The Crude Truth
Poem about ageing5 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
They say getting old is not for sissies, was correct. Watching myself become less independent is really depressing. But, ya gotta just keep hanging in there! Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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They say getting old is not for sissies, was correct. Watching myself become less independent is really depressing. But, ya gotta just keep hanging in there! Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Exactly .. The idea to lose my independence scares me
Having to count on other makes me feel vulnerable ..
Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
I hope you have an enjoyable Sunday!
Comment from misscookie
Amen!
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they're a perfect math
You captured my attention from the first line to the last. Boy can I relate.
I wrote a a poem on that subject also, just I have so many to finish and post,my thing is increasing my money flow,.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Amen!
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they're a perfect math
You captured my attention from the first line to the last. Boy can I relate.
I wrote a a poem on that subject also, just I have so many to finish and post,my thing is increasing my money flow,.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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It's a good thing that you are full of ideas and words are flowing.
I like your enthusiasm , I will certainly check your portfolio.
Glad my wee poem delighted you.
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I have not post the poem yet
Your very welcome, have a blessed Sunday
Cookie
Comment from rhonnie69
CIAO POET: Water is old...but without it we're dead. Food is old...but to live we need our daily bread. Air is old...but we need it to breathe. I've imagined that since everything that's old is what sustains our lives...if the element from which we come is old...then we are old the moment we are born. So now: "Aging becomes a part of life." You are extremely wise in your understanding of this, poet. You are a six star poet. So....six stars for this poem. God bless you. CIAO, poet. Cordially: rhonnie69.
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CIAO POET: Water is old...but without it we're dead. Food is old...but to live we need our daily bread. Air is old...but we need it to breathe. I've imagined that since everything that's old is what sustains our lives...if the element from which we come is old...then we are old the moment we are born. So now: "Aging becomes a part of life." You are extremely wise in your understanding of this, poet. You are a six star poet. So....six stars for this poem. God bless you. CIAO, poet. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
Comment from HarryT
Nice little poem about the feeling of getting old. Good flow and rhyme. I would check on agreement between limbs and vagabond. I believe both should be singular or plural. Wonder if pay would be better at the end than
play. Old age makes you pay with pain. Just my thought.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Nice little poem about the feeling of getting old. Good flow and rhyme. I would check on agreement between limbs and vagabond. I believe both should be singular or plural. Wonder if pay would be better at the end than
play. Old age makes you pay with pain. Just my thought.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the kind review and the suggestions.
" Pain " is certainly a fine substitute but " play " works too.
Limbs is plural and vagabond is referring to the mind which is singular..so I believe it ' s right.
I appreciate the input , though.
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Keep writing.
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I started writing just a year ago in July 2018..
All my life I have always been a listener ..even writing a postcard was a feat.
What started off as a fun trial has grown on me in these 12 months..and I have learnt a lot of new English expressions which doesn't harm.
Ciao!
Comment from kahpot
Yes we do have to stay and play for as long as this age thing lasts, if I may ask, why in your fourth line is & instead of and as you have used in this piece, a bit distracting to me? I love the artwork for this poem, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Yes we do have to stay and play for as long as this age thing lasts, if I may ask, why in your fourth line is & instead of and as you have used in this piece, a bit distracting to me? I love the artwork for this poem, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 27-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your helpful input
I just thought it would be fancy but after reading your comment , I will go and correct it .
Glad you enjoyed reading my wee poem.
