A Glint of Light
A Terza Rima Entry11 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I felt strongly one's heart being poured out into this Terza Rima. It gives me a sense of impending death due to perhaps a terminal illness. It tells of the loss of hope, depression, loneliness and pain, seemingly without end. And, maybe accepting death for the light on the other side.
The couplet can lead me into two different directions; one of hope for recovery; the other, transformation on the other side, with God's reassurance the future is not to be feared.
'I hear his gentle voice now loud and clear' ... I could be way off base, but many times in life, as one is approaching death, I've heard it said that they see and hear more clearly and louder.
I truly wish you the very best in this contest. Such a wonderful entry!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I felt strongly one's heart being poured out into this Terza Rima. It gives me a sense of impending death due to perhaps a terminal illness. It tells of the loss of hope, depression, loneliness and pain, seemingly without end. And, maybe accepting death for the light on the other side.
The couplet can lead me into two different directions; one of hope for recovery; the other, transformation on the other side, with God's reassurance the future is not to be feared.
'I hear his gentle voice now loud and clear' ... I could be way off base, but many times in life, as one is approaching death, I've heard it said that they see and hear more clearly and louder.
I truly wish you the very best in this contest. Such a wonderful entry!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading and sharing your insights!
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Wow, I am aching and feeling every ounce of this poem in its elocution. Your rhyme and particular style for the contest is so advanced and beyond my level of knowledge. I just know inside this poem reached out and grabbed me in a way that it rugged deeply on my heart. It expanded my mind. It made tears fall from my eyes. It made the lump in my throat thicker. You have moved me deeply with this amazing entry. I wish you luck in the contest. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Wow, I am aching and feeling every ounce of this poem in its elocution. Your rhyme and particular style for the contest is so advanced and beyond my level of knowledge. I just know inside this poem reached out and grabbed me in a way that it rugged deeply on my heart. It expanded my mind. It made tears fall from my eyes. It made the lump in my throat thicker. You have moved me deeply with this amazing entry. I wish you luck in the contest. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for your insightful review. I am glad this piece resonated with you. And I especially appreciate the generous rating. It means a lot.
Comment from JudyE
I think you've done wonderfully well to follow so many rules yet create a poem that really speaks to the reader. There is some evocative imagery here too. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I think you've done wonderfully well to follow so many rules yet create a poem that really speaks to the reader. There is some evocative imagery here too. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thank you for sharing your insightful sentiments!
Comment from Patty Palmer
A very pretty poem. It is lonely and depressing when you lose a loved one. Not only have they left permanently, but sometimes there is a guilty feeling because they had to die but you're still alive. Such as in the instance where a family had the gene for a fatal disease. Each child had a 50% of having it or not having it. Out of 3 children two died from the disease and the remaining child did not get the gene from his parent and that meant that he would not contract the disease ever! This child who lived felt guilty for the rest of his life.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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A very pretty poem. It is lonely and depressing when you lose a loved one. Not only have they left permanently, but sometimes there is a guilty feeling because they had to die but you're still alive. Such as in the instance where a family had the gene for a fatal disease. Each child had a 50% of having it or not having it. Out of 3 children two died from the disease and the remaining child did not get the gene from his parent and that meant that he would not contract the disease ever! This child who lived felt guilty for the rest of his life.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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So glad you got the gist of this piece. Thank you for sharing your insightful sentiments.
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you're welcome
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author, Congratulations for being able to follow all the directions after all the hullabaloo! This is a great entry for the Terza Rima Contest, good luck! :)
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Hello Author, Congratulations for being able to follow all the directions after all the hullabaloo! This is a great entry for the Terza Rima Contest, good luck! :)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Wasn?t sure if the contest would be canceled! I followed the format that Frost used. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Terza Rima about the love of our life that dies before wecan have the best of our years together and we are only left by the memories that keep us going on.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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A very well-written Terza Rima about the love of our life that dies before wecan have the best of our years together and we are only left by the memories that keep us going on.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Thank you for sharing your sentiments.
Comment from Raul1
I like how you structured this poem. It is very easy to read and understand. No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest! Excellent work!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I like how you structured this poem. It is very easy to read and understand. No grammatical errors. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest! Excellent work!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Glad you enjoyed this piece.
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You're welcome.
Comment from babykoala
This is just simply beautiful in it's pain and despair and also it's longing for release..I felt every emotion as I was reading this the language and imagery was so powerful. Thank you for sharing.xx
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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This is just simply beautiful in it's pain and despair and also it's longing for release..I felt every emotion as I was reading this the language and imagery was so powerful. Thank you for sharing.xx
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you for sharing your insightful comments!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your Terza Rima which is beautifully rhymed and well metered, the sentiments here of sadness and loss and then the dispelling of darkness with the view of butterflies, a fine write and I wish you luck with the contest, this form is not easy and you mastered it here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I enjoyed your Terza Rima which is beautifully rhymed and well metered, the sentiments here of sadness and loss and then the dispelling of darkness with the view of butterflies, a fine write and I wish you luck with the contest, this form is not easy and you mastered it here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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This was definitely a challenge, Dolly. But I decided to give it a try. Thank you for your encouraging feedback!
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You did a superb job, love Dolly x
Comment from Darlene Franklin
A lovely poem about overcoming grief. The iambic meter feels a little forced in the third stanza, but it works. I admire how well you wielded the form.
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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A lovely poem about overcoming grief. The iambic meter feels a little forced in the third stanza, but it works. I admire how well you wielded the form.
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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I did go back and tweaked the third stanza. I appreciate your helpful suggestion. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
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I like what you've done!
