Bless This Mess
Neat-freaks shouldn't be parents.16 total reviews
Comment from RodG
Moms have a very rough life raising kids and trying to keep a house tidy. It is easy to identify with Speaker here who is exasperated by her child's messes, his dirty clothes, and the condition of his pet. But we also smile with her when she responds to his. I love the transition from mad to happy. But I'm not a fan of AABB rhyming.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Moms have a very rough life raising kids and trying to keep a house tidy. It is easy to identify with Speaker here who is exasperated by her child's messes, his dirty clothes, and the condition of his pet. But we also smile with her when she responds to his. I love the transition from mad to happy. But I'm not a fan of AABB rhyming.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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It must all get rather overwhelming. I haven't really experienced it myself; I don't have children and therefore no grandchildren. I am perfectly capable of making a huge creative mess myself!
I personally feel that AABB rhyming suits a poem for a younger audience.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Haha, I totally agree. Tho nobody has ever accused me of being a neat freak, kids can turn the house upside down in a very short time. Now I have grandkids to make a mess. Might as well enjoy the time while we can. Now that they're getting older I don't wish there'd been less mess.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Haha, I totally agree. Tho nobody has ever accused me of being a neat freak, kids can turn the house upside down in a very short time. Now I have grandkids to make a mess. Might as well enjoy the time while we can. Now that they're getting older I don't wish there'd been less mess.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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I think kids appreciate the stimulation, and parents should lighten up about being tidy. As long as no-one is actually falling over things and breaking legs, and it is hygienic, what harm is being done?
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Mystery Poet,
I enjoyed reading your poem. I love how you overlook the mess and love your child. You certainly describe a big mess worthy of frustration. I remember meeting a young family where the toddler was only allowed to play with one toy at a time so as not to make a mess. I think it's healthy to make the messes your poem describes. We only live once, and children need our love and involvement.
Best wishes in the contest. You made a positive impression on this reader today.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Hello Mystery Poet,
I enjoyed reading your poem. I love how you overlook the mess and love your child. You certainly describe a big mess worthy of frustration. I remember meeting a young family where the toddler was only allowed to play with one toy at a time so as not to make a mess. I think it's healthy to make the messes your poem describes. We only live once, and children need our love and involvement.
Best wishes in the contest. You made a positive impression on this reader today.
Joy xx
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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There's not much point clearing it up as it will only pile up again! That poor toddler, being restricted like that is a restriction on imagination too. You are so right with your comments on involvement. Thanks for your review. xx
Comment from Ava Wilson
Great description of daily life as a parent with young children. It's hard to see past the clutter sometimes and remember that they will be grown before we know it. I really liked your picture choice as well. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Great description of daily life as a parent with young children. It's hard to see past the clutter sometimes and remember that they will be grown before we know it. I really liked your picture choice as well. Nicely done!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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What a lovely review! Thanks for being so positive about my poem.
Comment from Earl Corp
This is the first poem for a child entry I have read, and i find it hard to imagine that there will be one better than this. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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This is the first poem for a child entry I have read, and i find it hard to imagine that there will be one better than this. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Aw shucks, Earl... so uplifting of you to say this about my poem.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
Phyllis Diller said, "Cleaning the house while the children are growing is like clearing the sidewalk while it's still snowing." *smile* Yeah, we have to make some concessions, but it's worth it. Thanks and good luck!
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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Dear Mystery Poet,
Phyllis Diller said, "Cleaning the house while the children are growing is like clearing the sidewalk while it's still snowing." *smile* Yeah, we have to make some concessions, but it's worth it. Thanks and good luck!
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Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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... or like painting the Eiffel Tower, knowing you'll have to begin again as soon as you've finished!
Thanks for reviewing my poem.
