My Time With A Turtle
An uplifting close encounter.12 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was beautiful, and I am with you on the pollution, so many are dying due to our lack of care for the environment. What an amazing memory, something you will cherish all your life. I'm glad he stayed around long enough for you to feel the enchantment of the moment. :)) xxx Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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That was beautiful, and I am with you on the pollution, so many are dying due to our lack of care for the environment. What an amazing memory, something you will cherish all your life. I'm glad he stayed around long enough for you to feel the enchantment of the moment. :)) xxx Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. I surely felt blessed to have had that moment with the turtle.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the time you have spent with a turtle under water that not many people will have the opportunity to do. I am grateful you took me on your expedition.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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A very well-written poem about the time you have spent with a turtle under water that not many people will have the opportunity to do. I am grateful you took me on your expedition.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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I'm glad you enjoyed the swim with the turtle... and you didn't have to get wet!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow! I like this one a lot. My two favorite parts were: "I sparkle pure joy/feeling like Neptune's daughter." That is poetic perfection with the way it wonderfully expresses your enthusiasm at the sight of this unusual creature.
...and "The teardrop-shaped shell/is a comment upon your grief." That one's deep and one of those things that a "true artist/poet" would think of.
This poem is a standout. Good luck in the contest! xo
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Wow! I like this one a lot. My two favorite parts were: "I sparkle pure joy/feeling like Neptune's daughter." That is poetic perfection with the way it wonderfully expresses your enthusiasm at the sight of this unusual creature.
...and "The teardrop-shaped shell/is a comment upon your grief." That one's deep and one of those things that a "true artist/poet" would think of.
This poem is a standout. Good luck in the contest! xo
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Your review is poetic perfection with the way it wonderfully expresses your enthusiasm at the sight of this unusual creature, my poem.
Your review is deep and one of those things that a "true artist/poet" would think of.
This review is a standout.
See? I can cut and paste with the best of 'em!!
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Geez! If I didn't know you better, I'd swear you were a snarky little ingrate!
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Naaah... not the intention. Just honouring that your words when reviewing my poem were so golden that I couldn't improve on them. (but also referencing how a lot of reviewers do save time and thinking by cut and paste). But yes, you are right too... I can be a snarky ingrate. Grovel, grovel, thanks for taking the time to review my poem. xx
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Oh no you don't. Too late! You take that groveling elsewhere, Missy!
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It's never too late to make amends.... Ms Cranky.
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HAHAHAHA. Guilty as freaking charged. xo
Comment from Six-Star Writer
There is a turtle. He is swimming in blue water. He is submerged. The turtle has q teardop-shaped shell. There is plastic in the water. You seem close to the turtle.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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There is a turtle. He is swimming in blue water. He is submerged. The turtle has q teardop-shaped shell. There is plastic in the water. You seem close to the turtle.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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I commend your observation. You have noticed in my poem what I noticed as I was writing it, because I noticed what the turtle was doing. Gee, what a coincidence!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. That's a good narrative I have swimming and encountering a turtle. Your description of the turtle was very good and what I found interesting was your inclusion of the remark about the pollution disturbed the entire scene.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Hello mystery writer. That's a good narrative I have swimming and encountering a turtle. Your description of the turtle was very good and what I found interesting was your inclusion of the remark about the pollution disturbed the entire scene.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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It was so disappointing to notice the rubbish in the water when I was getting up close and personal with that precious turtle.
Thanks very much for your comments.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's lovely. So sad that us humans are polluting their world, but still I'd bet the turtle will outlive us. These wonderful animals have survived millions of years. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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That's lovely. So sad that us humans are polluting their world, but still I'd bet the turtle will outlive us. These wonderful animals have survived millions of years. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thanks for your review, Cindy. The turtles are becoming threatened from our plastic getting in their stomachs and their habitats, like so many other animals, are under threat.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet, (--wink--)
I really enjoyed this poem. The alliteration in that first line kind of set the pace for the rest of the piece. It added layer on layer of information that kind of put me there with you - under the water - swimming with that sweet little turtle in HIS environment. Sounds amazing!
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Dear Mystery Poet, (--wink--)
I really enjoyed this poem. The alliteration in that first line kind of set the pace for the rest of the piece. It added layer on layer of information that kind of put me there with you - under the water - swimming with that sweet little turtle in HIS environment. Sounds amazing!
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Here's winking at you too! That turtle wasn't so little. Swimming right beside it and above it was such a lovely thing to experience. I'm pleased my poem captured the feeling of being there for you.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a stunning entry for the contest! The rhyme and meter are well executed throughout. Your word choices are novel and compelling. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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This is a stunning entry for the contest! The rhyme and meter are well executed throughout. Your word choices are novel and compelling. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I felt my poem was rather unpolished because I did it in a rush to enter the contest, but sometimes the immediacy of putting down thoughts does not need to be fiddled with further. I am very pleased that it appealed to you.
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
"My Time With A Turtle" is a winning Rhyming Poem contest entry! Your verses are both descriptive and exquisite (e.g.,"Your carapace colours are varied and marbled to blend with the reef.") I wish you the best success!
Deborah
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Dear Author,
"My Time With A Turtle" is a winning Rhyming Poem contest entry! Your verses are both descriptive and exquisite (e.g.,"Your carapace colours are varied and marbled to blend with the reef.") I wish you the best success!
Deborah
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I love your positivity about this poem, Deborah! Thanks for your good wishes.
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You are welcome and thank you :)
Comment from Michael McCottry Bell Jr
Beautiful! I loved this piece with your imagery and metaphors. The sea feeling like air with your flippers moving through. Great alliteration too. It made me wonder what being a turtle would be like. Loved the correspondence to Neptune. The end made me choke up softly. Its a shame the way our planet and our animals of nature are treated.
Thanks for Sharing!
-cp
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Beautiful! I loved this piece with your imagery and metaphors. The sea feeling like air with your flippers moving through. Great alliteration too. It made me wonder what being a turtle would be like. Loved the correspondence to Neptune. The end made me choke up softly. Its a shame the way our planet and our animals of nature are treated.
Thanks for Sharing!
-cp
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thank you for relating to my poem so well. I can tell you are a true nature lover. We humans are having a terrible impact.
