Love's Petals Pulled Apart
The emptiness afterwards.12 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This trinet, Love's Petals Pulled Apart, using the 2-2-6-6-6-2-2 formatting, finds that the very petal pulling that indicates who loves who can be referenced in a terrible split as well. Flowers pay the price again.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
This trinet, Love's Petals Pulled Apart, using the 2-2-6-6-6-2-2 formatting, finds that the very petal pulling that indicates who loves who can be referenced in a terrible split as well. Flowers pay the price again.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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The innocent suffer the most. Always.
Thanks for reviewing. I'll try to be more cheerful next time!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I know these feelings and the emptiness loss can leave behind, I enjoyed your words here and wish you luck with the contest, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
I know these feelings and the emptiness loss can leave behind, I enjoyed your words here and wish you luck with the contest, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thanks very much, Dolly.
Comment from kahpot
This is a wonderful Trinet, love, heartbreak, all going on down the line, and the pulling of the petals-great artwork, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
This is a wonderful Trinet, love, heartbreak, all going on down the line, and the pulling of the petals-great artwork, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 11-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for your comments.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
I love this! Sorry it took me so long to read. I had a wonderful day with grandchildren. I love how you rhymed the short lines! Beautiful picture too! xoxoxo
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
I love this! Sorry it took me so long to read. I had a wonderful day with grandchildren. I love how you rhymed the short lines! Beautiful picture too! xoxoxo
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your lovely review, Diana!
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Of course, you are always welcome! xoxo
Comment from Gail Denham
This is a chilling story in your poem. I hope it doesn't apply to you personally. You've used many images that are sharp - pulling the petals off a daisy (not to say "he loves me, he loves me not) but anguish pulled them off.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
This is a chilling story in your poem. I hope it doesn't apply to you personally. You've used many images that are sharp - pulling the petals off a daisy (not to say "he loves me, he loves me not) but anguish pulled them off.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review, Gail. The situation in the poem has happened to me, so that is probably why it is so emphatically dark.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- a very well-written trinet that speaks so clearly of betrayal and sadness that it brings the reader into your mood of melancholy -- great job!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
Wow -- a very well-written trinet that speaks so clearly of betrayal and sadness that it brings the reader into your mood of melancholy -- great job!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your review. The poem is rather grim, but I'm pleased it captured the emotion. 'Feeling is foremost'.
Comment from V McCrary
Wow, If I could put a big sad :-( and then a scared face :-0 here, I would. I'm in a fresh relationship of almost 5 years that has been "off & on" and your words perfectly describe how each breakup has made me feel and even voices what I pray I'll never feel again... thank you for putting it into words. Keep writing. V
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
Wow, If I could put a big sad :-( and then a scared face :-0 here, I would. I'm in a fresh relationship of almost 5 years that has been "off & on" and your words perfectly describe how each breakup has made me feel and even voices what I pray I'll never feel again... thank you for putting it into words. Keep writing. V
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019
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It makes me sad that you are feeling these emotions as I have. There is a Maori phrase here in NZ: "Kia Kaha"... it means "Stay Strong". I send you a hug and good thoughts of happiness.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I'm sorry if you lost your love and it sounds completely.
Your poem however is done very well. The rhyme and rhythm sound pretty good. It's sad when a friendship breaks up but sometimes it can't be helped.
Good job!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
I'm sorry if you lost your love and it sounds completely.
Your poem however is done very well. The rhyme and rhythm sound pretty good. It's sad when a friendship breaks up but sometimes it can't be helped.
Good job!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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I think in this case it was best that it broke up because the 'beloved' turned out to be a 2-faced phony. We can get sucked in sometimes and then our sincerity is abused.
Thanks very much for reviewing.
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You're very welcome
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent entry in this trinet poetry contest. I like the construct of the work, the fluctuating short and long, commentary and the great use of language makes this a pretty good competitor, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
This is an excellent entry in this trinet poetry contest. I like the construct of the work, the fluctuating short and long, commentary and the great use of language makes this a pretty good competitor, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your comments, Roy. Much appreciated.
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Welcome
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Most welcome
Comment from Nike23
I like your trinet poem. Your word choice is descriptive and vivid. Your words create images in the reader's minds. I like the lines "You have planted in this heart -
then pulled all love's petals apart." This is very visual. Good job.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
I like your trinet poem. Your word choice is descriptive and vivid. Your words create images in the reader's minds. I like the lines "You have planted in this heart -
then pulled all love's petals apart." This is very visual. Good job.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019
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Thanks you so much for this great review.