Riding a Cosmic Current
Are you all at sea or surfing a brainwave?17 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This reminds me of the bi-cameral mind. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bicameralism_(psychology)
I also have heard and have noticed that we all write from archetypal images. The point you make is very thought-provoking. You have good metaphors and good examples of allusions. The concepts you've introduced are great fodder for discussion if the readers who are writers can let themselves go.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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This reminds me of the bi-cameral mind. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bicameralism_(psychology)
I also have heard and have noticed that we all write from archetypal images. The point you make is very thought-provoking. You have good metaphors and good examples of allusions. The concepts you've introduced are great fodder for discussion if the readers who are writers can let themselves go.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the snippet on psychology, a subject that fascinates me (as an observer). I appreciate your review remarks. You mention writers 'letting themselves go'... so many just don't. I really value getting a hint of the inner workings, but so much is lightly brushed surface.
Comment from john mallahan
All so true! And think you did cover much! Can't help but make phsycological comparisons to the portrayals you raise. How is it that we are all so different? How is it, that we even respond DIFFERENTLY to components of the "beach" In our thoughts. In our choices. Yet, seems as if many of us on the "wavelength"
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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All so true! And think you did cover much! Can't help but make phsycological comparisons to the portrayals you raise. How is it that we are all so different? How is it, that we even respond DIFFERENTLY to components of the "beach" In our thoughts. In our choices. Yet, seems as if many of us on the "wavelength"
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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It always amazes me how different we all are, yet some have the similar experiences we all react differently. On that beach, I had it busy with all types of groups of people... I did not mention the ones who were drowning.
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Glad you didn't mention the drowning one's...that mighta made me feel different!
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Ah, but would you have sprung into surf lifesaver mode? or blocked your ears.
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
I really liked your piece and how you used the beach as an apology for writing. I thought this was a very clever idea. Your descriptions were spot on. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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I really liked your piece and how you used the beach as an apology for writing. I thought this was a very clever idea. Your descriptions were spot on. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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I thank you for this validating review. I thought I was pretty clever thinking up the analogies. (ego tripping here, ha ha.)
Comment from Carla Trinklein
Ouch. Okay, don't beat around the bush. Say what you mean. As a kindergarten teacher, my first reaction when I read something similar to something I wrote is to cry, "He/she copied!!!" It never occurred to me that we might be occupying a similar wavelength. As to where I am on the beach, well, that's me, sitting at the edge of the water, letting the waves lap at my feet and trying to decide if the water is warm enough for me to take a dip. Eventually I just might. In the meantime, I'm enjoying the view.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Ouch. Okay, don't beat around the bush. Say what you mean. As a kindergarten teacher, my first reaction when I read something similar to something I wrote is to cry, "He/she copied!!!" It never occurred to me that we might be occupying a similar wavelength. As to where I am on the beach, well, that's me, sitting at the edge of the water, letting the waves lap at my feet and trying to decide if the water is warm enough for me to take a dip. Eventually I just might. In the meantime, I'm enjoying the view.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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How generous you are with this rating! I thank you humbly. It appears to have troubled you. Good. It's for thinking about, but not meant in any way to be personally directed at anyone, although I am sure readers will be thinking which group they might belong to, as you have. Don't let anyone inflict cold water on you!!
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You always make us think!
Comment from Diana L Crawford
OMG! This is brilliant! Thank you for stepping outside the Poet's box! Creativity is so much more than fancy words and repetitious ideas! I read one from this guy who wrote the entire poem as though it was all missed typed in a bunch of typos but it actually was designed to challenge the brain to read it because as long as we have the first and last letters in a word it doesn't matter how the other letters are jumbled up and I thought that was so fresh! What a great idea to challenge people into seeing things a little differently! I may be new here but I totally get this poem! Bravo for your creative courage! :)
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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OMG! This is brilliant! Thank you for stepping outside the Poet's box! Creativity is so much more than fancy words and repetitious ideas! I read one from this guy who wrote the entire poem as though it was all missed typed in a bunch of typos but it actually was designed to challenge the brain to read it because as long as we have the first and last letters in a word it doesn't matter how the other letters are jumbled up and I thought that was so fresh! What a great idea to challenge people into seeing things a little differently! I may be new here but I totally get this poem! Bravo for your creative courage! :)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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OMG! What a brilliant response! Thanks so much for your rave review. (I think I read that poem you mentioned a while ago and I was delighted by its originality.) I like to challenge myself by stepping into odd territories.
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It was all my pleasure to enjoy this for sure!
Comment from poetwatch
There's no lull in you LisaMay. Whether on the beach or climbing a mountain on a motorcycle. you make your own barrel and fine tune the words to speak your meaning. You have carve a place in my heart with the way you write. I love it. Thank you very much.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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There's no lull in you LisaMay. Whether on the beach or climbing a mountain on a motorcycle. you make your own barrel and fine tune the words to speak your meaning. You have carve a place in my heart with the way you write. I love it. Thank you very much.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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What a lovely supportive reviewer you have become. I can do no wrong...pressure is on!! Thanks so much for your brilliant review.
Comment from juliaSjames
I smiled when I started to read, because I just reviewed pearlecat's "I Am" Check it out if you have a moment.
I thoroughly enjoyed your extended and well crafted metaphor.
And thanks for adding the author notes!
I believe this will do very well in the contest. Good luck.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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I smiled when I started to read, because I just reviewed pearlecat's "I Am" Check it out if you have a moment.
I thoroughly enjoyed your extended and well crafted metaphor.
And thanks for adding the author notes!
I believe this will do very well in the contest. Good luck.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thanks for recommending pearlecat's poem. How wonderful it was... a very strong metaphor carried beautifully.
And thanks for this excellent review of my poem.
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You're welcome. She's a FanStory returnee, like me. Fantastic writer.
Have a wonderful NZ evening.
Blessings Julia
Comment from LyndaS
"The sun shines just as brightly on safety as on danger." Indeed.
The old man told me to go read this. He was greatly impressed. He's right. This is writing at its best. You have taken everything from the seashore and tied it to humanity. This flows like honey and held my interest with every word. You have a real talent and it shows with this entry. I can't thank you enough for sharing this. You have an extraordinary mind and all these people should be aware of that. I am honored to do my part here. Lynda
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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"The sun shines just as brightly on safety as on danger." Indeed.
The old man told me to go read this. He was greatly impressed. He's right. This is writing at its best. You have taken everything from the seashore and tied it to humanity. This flows like honey and held my interest with every word. You have a real talent and it shows with this entry. I can't thank you enough for sharing this. You have an extraordinary mind and all these people should be aware of that. I am honored to do my part here. Lynda
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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wow Lynda. Thanks for your awesome comments here... and thanks to Ron for recommending you read it.
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Believe it not, he watches you closely. After all, you butt heads all the time. He really enjoys it. Competitive like you. I come from a different angle. I'll just send him a message when you've blown my mind with something...Go read Lisa's latest. We both agree that you post golden nuggets on here and we inform each other of these events. You're hard to keep up with but between the two of us we've got you covered. You know...like Charlie's Angels. LMAO!! This was a killer post and it deserved my best on this and his as well. Keep 'em coming, Sis. We'll be here for you. Just like always.
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You touch my heart. I'm glad you've got warm hands! xx
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story about at the beach, it means to have fun in the sun, getting wet withair salty water and get grains of beach sand between your teeth, and riding the waves whichever way you can.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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A very well-written story about at the beach, it means to have fun in the sun, getting wet withair salty water and get grains of beach sand between your teeth, and riding the waves whichever way you can.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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... and hopefully not falling off our boogie boards too often. I haven't graduated to a surf board!
Comment from beizanten
A beautiful picture and you're so right about the creative expression. this is so deep love the way you compare ceative expression of writers to people at the beach
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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A beautiful picture and you're so right about the creative expression. this is so deep love the way you compare ceative expression of writers to people at the beach
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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... and I love the way you have given the story a 6-star rating!
Thanks so much for appreciating the ideas in my story.
