.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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If no judge thinks steamy the adjective(or adverb) is distinct from steam the noun, you met the word-list prompt, and otherwise, the sonnet looks excellent to me.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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The poem is currently being reviewed by the CEC, and I hope they allow my variations of some words. Many thanks for sharing SUMMER RAINS and your kind praise.
Comment from kahpot
I love this poem and its meaning, along with the beautiful artwork, looking at the words below that are to be used for this prompt it shows rain not rains hope I am wrong but might be worth a look to keep this excellent work in the contest, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I love this poem and its meaning, along with the beautiful artwork, looking at the words below that are to be used for this prompt it shows rain not rains hope I am wrong but might be worth a look to keep this excellent work in the contest, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I am delighted you love my sonnet and the accompanying artwork, kahpot. The poem is currently being reviewed by the CEC.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wowza! This is a GORGEOUS poem! I just loved the phrase "ragged chains of swollen, angry clouds." That is so artfully descriptive! I also love "they danced along the shore like ballerina high upon their toes." I can totally imagine that! You have done QUITE the job here! I wish you the best in the contest! xo
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Wowza! This is a GORGEOUS poem! I just loved the phrase "ragged chains of swollen, angry clouds." That is so artfully descriptive! I also love "they danced along the shore like ballerina high upon their toes." I can totally imagine that! You have done QUITE the job here! I wish you the best in the contest! xo
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I am thrilled by your response to my sonnet, Rachelle. Thank you so much for your kind praise.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
In perfect meter your rain danced over my skin and drenched me in your words here. As long as these rains are gentle summer showers then I'll withstand the storm for hours and hours, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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In perfect meter your rain danced over my skin and drenched me in your words here. As long as these rains are gentle summer showers then I'll withstand the storm for hours and hours, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I am so pleased you, the master sonneteer, like mine, Dolly. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from victor 66
Yes, I remember those days as a child. It would be very hot and a storm would come up and it would start a torrential rain. We would get our bathing suits on and run around in the rain. That is, right up to the time it started lightning and our parents what call us in. Those are a magic moments for a child. Your poem brought back pleasant memories Best wishes.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Yes, I remember those days as a child. It would be very hot and a storm would come up and it would start a torrential rain. We would get our bathing suits on and run around in the rain. That is, right up to the time it started lightning and our parents what call us in. Those are a magic moments for a child. Your poem brought back pleasant memories Best wishes.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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I am delighted I could bring back some pleasant childhood memories for you, Victor. Thank you for sharing my poem.
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You're welcome. And it was my pleasure.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a beautifully written sonnet. Your descriptions are vivid and make the reader feel the heat and aridity. I enjoyed your use of simile (i.e., "like ballerinas high upon their toes"), and your rhymes are well chosen. My one question, merely because I've never responded to a "Use These Words" prompt, is whether you're allowed to use versions of the words, i.e., "steamy" and "rains." I'd hate to see a wonderful poem be disqualified over a technicality, so I definitely hope variations are allowed.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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This is a beautifully written sonnet. Your descriptions are vivid and make the reader feel the heat and aridity. I enjoyed your use of simile (i.e., "like ballerinas high upon their toes"), and your rhymes are well chosen. My one question, merely because I've never responded to a "Use These Words" prompt, is whether you're allowed to use versions of the words, i.e., "steamy" and "rains." I'd hate to see a wonderful poem be disqualified over a technicality, so I definitely hope variations are allowed.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Michele, for your wonderful response to SUMMER RAINS. You ask some very good questions. In the past the CEC, when reviewing contest entries, would allow use of variations of the words. There was nothing saying such variations in this contest are forbidden.
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I'm glad to hear it, as the poem is lovely.
