Comment from Darlene Franklin

Excellent

I found this form difficult. Did you? Good, strong, descriptive words to describe a broken heart. I'm a little confused by left in line 5, leaving line 6. Well done, and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019

Thank you, idea was if someone steals your heart it leaves a hole which would bleed, which left me grieving

Comment from Lobber

Excellent

Hello,
Wow what a difficult rhyme scheme to work with. I understand how Grieving and Thieving work together, but then Leaving and Bleeding becomes a stretch ...you have left me Grieving or is it Heaving? and forget which Hole. Sorry- Lobber

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019

Thank you very much, every hole needs a bit of heave

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Grieving, thieving, leaving, bleeding powerful and gradual action verbs cascading into a bleeding hole - the bleeding soul. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019

Thank you very much

Comment from Henry King

Excellent

This is an excellent poem, but I think of it as an antiromantic poem. That person has left a trodden soul in the dirt. Perfect words for a dark event. The colors of the art work support the poet's view perfectly. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019

Thank you very much, I will have to look up that form you mentioned

reply by Henry King on 17-Aug-2019

You are welcome.

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

I think you made your point with the few words you were allowed to use. Good luck on the contest!
Whoever this person is you wrote this poem for, better leave town LOL!
Patty

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2019

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019

Thank you very much