Meditation Moment
Picture yourself on the mountain top and read breathily...11 total reviews
Comment from Chip Kuzborski
Yvette, this magnificent poem reads like a meditation. It did what great writing does- transports. You took me to a place where I happily succumbed to the ancient, soothing, healing wind, which entered me as I inhaled. I absorbed it's wisdom then exhaled, and it calmly left my body, bound for others in a perpetual cycle, carrying awareness and peace. One of my favorite reads here in awhile, thanks for sharing your gift! (well-deserved win, you got my vote)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Yvette, this magnificent poem reads like a meditation. It did what great writing does- transports. You took me to a place where I happily succumbed to the ancient, soothing, healing wind, which entered me as I inhaled. I absorbed it's wisdom then exhaled, and it calmly left my body, bound for others in a perpetual cycle, carrying awareness and peace. One of my favorite reads here in awhile, thanks for sharing your gift! (well-deserved win, you got my vote)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Hooray - meditation was EXACTLY what I was going for there!! :) ;) You know, Chip, after I read the poem's description, I could hear the lines of a 'meditation leader' in my head....something about the 'every line had to be a complete statement', I guess.... who knows with the blonde, yeah? :) ;) So, first, thank you for this wonderful review and those awesome stars -- they mean a lot coming from a talented poet such as yourself (and I truly mean that!). :) And, second, I'm so glad you enjoyed it...that, right there, means more than you know!! Take good care out there and have a great week! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I'm just returning from a water yoga class, and, ironically, this is the first piece I read! I feel as if I'm still in class! You did a wonderful job with this. It was peaceful and energizing, exactly as a meditation should be! Good luck in the contest. OMMMMMMM. xo
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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I'm just returning from a water yoga class, and, ironically, this is the first piece I read! I feel as if I'm still in class! You did a wonderful job with this. It was peaceful and energizing, exactly as a meditation should be! Good luck in the contest. OMMMMMMM. xo
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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Thank you for the energizing review -- hope water yoga didn't leave you to 'prun-ish'... LOL! ;) ;)
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No, a quick revitalizing shower with some good moisturizing bodywash, and I'm good as new. (Not that I either of those commodities, however, mind you...) xo
Comment from Gail Denham
Interesting poem and form. it would be nice to sit and contemplate at times. We stay so very busy - even tho we're retired. Reflecting, letting the wind soothe us - a good idea.
nice poem
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Interesting poem and form. it would be nice to sit and contemplate at times. We stay so very busy - even tho we're retired. Reflecting, letting the wind soothe us - a good idea.
nice poem
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your time and your review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Excuse me for a moment. I have to have an ice cream cone... (*silly grin*)
Two choc'late donuts yesterday,
a yummy ice cream cone today,
I'd climb your mountain, as you say
but it's not easy when you weigh
about as much as one big rock,
or maybe someone's fishing dock.
Perhaps it's time that I took stock
before the masses start to gawk. :))
Alright, okay, I'm breathin', I'm breathin'...
WONDERFUL Joseph's Star. I'm running out of vocab to review your work! (LOL)
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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Excuse me for a moment. I have to have an ice cream cone... (*silly grin*)
Two choc'late donuts yesterday,
a yummy ice cream cone today,
I'd climb your mountain, as you say
but it's not easy when you weigh
about as much as one big rock,
or maybe someone's fishing dock.
Perhaps it's time that I took stock
before the masses start to gawk. :))
Alright, okay, I'm breathin', I'm breathin'...
WONDERFUL Joseph's Star. I'm running out of vocab to review your work! (LOL)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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Sooooo....I'm to guess that Miss Priss won't be the only one in the house watching their diet (whether voluntarily or other wise?!! :) ;) LOL! You do so know how to make me smile, though - a gift you have! :) ;) Thanx for the review, O Lady of the North, and have a beautiful Sunday! ;)
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I'm glad I made you smile. :)) You make me smile all the time!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Joseph star poem about meditation on the mountain alone while the wind blows away the cobwebs that blocks your mind before. Return renewed.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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A very well-written Joseph star poem about meditation on the mountain alone while the wind blows away the cobwebs that blocks your mind before. Return renewed.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review, Sandra - always appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These moments charge our batteries and renew us with the energy to continue in life and prosper. Your 'Joseph's Star' is appropriate and uplifting, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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These moments charge our batteries and renew us with the energy to continue in life and prosper. Your 'Joseph's Star' is appropriate and uplifting, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review, Dolly!
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's lovely, and it looks difficult. One Joseph's star looks hard enough, and you have three that join together and form a message. I think you may have a winner here. Good luck.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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That's lovely, and it looks difficult. One Joseph's star looks hard enough, and you have three that join together and form a message. I think you may have a winner here. Good luck.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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My sincerest thanks for your review!
Comment from Huberta van Akkeren
This is an excellent example of a Joseph's star poem. It flows beautifully. the images created are vivid and clear incorporating all the senses. You can feel yourself on that mountain top. Well done and good luck in the competition
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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This is an excellent example of a Joseph's star poem. It flows beautifully. the images created are vivid and clear incorporating all the senses. You can feel yourself on that mountain top. Well done and good luck in the competition
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2019
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Wow, Huberta! You certainly just made my day!! Thank you so very much for your wonderful review and for those lovely stars! Please have a wonderful weekend!
Comment from Debbie Pope
Hey, Mystery Writer, Yvette. You can't fool me. I can spot your poems. I knew that Meditation Moment was yours after I read the first two lines. Actually, I knew after the word "Stand." If I really like a poem, chances are, it's yours. In this one, you call upon all of our feelings and emotions to embrace life. This is really good.
I did check to make sure that I was right. Can't make a fool of myself you know. But I knew it was you. I'm just a careful person.
Waiting on the next chapter of your book, girl.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Hey, Mystery Writer, Yvette. You can't fool me. I can spot your poems. I knew that Meditation Moment was yours after I read the first two lines. Actually, I knew after the word "Stand." If I really like a poem, chances are, it's yours. In this one, you call upon all of our feelings and emotions to embrace life. This is really good.
I did check to make sure that I was right. Can't make a fool of myself you know. But I knew it was you. I'm just a careful person.
Waiting on the next chapter of your book, girl.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you -- needed that smile! You do so know how to make me!! ;) ;)
Getting the husband and the middle son off to Japan tomorrow afternoon (son's studying abroad this summer and dad's taking a week to sight-see with him!) THEN I can breathe and concentrate on 'bigger things' ....took the day yesterday (between packing and such) to read up to the point that I left off .... yeah I know where I want to go, but had to verify I had everything in my head straight before plowing forward... (sure you can relate to that one, my friend in 'OCD World' -- LOL!!).
Thanx so much Beautiful Friend -- and let me know via email how things are going! ;) ;) Take care of you! ;)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about the need, practice the art of meditation, inhaling, breathing, closing eyes and following the order and get to begin a peaceful and natural living; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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This speaks about the need, practice the art of meditation, inhaling, breathing, closing eyes and following the order and get to begin a peaceful and natural living; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for your review.
