Dear Lover...
2nd Place in 3 Line Poetry Contest/July 14, 201929 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely written and illustrated poem about passionate love. It shows tenderness and desire. I like the consonance with the 's' sound through
the poem.
Congrats on placing second in the contest
Keep writing
~dragonpoet
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Nicely written and illustrated poem about passionate love. It shows tenderness and desire. I like the consonance with the 's' sound through
the poem.
Congrats on placing second in the contest
Keep writing
~dragonpoet
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much! I feel very honored that the committee chose this for 2nd place! And in the front page spotlight too! Life is good! :)
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My pleasure.
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Comment from Lobber
Hi there,
It's a short poem and still much can be captured or expressed. While I believe your feelings are real, the mixed metaphors don't do you justice. Putting velvet and oceans in a room together, for me, creates no special magic or feeling.- Lobber
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Hi there,
It's a short poem and still much can be captured or expressed. While I believe your feelings are real, the mixed metaphors don't do you justice. Putting velvet and oceans in a room together, for me, creates no special magic or feeling.- Lobber
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you! I appreciate your taking time to read and I understand what you are saying. I am trying to express a great quantity by using ocean, not necessarily meaning exactly a reference to water itself. :)
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Hi,
Got it. Sorry, I was being too literal. How about a word that achieves the same and is is less tactile and tangible- like the word ?galaxy???
- Lobber
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Thank you! I am on my way home from Chicago visiting my son so I?ll review that tonight when I get home!
Comment from JJInfinity805
I can imagine a sea of emotion rising above a solitary figure standing upon the shore, the waves moments from crashing down. I like this metaphor for love. It captures the intensity of passion but the final lines reveal its gentleness.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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I can imagine a sea of emotion rising above a solitary figure standing upon the shore, the waves moments from crashing down. I like this metaphor for love. It captures the intensity of passion but the final lines reveal its gentleness.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your awesome comment! I appreciate that you see what I was aiming for! xoxo
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Truly, you tell your lover your feeling of and for love, as passion consumes you, your joy knows no bounds for love; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Truly, you tell your lover your feeling of and for love, as passion consumes you, your joy knows no bounds for love; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you so very much! I appreciate your comment! It really encourages me to keep writing!
Comment from lyenochka
I love your word choices in this brief three lines of verse. The sense of being "lost in an ocean" gives a wide perspective of the love and the "sweet velvet caresses" brings it back to a deeply intimate, personal level.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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I love your word choices in this brief three lines of verse. The sense of being "lost in an ocean" gives a wide perspective of the love and the "sweet velvet caresses" brings it back to a deeply intimate, personal level.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thank you sincerely! This is my first time venturing into such a limited structure poem. It was very challenging and took me outside my box!! Appreciate your review so much!
Comment from JudyE
Not a word is wasted in this three-line poetry contest entry. You've used strong imagery and there is a rhythm behind the lines that makes it very easy to read. Good luck in the contest. I don't think it's come up for judging yet.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Not a word is wasted in this three-line poetry contest entry. You've used strong imagery and there is a rhythm behind the lines that makes it very easy to read. Good luck in the contest. I don't think it's come up for judging yet.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Thank you sincerely! It was much harder than I thought to bring an idea together in such few words! But I really love the challenge! And no, voting doesn?t begin until next week! I think that?s the hardest part is waiting for the booth to open! LoL
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That's true. Once I have a piece written I can't wait to get it 'out there' then I have to wait for ages for the voting. :)
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Haha! Oh, the suffering we poets go through!
Comment from patcelaw
The phrase velvet caresses makes me feel as though I have been hugged. May you have good luck in the contest and a marvelous week.
Patricia
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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The phrase velvet caresses makes me feel as though I have been hugged. May you have good luck in the contest and a marvelous week.
Patricia
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Awwee! thanks so much! this was my first challenge writing with such a limited structure! Appreciate your comment! You enjoy your week also! Short one for me at work! Woo Hoo! :) xoxo
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Diana. That was a nice poem I really enjoyed it! Makes me wish I was consumed by passion and was lost in an ocean of sweet velvet caresses. Maybe one day, I can only hope. Good Job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Hello Diana. That was a nice poem I really enjoyed it! Makes me wish I was consumed by passion and was lost in an ocean of sweet velvet caresses. Maybe one day, I can only hope. Good Job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much!! :) i love this comment!
Comment from Hitcher
I am lost in an ocean
of sweet velvet caresses. Nice!
sounds like a woman riding the waves of blissful, sensual satisfaction. He must have all the right moves : ))
A very cool 3 lined poem!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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I am lost in an ocean
of sweet velvet caresses. Nice!
sounds like a woman riding the waves of blissful, sensual satisfaction. He must have all the right moves : ))
A very cool 3 lined poem!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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LoL! Oh yeah! Thank you for reviewing! Your comment is precious!
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
Your beautiful well-written poem and contest entry evokes a passionate love. Your selected picture is a perfect match, which reveals mutual loving and your poem's three verses tells a larger exciting story.
My best,
Deborah
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Dear Author,
Your beautiful well-written poem and contest entry evokes a passionate love. Your selected picture is a perfect match, which reveals mutual loving and your poem's three verses tells a larger exciting story.
My best,
Deborah
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your precious review! It is not an easy thing to come up with a complete poem in three lines with limiting syllable structure! I appreciate that you enjoyed!
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I did and loved reading about your happiness :)
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:). xoxo
