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Preserving Problems

Educational 5-7-5

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Comment from Sharon Haiste
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This short verse is a clever play on words.
I think the message is clear and a good one, something we should all remember.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2019

reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
    Thanks very much for your review, Sharon. (the poem came 2nd in the contest)
Comment from DonandVicki
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I like the thought that this produces. We bottle things up inside just like canning problems. Unfortunately our cupboards become overfull and a lot of those peaches become spoiled.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    Oh dear... those peaches should've been eaten, got rid of, or shared earlier!
    Thanks for your review.
Comment from JudyE
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This is excellent advice and I loved the words you've chosen to connect bottling fruit (it's bottling in Australia, not canning) with some sage advice.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    As an Aussie (wink), that's why I used bottling. Can we bottle sage?
reply by JudyE on 31-Aug-2019
    I'm glad you didn't have a go at me for being patronising. haha
    In thyme, maybe we'll be able to bottle sage. Wouldn't that be mint?
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    I'll ask Basil. Do you cumin here often?
reply by JudyE on 31-Aug-2019
    We had a sheep called Baasil. Someone else named it before they found out it was a girl. Can ewe believe that?
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    Who pulled the wool over who's eyes??
reply by JudyE on 31-Aug-2019
    They were trying to fleece me! Our sheep had some weird names - Monty, Joel, Buster, Petal, Hercules. Petal was the only one we named.
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    I remember reading about Hercules and seeing his photo. The spring lambs are in the fields around here now - too cute!!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
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I really like this. I love the very clever and beautiful way that you've used your colorful words with some very well thought out accompanying artwork. The message conveyed in this is clear, true, and strong. I enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    Thanks for your wonderfully supportive comments!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about preserving items that can go wrong when we do not know all the details and rules to follow for preserving especially food that can go bad and make people sick.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    Thanks, Sandra!
    Bottling problems up is probably a bit like food poisoning.
Comment from Lobber
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I agree with you...my mother did canning- a strange word for thinks going into jars - her jams were topped with paraffin instead of rings. I used to swipe pieces of it to wax window screens on Garbage Night - the day before Halloween- Lobber

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
    Yeah... I never understood why it was called 'canning' when it was in jars. My mum did it with paraffin too.
    Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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You have really made excellent use of all of your syllables in this GREAT
educational 5-7-5. You have cleverly made a play on words in each line--all while conveying a wise message!

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    Thanks for your excellent review, Janice.
Comment from karenina
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So, you've seen me trying to make strawberry preserves then? (LOL)---
I don't have that "preserving" gene some do...either it doesn't thicken or I end up growing what, in a few months will be homemade penicillin! Cute entry. Good luck!--Karenina

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    Haha... but I think I'll pass on the penicillin thanks!
    Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Janetsue
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This is a stellar posting for the Educational 5-7-5 writing prompt. It is very creative--and it is easy to understand the nuances of the double-meanings. Sincere best wishes in the contest with this outstanding poem.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    Thanks for your wonderful comments - much appreciated.
reply by Janetsue on 31-Aug-2019
    You're very welcome!
Comment from Diana L Crawford
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This is a very cleverly written poem! I really like how you used the concept of preserving in a jar and related it to internal turmoil!

This is an excellent entry for your contest!! Good luck to you!! xoxo

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2019

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2019
    Thanks Diana. The poem had its origins because a close friend appears to have been bottling up some resentments and is now overreacting (as far as I can see) and this is causing her upset. She should have addressed any issues earlier, I feel, so she is not so 'jarred' by the situation.
reply by Diana L Crawford on 30-Aug-2019
    It?s amazing what things tend to inspire our poetry! It was brilliant to put that into words! xoxo