Comment from pome lover

Excellent

wonderful!
I like the way you formatted this poem, and, of course, your words.
It is sad, getting older, and it's hard being sustained by memories -
which, by the way, you captured beautifully.
good job and good luck.
pome lover

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019

Thanks for this lovely review.

Comment from Nike23

Excellent

I liked your poem a lot. The word choice was descriptive and vivid. I loved the rhyme scheme in the beginning as it was clever rhymes with the use of off rhyme. We all wish to have someone to grow old with to remember the yesterday. Good job

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks for your review and nice comments. I'll probably end up a grumpy old woman with no one to share our memories with! That's where writing poetry comes in. I get to share them with others that way.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Oh this is so very melancholic but oh so very well-written! :) You have done a wonderful job with your mixed verse here that you truly have the reader lost in memories of their own!! Thank you for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2019

Thanks for your review, Yvette. Much appreciated.

Comment from RodG

Good

I'm fast-coming to my 50th anniversary, so I can truly relate to the Speaker's taking time to sadly ponder memories of the distant past. I especially like the description in stanza 6 of what they did. I don't wish to offend but I think the repetition in stanzas 4-5 is unnecessary. I would leap from stanza 3 to the long stanza 6.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019

What a milestone! Well done on making a good choice at the beginning.
Timely advice, Rod. I felt it was slightly awkward and your comment confirmed it. I've ditched some repeated lines, regrouped and added another. (I wrote this a few weeks ago with the idea of it being song lyrics with a refrain, and then this contest prompt came along and the subject suited.)

Comment from Loredana

Excellent

Simply beautiful. I think commenting on your poem is superfluous. You depicted the passing of time, love, happiness, and sadness skillfully. It's sad and beautiful.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019

Thank you so much for your lovely review. I was trying for some emotional depth in the poem without making it too soppy.

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Growing old. Why the heck can't it be growing young? This is a great poem that has a lot of thoughts many of us have in this growing to old age drama called life! Good luck. This one's a beauty! xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019

Thanks for your great review.
Well... I guess the growing old poem could be about growing young too... running around in purple gumboots and paddling in duck ponds. Oldies can behave pretty irresponsibly. I had a 75-yr old friend who went away to a Golden Oldies sports events to play bowls and she nearly got arrested for climbing a statue in a park for a dare.

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

Great poem! I love all the rhyming, giving it some bounce. Your poem easily rolls off the tongue when read aloud.
Memories of yesteryear are for blending in with today. Because without yesterday, you wouldn't have today@

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2019

Thanks Patty. I always read my poems out as I am writing them (the cat got a bit sick of listening to this one and left the room).
Your closing comment is profoundly true.

reply by Patty Palmer on 10-Aug-2019

You're welcome!