Innocence
a 5-7-5 poem18 total reviews
Comment from HarryT
So much said in few words. Wonderful work. Picture is great. This piece deserves six stars. .....................................................................
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
So much said in few words. Wonderful work. Picture is great. This piece deserves six stars. .....................................................................
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Hi there, Harry, good morning. Thanks so very much for your wonderful review and gift of stars. I really appreciate it!!
Melissa
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You are welcome. Really enjoyed your poem.
Comment from LisaMay
Your little poem is a piece of perfection in its capturing of the essence of curiosity. The genuinely inquiring mind holds no judgement, just an innocent awareness of wanting to know something... no agenda. I adore the accompanying photo.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
Your little poem is a piece of perfection in its capturing of the essence of curiosity. The genuinely inquiring mind holds no judgement, just an innocent awareness of wanting to know something... no agenda. I adore the accompanying photo.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Hi Lisa. I really liked reading your review and think you should expand it into a write... lovely sentiments... thanks so much for your comments. :)
Melissa
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You started it! maybe you should write a longer poem too?
Comment from Y. M. Roger
As such, it is why it must be protected from those who take advantage of the curious... :( ;( A wonderful and poignant offering for the contest -- best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
As such, it is why it must be protected from those who take advantage of the curious... :( ;( A wonderful and poignant offering for the contest -- best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Innocence, has the right set up and reminds us that we learn only what we don't know and know only what we believe is true. New things are the light of learning.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
This 5-7-5, Innocence, has the right set up and reminds us that we learn only what we don't know and know only what we believe is true. New things are the light of learning.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from rockmann
Very powerful poem. And the photo you picked perfectly illustrates what you were saying in only 17 syllables. I thoroughly enjoyed it, and hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
Very powerful poem. And the photo you picked perfectly illustrates what you were saying in only 17 syllables. I thoroughly enjoyed it, and hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much rockmann!!
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is an absolutely wonderful 5-7-5 poem. It sends shivers down my spine. I have written multiple poems about the innocence and gentleness of deer. I hate hunting them for sport. Thanks for the support on that front. But, you take my deer theme a big step forward. You speak to the essence of curiosity. That is sheer genius to do that in 17 syllables.
Well done for sure.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
This is an absolutely wonderful 5-7-5 poem. It sends shivers down my spine. I have written multiple poems about the innocence and gentleness of deer. I hate hunting them for sport. Thanks for the support on that front. But, you take my deer theme a big step forward. You speak to the essence of curiosity. That is sheer genius to do that in 17 syllables.
Well done for sure.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I like this 5-7-5 because it also sounds like it could be the beginning of an even longer poem, it is that strong. I get consonance with "unbiased" and "keenest" and the "ur" sound repeated in "pure" and "curiosity." The photo is classic. Thank you for entering!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
I like this 5-7-5 because it also sounds like it could be the beginning of an even longer poem, it is that strong. I get consonance with "unbiased" and "keenest" and the "ur" sound repeated in "pure" and "curiosity." The photo is classic. Thank you for entering!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
In pure, unbiased
innocence dwells the keenest
curiosity. Beautiful said and nice hymn dedicated to the curiosity. that lays unbiased Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
In pure, unbiased
innocence dwells the keenest
curiosity. Beautiful said and nice hymn dedicated to the curiosity. that lays unbiased Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much!!
Comment from Patty Palmer
How cute is this? The little boy is curious about the deer. The deer is curious about the little boy. Neither one seems to be scared of the other. good job!
God bless!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
How cute is this? The little boy is curious about the deer. The deer is curious about the little boy. Neither one seems to be scared of the other. good job!
God bless!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much.
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You're welcome
Comment from tempeste
The innocence of a child is a beautiful thing .. It's a shame that as we grow up we lose it.
Not knowing about danger, death or evil.
....it's tragic that some sick people take advantage of children's innocence to do them hard.
In only eight words you revealed a great truth.
A great topic, a lovely read with a great illustration.
....unlike most kids I never wanted to grow up.
I remember when I turned 10 I cried because having two digits made me feel " old "..some how I knew growing up didn't mean being able to do what one wanted finally ( which is what most kids think).
I think your entry will appeal to the sensibility of the committee.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
The innocence of a child is a beautiful thing .. It's a shame that as we grow up we lose it.
Not knowing about danger, death or evil.
....it's tragic that some sick people take advantage of children's innocence to do them hard.
In only eight words you revealed a great truth.
A great topic, a lovely read with a great illustration.
....unlike most kids I never wanted to grow up.
I remember when I turned 10 I cried because having two digits made me feel " old "..some how I knew growing up didn't mean being able to do what one wanted finally ( which is what most kids think).
I think your entry will appeal to the sensibility of the committee.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much!!