Pyrite
Not What It Seems11 total reviews
Comment from Joseph Geraci
Another great poem and good idea for a write. I would have added an adjective in front of the word "purpose" primarily because that sentence has too few syllables in my opinion. Also "still beautiful though" sounds repetitive. I think just "still beautiful" or "beautiful though" would sound better. Probably the latter
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
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Another great poem and good idea for a write. I would have added an adjective in front of the word "purpose" primarily because that sentence has too few syllables in my opinion. Also "still beautiful though" sounds repetitive. I think just "still beautiful" or "beautiful though" would sound better. Probably the latter
Comment Written 08-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
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Thanks for this great review and the shining stars! It's much appreciated.
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Your more than welcome!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines flow smoothly. I like the question you pose to readers about finding what they believe, or hope to believe, is gold. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry, Mystery Author. Your lines flow smoothly. I like the question you pose to readers about finding what they believe, or hope to believe, is gold. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 07-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem..I really appreciate it.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think it is amazing that you have rhymes like 'surface' and 'purpose' in a short poem about iron pyrite. This is a thoughtful poem about what a mineral might mean to people who mistake it for something else, namely gold. Four stanzas help develop the theme. The last stanza helps reiterate the theme. Nice entry in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2019
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I think it is amazing that you have rhymes like 'surface' and 'purpose' in a short poem about iron pyrite. This is a thoughtful poem about what a mineral might mean to people who mistake it for something else, namely gold. Four stanzas help develop the theme. The last stanza helps reiterate the theme. Nice entry in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind words...they mean a lot.
Comment from AprilViolet
This poem is exceptional. I love how it has more than one meaning and is a metaphor for how things are not always what they seem. Its inspirational and clever. Six stars from me!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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This poem is exceptional. I love how it has more than one meaning and is a metaphor for how things are not always what they seem. Its inspirational and clever. Six stars from me!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for this starlit review!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a chunk of iron that has the same appearance than gold but are worthless although many use it for simple jewellery that looks good.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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A very well-written poem about a chunk of iron that has the same appearance than gold but are worthless although many use it for simple jewellery that looks good.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading my poem. I appreciate that you took the time.
Comment from Sallyo
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What an interesting kind of form, with the last lines enjambed (I think that's the term...) I like the ponderings on this mineral or metal or whatever it is...
My favourite line is ...you'll have a trinket to adore.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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it's
should be its
What an interesting kind of form, with the last lines enjambed (I think that's the term...) I like the ponderings on this mineral or metal or whatever it is...
My favourite line is ...you'll have a trinket to adore.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you for this nice review, i really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. I did not see any spag or error. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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This is a very interesting and well written poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. I did not see any spag or error. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 29-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you for this kind review! : )
Comment from Susan X Smith
Interesting and different take on artificial jewelry substitutes. I recently gave away much of my old jewelry, even the genuine stuff, as I really use only a few pieces. I did give some very sparkly earrings to a niece which were not real diamonds, but thought that she would enjoy the glitter anyway.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Interesting and different take on artificial jewelry substitutes. I recently gave away much of my old jewelry, even the genuine stuff, as I really use only a few pieces. I did give some very sparkly earrings to a niece which were not real diamonds, but thought that she would enjoy the glitter anyway.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your review. It was so nice of you to give your niece those earrings, I'm sure she'll treasure them for years to come! :)
Comment from Cindy Warren
I don't know why pyrite is worthless. It's so pretty it shpuld be good for something. In your second stanza, it's should be its. It's is short for it is. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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I don't know why pyrite is worthless. It's so pretty it shpuld be good for something. In your second stanza, it's should be its. It's is short for it is. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Yes! It is very pretty. : ) Thank you for your helpful review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Janetsue
I like the positive conclusion to this excellent writing about pyrite. I can imagine the excitement when, thinking it is gold, large nuggets are found. Even knowing it was just pyrite, I would love to have the experience of making a find and having a necklace like that one in the picture. :-)
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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I like the positive conclusion to this excellent writing about pyrite. I can imagine the excitement when, thinking it is gold, large nuggets are found. Even knowing it was just pyrite, I would love to have the experience of making a find and having a necklace like that one in the picture. :-)
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. Thank you very much for your kind review.
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You're very welcome!
