Blended Reality
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "My Sister Millie"A collection of stories: Some True, some not
26 total reviews
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a text written with intensity and emotion. It's powerful for that. Few people reading it will fail to identify with your current loss, nor the historic loss it represents. {Thumbs up}.
There is one point you might like to consider:
Knowing that I was the oldest of four children in a house where the so-called parent was never emotionally available, never fiscally responsible just got to be too much responsibility for me to carry the burden. -- If this was mine, I'd insert a comma after "never fiscally responsible". It's ambiguous otherwise. It could mean you are the fiscally irresponsible one, and I don't think that's intended.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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This is a text written with intensity and emotion. It's powerful for that. Few people reading it will fail to identify with your current loss, nor the historic loss it represents. {Thumbs up}.
There is one point you might like to consider:
Knowing that I was the oldest of four children in a house where the so-called parent was never emotionally available, never fiscally responsible just got to be too much responsibility for me to carry the burden. -- If this was mine, I'd insert a comma after "never fiscally responsible". It's ambiguous otherwise. It could mean you are the fiscally irresponsible one, and I don't think that's intended.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your review and very salient recommendation.
Comment from Sally Law
I cried as I read this for I've had a similar upbringing and close to you in age. It is hard to understand how a disjointed family can bring so much pain and suffering. My father was a career alcoholic who never escaped his prison of alcoholism. If my mother had not left in the night with the children in tow, we would've of survived. I'm glad to say I still have a relationship with all my living siblings. Reach out if you can, it's never too late as love never gives up. Did Millie have children? Sometimes our family members respond, but it takes time, effort and prayer.
Sending you my best with condolences in the loss of Millie.
Sally xo
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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I cried as I read this for I've had a similar upbringing and close to you in age. It is hard to understand how a disjointed family can bring so much pain and suffering. My father was a career alcoholic who never escaped his prison of alcoholism. If my mother had not left in the night with the children in tow, we would've of survived. I'm glad to say I still have a relationship with all my living siblings. Reach out if you can, it's never too late as love never gives up. Did Millie have children? Sometimes our family members respond, but it takes time, effort and prayer.
Sending you my best with condolences in the loss of Millie.
Sally xo
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your condolences, I will be making a concerted effort to unravel the life of no contact. Who knows if or what will be revealed.
Comment from Neonewman
I can't even begin to imagine the loss of a sibling, especially at such an early age. If only we could turn back time and know what we know now. I am sorry your feeling sad, what a load to carry.
God bless
Steve
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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I can't even begin to imagine the loss of a sibling, especially at such an early age. If only we could turn back time and know what we know now. I am sorry your feeling sad, what a load to carry.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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I am very grateful for your time to review and comment.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfel non-fiction poem about a broken family that falls completely apart when thever oldest son joined the army to never return. It is sad that a decision made as a young boy still haunts him years later.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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A very well-written heartfel non-fiction poem about a broken family that falls completely apart when thever oldest son joined the army to never return. It is sad that a decision made as a young boy still haunts him years later.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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thank you.
Comment from Mistydawn
I am so sorry for your loss. Sadly enough this happens to many. Time and distance separate families, leaving regrets and a lot of questions behind. It's beautifully written, and your artwork is perfect. Again, I am so sorry for your loss.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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I am so sorry for your loss. Sadly enough this happens to many. Time and distance separate families, leaving regrets and a lot of questions behind. It's beautifully written, and your artwork is perfect. Again, I am so sorry for your loss.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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thank you.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I can't imagine being away from family for more than two years. This is quite the story. I know people leave home for many reasons and communication gets disrupted. Well, I even know someone who stopped talking to a brother for almost four entire years, in spite of being in the same room with him often as the one brother lay dying of cancer. I appreciate this story for such "chasms" as described here. And "broken" homes definitely affect people at any age. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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I can't imagine being away from family for more than two years. This is quite the story. I know people leave home for many reasons and communication gets disrupted. Well, I even know someone who stopped talking to a brother for almost four entire years, in spite of being in the same room with him often as the one brother lay dying of cancer. I appreciate this story for such "chasms" as described here. And "broken" homes definitely affect people at any age. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from moongirlwriter
There are no perfect families, so I have found. We all did the best we could with the tools we had. Sometimes we only had enough tools to take care of ourselves. . .I am sorry for your loss. it will be nice to hear more about your sister. You may have been closer than you ever thought possible. I also had an older brother. . .and he was my hero. Time for grieving my fellow writer and then learning what you can about this precious little sister you had to leave behind.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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There are no perfect families, so I have found. We all did the best we could with the tools we had. Sometimes we only had enough tools to take care of ourselves. . .I am sorry for your loss. it will be nice to hear more about your sister. You may have been closer than you ever thought possible. I also had an older brother. . .and he was my hero. Time for grieving my fellow writer and then learning what you can about this precious little sister you had to leave behind.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Thank you
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Comment from Sanku
I had to sit for a few minutes before i started to write this .i am sorry that you have never gone back and now you feel sad .These things happen more these days. sad we can not walk back in time
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I had to sit for a few minutes before i started to write this .i am sorry that you have never gone back and now you feel sad .These things happen more these days. sad we can not walk back in time
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
Comment from Sallyo
I'm not giving this six stars because it's sad, but because it's so perfectly constructed and so beautifully and simply worded. Sometimes pieces of writing just pour themselves out like a velvet shawl. This is one of them.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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I'm not giving this six stars because it's sad, but because it's so perfectly constructed and so beautifully and simply worded. Sometimes pieces of writing just pour themselves out like a velvet shawl. This is one of them.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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I am humbled by your kind words, I truly don?t need the stars. It was the only way that I could corral my deep, deep feelings of loss. The words are from the deepest caverns of my soul...purely as a reflection of a very special sister who I am certain God embraced on her entry to eternal peace.
Comment from Mastery
Hi Jim. So much hearts is shown in the text of this posting. The story itself is a rather unique one in that although many similar families go through such living as a family, few end it the way you did. I did the same thing. See my successful- selling published novel that was released last September of 2018. (Listed with 100 percent five-star ratings on Amazon and Barnes and Noble sites. Titled "Falling Up The Stairs."
I couldn't help but notice the similarities in our lives. Bless you, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Hi Jim. So much hearts is shown in the text of this posting. The story itself is a rather unique one in that although many similar families go through such living as a family, few end it the way you did. I did the same thing. See my successful- selling published novel that was released last September of 2018. (Listed with 100 percent five-star ratings on Amazon and Barnes and Noble sites. Titled "Falling Up The Stairs."
I couldn't help but notice the similarities in our lives. Bless you, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 06-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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I fully intend to order this, read and perhaps we can engage further, thank you.
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No No. Don't order it, Jim. I was autographng with personal inscriptions my book. If you are interested let me know and i will forward the particulars to you. : ) Bob
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I would be more than ho ores yes and thank you sincerely...
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ho ores?
