Lazy River
ABC Poetry30 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A very well written ABC Poem, Melissa. You added rhyme and meter and made it even better. I don't know if I would swim in a river or pond in this day and age. The TV is filled with horror stories about what could be there. LOL Good luck in the contest, an excellent entry. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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A very well written ABC Poem, Melissa. You added rhyme and meter and made it even better. I don't know if I would swim in a river or pond in this day and age. The TV is filled with horror stories about what could be there. LOL Good luck in the contest, an excellent entry. Nancy:)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hi Nancy. When we were growing up, going to the river to swim was a fun day out... I still wish all pleasures were as simple and inexpensive as those times were. Thank you for your wonderful review.
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
I regret the delay in responding, but the Baltic cruise ship had an unstable internet signal. Just got back home and have lots of catching up to do.
You captured the mood and the scene so well and added the perfect picture. Best wishes in the ABC Contest- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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I regret the delay in responding, but the Baltic cruise ship had an unstable internet signal. Just got back home and have lots of catching up to do.
You captured the mood and the scene so well and added the perfect picture. Best wishes in the ABC Contest- Joan
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hi Joan... Welcome home! Thanks for the lovely review and I hope you had a good time on your travels.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
An ABC that also rhymes aabbb with feminine rhyme in in the opening couplet. Considering the meaning though. Our skin is, thank goodness waterproof, otherwise we would become waterlogged and soon drown. So would the third line be better written '... creeps around my skin'?
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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An ABC that also rhymes aabbb with feminine rhyme in in the opening couplet. Considering the meaning though. Our skin is, thank goodness waterproof, otherwise we would become waterlogged and soon drown. So would the third line be better written '... creeps around my skin'?
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hi Jim, I love the suggestion and have edited the verse to reflect it. Thank you. :)
Melissa
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You're welcome
Comment from Aussie
I love swimming, so relaxing and calming to the spirit. I felt your joy as you floated along. Beautiful photo to compliment your poem. Your words flow like the ebb and flow of the tide. Well done friend.
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I love swimming, so relaxing and calming to the spirit. I felt your joy as you floated along. Beautiful photo to compliment your poem. Your words flow like the ebb and flow of the tide. Well done friend.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thank you. I was at the pool yesterday writing poetry. I would float a while then go write. Haha ~ my inspiration. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
Great job in rhyming this ABC poem and keeping the alphabetic order throughout all five lines. I'm impressed with your choice of words because you used all the letters of the alphabet except J!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Great job in rhyming this ABC poem and keeping the alphabetic order throughout all five lines. I'm impressed with your choice of words because you used all the letters of the alphabet except J!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hi Helen. I had not realized I had used so many different letters. Haha. Fun. Thanks bunches.
Melissa
Comment from CD Richards
Watch out for crocodiles, Melissa!
This is a lovely ABC poem. You create a wonderful sense of peace and calm through very effective word choices. Wonderful selection of accompanying image as well. Best of luck in the contest. Craig
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Watch out for crocodiles, Melissa!
This is a lovely ABC poem. You create a wonderful sense of peace and calm through very effective word choices. Wonderful selection of accompanying image as well. Best of luck in the contest. Craig
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Haha... only you folks from Australia and NZ think of crocs.... Thank goodness that is a concern for only those in Florida and Louisiana here in the States. Thanks for the lovely review, Craig.
Melissa
Comment from DonandVicki
An ABC poem that feels so refreshing, the artwork that you chose to complement your poem looks so inviting. Most ABC poems do not flow as well as yours, most seem forced.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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An ABC poem that feels so refreshing, the artwork that you chose to complement your poem looks so inviting. Most ABC poems do not flow as well as yours, most seem forced.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Thank you, Don, for the lovely review. I am delighted you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
Now this is the kind of lazy hazy dog days of summer that are thoroughly enjoyable. Excellent photograph to go along with a lovely afternoon floating in a peaceful, dreamy stream.
Great job with your ABC entry, Melissa and wishing you much luck with mysterious Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Now this is the kind of lazy hazy dog days of summer that are thoroughly enjoyable. Excellent photograph to go along with a lovely afternoon floating in a peaceful, dreamy stream.
Great job with your ABC entry, Melissa and wishing you much luck with mysterious Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2019
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Hi Gloria. Thank you very much. I was at the pool yesterday and would go float, then come back and write... and so on. I just had to write about a lazy day floating in the water. LOL. Thanks much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your ABC poem is well-written, descriptive, and appealing. You have painted a scenario In which the speaker is relaxed and satisfied. Line 4:
first word needs two l's, according to dictionary.com.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Your ABC poem is well-written, descriptive, and appealing. You have painted a scenario In which the speaker is relaxed and satisfied. Line 4:
first word needs two l's, according to dictionary.com.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Hi Janice. Thank you for your comments. I will certainly go and edit the mistake. :)
Melissa
Comment from Mistydawn
Your poem is so peaceful, serene that I felt very relaxed towards the end. Your great word choice description paints such a vivid picture that I felt like I was there, enjoying the day with you. Thanks for the enjoyable float trip.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Your poem is so peaceful, serene that I felt very relaxed towards the end. Your great word choice description paints such a vivid picture that I felt like I was there, enjoying the day with you. Thanks for the enjoyable float trip.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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You can float down my river any old day, Misty... LOL. Thanks much!!
Melissa
