Spirit Shines
The power of love to overcome2 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
I really enjoyed your thoughts in this poem. I like your introduction--where love awaits. It makes me feel as though love is out there for everyone, ours for the taking. I also like how you tie it in to God in the last line.
Your syllable count is good, and I would not change a word. My only suggestion would be to center each line. I think that is required because it makes it look like a star. Your entry is also smaller than other entries. You might ask Tom about that.
Good luck in the contest. This is a good entry.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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I really enjoyed your thoughts in this poem. I like your introduction--where love awaits. It makes me feel as though love is out there for everyone, ours for the taking. I also like how you tie it in to God in the last line.
Your syllable count is good, and I would not change a word. My only suggestion would be to center each line. I think that is required because it makes it look like a star. Your entry is also smaller than other entries. You might ask Tom about that.
Good luck in the contest. This is a good entry.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thanks I'll see about the star.
Comment from moongirlwriter
This poem is interesting, I don't think that first line prompt follows the rules that it be a complete statement but the rest certainly does. The word "where" doesn't do it for me. . .I could be wrong though. The lat one certainly does, "God". :) Best of luck with this strict syllable promt.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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This poem is interesting, I don't think that first line prompt follows the rules that it be a complete statement but the rest certainly does. The word "where" doesn't do it for me. . .I could be wrong though. The lat one certainly does, "God". :) Best of luck with this strict syllable promt.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the review
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