Endless Summer Days
Amphion poetry8 total reviews
Comment from Ms. Snyder
This is a beautiful post and I see you won 1st place, but even more than that you have introduced a poem form that I wasn't familiar with until now. I like the flow a lot. You paint a lovely relaxing picture even without the photo from? (there was no photo credit given, so it must be one of your own stock I guess? Mentally though you put me in the place and time that you offer here which was something I truly needed. A long month's journey both June and July were for me. Hopefully, I will find a way to get out of the hammock and get back to it soon. Hugs and love, and always Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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This is a beautiful post and I see you won 1st place, but even more than that you have introduced a poem form that I wasn't familiar with until now. I like the flow a lot. You paint a lovely relaxing picture even without the photo from? (there was no photo credit given, so it must be one of your own stock I guess? Mentally though you put me in the place and time that you offer here which was something I truly needed. A long month's journey both June and July were for me. Hopefully, I will find a way to get out of the hammock and get back to it soon. Hugs and love, and always Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much, Fonda.
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a lovely amphion poem, author. All the guidelines adhered to, and you've created a serene setting that anyone would like to also share part of.
Really nice and best luck to you in the voting booth.
Gloria
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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This is a lovely amphion poem, author. All the guidelines adhered to, and you've created a serene setting that anyone would like to also share part of.
Really nice and best luck to you in the voting booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much, Gloria!!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I like the lines "Cold, lazy tease/of timid breeze." The first stanza has quite a bit of sibilance with "s" and "ss" sounds all over the place. I think the last stanza needs a few punctuation tweaks:
I lay upon my back and gaze.
Our hammock bed,
enfolds my head--
these peaceful, tranquil, endless days.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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I like the lines "Cold, lazy tease/of timid breeze." The first stanza has quite a bit of sibilance with "s" and "ss" sounds all over the place. I think the last stanza needs a few punctuation tweaks:
I lay upon my back and gaze.
Our hammock bed,
enfolds my head--
these peaceful, tranquil, endless days.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much, Cookie. I certainly appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sweet relaxing and lazy amphion poem about a day in summer with nothing to do but enjoy the breeze and the cloudless skies, a fine write with good rhymes and meter, and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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A sweet relaxing and lazy amphion poem about a day in summer with nothing to do but enjoy the breeze and the cloudless skies, a fine write with good rhymes and meter, and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from DonandVicki
I have read a lot of poetry in my day but yours is the first Amphion I can ever recall reading. I love summer as well but not when it gets over one hundred degrees.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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I have read a lot of poetry in my day but yours is the first Amphion I can ever recall reading. I love summer as well but not when it gets over one hundred degrees.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much!! I do love summer days and thank you for your wonderful, summery comments.
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Thank you very much!! I do love summer days and thank you for your wonderful, summery comments.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice, summery image.
-The form is very good,
along with the rhyme.
-The vivid imagery paints
a picture and tells a story.
-You can feel the breeze,
and smell the roses.
-It is a pleasant, peaceful day.
-Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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-Nice, summery image.
-The form is very good,
along with the rhyme.
-The vivid imagery paints
a picture and tells a story.
-You can feel the breeze,
and smell the roses.
-It is a pleasant, peaceful day.
-Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 26-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Janetsue
This is a very peaceful poem with excellent flow. It is relaxing to read it and I wish you the best.
This is my favorite line:
my languid daydreams flit and pass.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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This is a very peaceful poem with excellent flow. It is relaxing to read it and I wish you the best.
This is my favorite line:
my languid daydreams flit and pass.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much, Spangle. I did edit it. I was not aware.
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I updated it. Best wishes! --Spangle
Comment from RodG
Oh, this is a lovely Amphion! I really like how you capture the AMBIENCE of summer days with both your imagery and your rhymes. This poem almost warrants six stars except for your last line. PEACEFUL &TRANQUIL are redundant. What other adjective could you replace one of those words with? Rod
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Oh, this is a lovely Amphion! I really like how you capture the AMBIENCE of summer days with both your imagery and your rhymes. This poem almost warrants six stars except for your last line. PEACEFUL &TRANQUIL are redundant. What other adjective could you replace one of those words with? Rod
Comment Written 26-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Hi Rod... but a double dose of peaceful is really good, huh? LOL. I will have to think on it... any suggestions are welcome, but this is a contest, I guess I am on my own. :)
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Have faith. The word(s) will come.
Rod
