Bless This Mess
Neat-freaks shouldn't be parents.16 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written piece makes excellent use of specific details to describe
the messes mothers have to deal with on a day-to-day basis. I like the upbeat lines about being tolerant.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This well-written piece makes excellent use of specific details to describe
the messes mothers have to deal with on a day-to-day basis. I like the upbeat lines about being tolerant.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thanks for your comments, Janice. Maybe I should have put more upbeat lines in... there's rather too many complaints!
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Oh, no, I thought the balance
was just right!
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It was honest at least.
Comment from Mia Twysted
A very true statement about the life of a working parent. There is always so much to do and never enough hours in the day.
You express the up and downs of raising children. The good, the bad, the messy, and the love you get for it in return. This piece reminds you to not take it all for granted.
Good luck
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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A very true statement about the life of a working parent. There is always so much to do and never enough hours in the day.
You express the up and downs of raising children. The good, the bad, the messy, and the love you get for it in return. This piece reminds you to not take it all for granted.
Good luck
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thanks for your comments, Mia. Perhaps I spent too much time moaning in the poem and not enough on the benefits and love.
Comment from moongirlwriter
Oh yes, mom/dad. . .because this too shall all pass. It truly does help though for children to HELP keep their stuff organized, but here again. . .it's more work for us, initially anyway. Incentives help, putting music on and seeing if WE can get it cleaned up by the end of the song helps, using a cleanup chart with a prize at the end of the week for work well done, helps but I promise you. . .one day you will look back and wish they were back to that age again when their creative play included messes. :) Nice job with the writing. :) You're doing good mom/dad.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Oh yes, mom/dad. . .because this too shall all pass. It truly does help though for children to HELP keep their stuff organized, but here again. . .it's more work for us, initially anyway. Incentives help, putting music on and seeing if WE can get it cleaned up by the end of the song helps, using a cleanup chart with a prize at the end of the week for work well done, helps but I promise you. . .one day you will look back and wish they were back to that age again when their creative play included messes. :) Nice job with the writing. :) You're doing good mom/dad.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Thanks for your comments - they are all excellent strategies! I like that they involve the family, music, and incentive. Creativity is to be encouraged, not tidied away.
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That is so true, I remember shoes. . .in every room of the house where my youngest daughter had been. Having taught pre-school, there is value in children organizing their belongings. It's kind of like organizing their thoughts. . .but the is so much more vallue in creative play. :)
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well. . .my note went. I wanted to finish a word "their". Oh well. :)
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So true... in several aspects: learning to be responsible and organized, and enjoying creativity.
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:)
Comment from barkingdog
KInd of too much complaining before she say's she'll turn a blind eye to it.
If she spoke of 'him' instead of 'you and your' it would be more internal thought ... not said to the child.
Other than that. The form is fine.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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KInd of too much complaining before she say's she'll turn a blind eye to it.
If she spoke of 'him' instead of 'you and your' it would be more internal thought ... not said to the child.
Other than that. The form is fine.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Thanks for reviewing. You are right, it is a bit too much of a parental rant. I don't have kids myself so have never been subjected to someone else's mass untidiness. This is based on what a friend was telling me about her own household situation.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi mystery writer: I started laughing when I saw the picture because years ago I saw something very similar to that while I was standing in the middle of it. Then I read your poem. The rhyme and meter was really good and I like the message. At the end you wrap it all up and say you're not gonna let that mess cause any problems. Asking to be blind to it was probably a good idea. -Robert-
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Hi mystery writer: I started laughing when I saw the picture because years ago I saw something very similar to that while I was standing in the middle of it. Then I read your poem. The rhyme and meter was really good and I like the message. At the end you wrap it all up and say you're not gonna let that mess cause any problems. Asking to be blind to it was probably a good idea. -Robert-
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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There was probably too much complaining in my poem before it was put aside for playtime on the floor. it isn't based on my own reality as I don't have any kids, just observing others. Some people get hung up about tidiness and miss the fun.
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I liked it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the children that are definitely not made for someone who is a neat freak and cannot stand to be around germs, they will either run away or give in and play with their children in the mess.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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A very well-written poem about the children that are definitely not made for someone who is a neat freak and cannot stand to be around germs, they will either run away or give in and play with their children in the mess.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Running away is a bit extreme... they should get the place hygienic at least, then relax about the untidiness and spend time with the kids.
Comment from LyndaS
Ha! You did a great job trying to describe and keep up with a messy kid. LOVED the picture. My boys' room looked just like this. It was only after finding an apple core on the floor that I snapped and made them clean it. I like how you ended this. One smile and big brown eyes and all is forgiven. Very true. This was soooooo cute! Lynda
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Ha! You did a great job trying to describe and keep up with a messy kid. LOVED the picture. My boys' room looked just like this. It was only after finding an apple core on the floor that I snapped and made them clean it. I like how you ended this. One smile and big brown eyes and all is forgiven. Very true. This was soooooo cute! Lynda
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2019
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Hi sweetie! Thanks for your complimentary review. Only the one apple core? you got off lightly!!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This seems like a parental lament more than a children's poem LOL. The rhyme and meter are consistently solid throughout making for an enjoyable and entertaining read. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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This seems like a parental lament more than a children's poem LOL. The rhyme and meter are consistently solid throughout making for an enjoyable and entertaining read. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Yes, you are right... it is a bit top-heavy with grumbles but it all comes right by the end with playtime. Thanks for your review.
Comment from BlueMarble
Oh the wonderful memories you just brought back. I remember my motto used to be "clean house - happy kids - take your pick." All too soon they grow up, you can clean house then.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Oh the wonderful memories you just brought back. I remember my motto used to be "clean house - happy kids - take your pick." All too soon they grow up, you can clean house then.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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That's a great motto... I assume you picked the 'happy kids'.
Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The answer to this problem is to have a play room! He he he, this is a fun write and we always had one sitting room that was always child free when my kids were growing up, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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The answer to this problem is to have a play room! He he he, this is a fun write and we always had one sitting room that was always child free when my kids were growing up, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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How sensible to separate the activities. Having a play room is the perfect solution.
