I Want to Fly!
A poem for the young and young at heart16 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
Interesting poem and wonderful picture that works with it. So- she did fly - in your imagination? Years ago we had to watch one of our sons who made capes for him and his two younger brothers - he was CONVINCED he could fly - I watched him close - so he would not climb up on the roof.
Good poem
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Interesting poem and wonderful picture that works with it. So- she did fly - in your imagination? Years ago we had to watch one of our sons who made capes for him and his two younger brothers - he was CONVINCED he could fly - I watched him close - so he would not climb up on the roof.
Good poem
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Is there a child who has not wanted to fly? Thank you so much, Gail, for your warm response to I WANT TO FLY!
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Even Newton would enjoy the gravity defying antics. A cute and well written poem of innocence and kids dreams. No edits or adjustments necessary from me.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Even Newton would enjoy the gravity defying antics. A cute and well written poem of innocence and kids dreams. No edits or adjustments necessary from me.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Lance, for sharing I WANT TO FLY! and your kind praise.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written, exuberant poem makes great use of specific details to
convey its powerful theme. The freedom of playtime is necessary for a
normal, happy life.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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This well-written, exuberant poem makes great use of specific details to
convey its powerful theme. The freedom of playtime is necessary for a
normal, happy life.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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I am delighted you found my poem exuberant, Jan. It was indeed fun to write. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from Anntonette
Dialogues really do make poems come to life like big tales to tell. This was amusing and kept me reading until the end :)
Thank you for sharing.
- Anntonette J
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Dialogues really do make poems come to life like big tales to tell. This was amusing and kept me reading until the end :)
Thank you for sharing.
- Anntonette J
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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You are the first to comment on my use of dialog in I WANT TO FLY! I am so pleased you thought it brought the poem to life. Many thanks for sharing
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Wonderful children's poem about flying. My daughters
loved to fly high in the sky above the broccoli trees. I
would run under them and lift them higher. The poet
Brooke loved the poem - "The Swing," adewpearl.
Have fun with your children. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Wonderful children's poem about flying. My daughters
loved to fly high in the sky above the broccoli trees. I
would run under them and lift them higher. The poet
Brooke loved the poem - "The Swing," adewpearl.
Have fun with your children. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for your wonderful response to I WANT TO FLY! and those six bright stars. I remember how Brooke wrote many poems for children and I?d like to think she?d like this one, too.
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Pen Pal: I know that Brooke would have loved your poem. I took her children poetry class. She had me rewrite a poem about swinging. We are blessed to know Brooke. I'm sure she is enjoying sharing stories and poems in Heaven with the saints. nancy
Comment from misscookie
Your words touched my heart and soul
As I read this heartfelt poem
You captured my attention from the start
It reminded me when I took my grand-daughter Malika to the park and she said the same thing
In fact we made up a song call Push me High ..
. When she became a mother she taught the song to her daughter Madison who is now six years old she has a brother I nicked named Dash, and yes she will teach him the song also
thank you for sharing
cookie
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Your words touched my heart and soul
As I read this heartfelt poem
You captured my attention from the start
It reminded me when I took my grand-daughter Malika to the park and she said the same thing
In fact we made up a song call Push me High ..
. When she became a mother she taught the song to her daughter Madison who is now six years old she has a brother I nicked named Dash, and yes she will teach him the song also
thank you for sharing
cookie
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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I am so pleased to hear your story, cookie, about the song your daughter and granddaughter sang. I am glad my poem brought back such great memories. Many thanks for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from Ogden
Although apparently an eye-witness account, I suspect this may not be a true story. Although intriguing, some of it sounds exaggerated to me. But, I tend to be skeptical sometimes.
:o)
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Although apparently an eye-witness account, I suspect this may not be a true story. Although intriguing, some of it sounds exaggerated to me. But, I tend to be skeptical sometimes.
:o)
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Oh, Don, things seemed so much more heightened when we were young, don?t you think. Yes, I admit some hyperbole. Many thanks for sharing.
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You're welcome, and thank YOU for coming clean.
Don
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the childhood play parks where we could swing on the swings very high and pretended we could fly like the birds in the sky and see-saw rides where the one is heavier than the other and then it work not so well for the lighter one.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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A very well-written poem about the childhood play parks where we could swing on the swings very high and pretended we could fly like the birds in the sky and see-saw rides where the one is heavier than the other and then it work not so well for the lighter one.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much,Sandra, for sharing I WANT TO FLY!
Comment from LisaMay
She wanted to do it so much it happened!! I love being on a swing... they should make playgrounds for adults! You captured the delight of swinging very well in your poem... and it spread to people watching too.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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She wanted to do it so much it happened!! I love being on a swing... they should make playgrounds for adults! You captured the delight of swinging very well in your poem... and it spread to people watching too.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much, Lisa, for sharing I WANT TO FLY! It appears the joy of swinging spread to you, too.
Comment from juliaSjames
This is truly delightful. Excellent meter and rhyme. Appealing content with a fantasy twist at the end. Perfect depiction of a child on a swing.
Maybe I would go for "she shrieked" instead of "she yelped" in the penultimate stanza, because little girls raise their voices higher and higher when excitement takes over.
Best of luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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This is truly delightful. Excellent meter and rhyme. Appealing content with a fantasy twist at the end. Perfect depiction of a child on a swing.
Maybe I would go for "she shrieked" instead of "she yelped" in the penultimate stanza, because little girls raise their voices higher and higher when excitement takes over.
Best of luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful response to I WANT TO FLY!, Julia, and for the great suggestion. I will consider "shriek."
