Affirmed
when doubt is cancelled4 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is absolutely excellent. You have perfectly captured the feelings we all experience and given them wings of hope. Plus what PERFECT artwork you chose. I love this kind of simple-but-beautiful poetry. Great job. Good luck to you in the contest. xo
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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This is absolutely excellent. You have perfectly captured the feelings we all experience and given them wings of hope. Plus what PERFECT artwork you chose. I love this kind of simple-but-beautiful poetry. Great job. Good luck to you in the contest. xo
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you:)
Sorry for the delay--computer woes :(
Comment from Bill Schott
This two- line poem, Affirmed, uses sixteen words in this unrhymed couplet and states that faith must sometimes overcome the disbelief which opens the door to fear. Truism.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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This two- line poem, Affirmed, uses sixteen words in this unrhymed couplet and states that faith must sometimes overcome the disbelief which opens the door to fear. Truism.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you :)
Comment from Debbie Pope
You have got a really, really good idea going here. I adore the thought of the dirt covering up your faith. With a break through, your doubt is overcome and heads for the light.
I have just a couple suggestions, mostly regarding presentation. Voters read through the entries so quickly. You want your entry to pop.
1) Get rid of all that extra space if you can. Maybe if you reloaded the photo, it might help. Personally, I don't know how, but I know it can be done.
2) Center your words and make them bigger--18 font maybe
3) Make your background garden green or lemon yellow, whichever looks better
As to the words themselves, I like every word except "until." That is the wrong adverb. I'd say But then. And in your descriptive line, I'd say when doubt is overcome instead of cancelled.
These are small things that I think would make a big difference.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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You have got a really, really good idea going here. I adore the thought of the dirt covering up your faith. With a break through, your doubt is overcome and heads for the light.
I have just a couple suggestions, mostly regarding presentation. Voters read through the entries so quickly. You want your entry to pop.
1) Get rid of all that extra space if you can. Maybe if you reloaded the photo, it might help. Personally, I don't know how, but I know it can be done.
2) Center your words and make them bigger--18 font maybe
3) Make your background garden green or lemon yellow, whichever looks better
As to the words themselves, I like every word except "until." That is the wrong adverb. I'd say But then. And in your descriptive line, I'd say when doubt is overcome instead of cancelled.
These are small things that I think would make a big difference.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review and suggestions -- I had computer issues and couldn't change anything, but I appreciate your input:)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Faith in fickle mind sometimes covered up by fear, but a strong heart keeps faith grows ever headed for the light with confidence; well said, well done. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Faith in fickle mind sometimes covered up by fear, but a strong heart keeps faith grows ever headed for the light with confidence; well said, well done. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Thank you :)
