Mystery
a mystery16 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made good use of all of your syllables to convey a theme about love, which is that precious, elusive thing we all want--that mixture
of pain and magic.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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You have made good use of all of your syllables to convey a theme about love, which is that precious, elusive thing we all want--that mixture
of pain and magic.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Ogden
I wish I could say I found a message in your poem, or a clue to any magic it says unfolded. If there's time before the contest deadline, I suggest you work on adding some meat to the bones.
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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I wish I could say I found a message in your poem, or a clue to any magic it says unfolded. If there's time before the contest deadline, I suggest you work on adding some meat to the bones.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Thank you
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You're welcome, Iza. Don't forget to plump up those bones!
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Don
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Hmm, I'm chewing on the use of the word "mystery." Is it love's mystery, that it should act in this strange way? And how does craving pain lead to magic? You definitely have my head spinning! Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Hmm, I'm chewing on the use of the word "mystery." Is it love's mystery, that it should act in this strange way? And how does craving pain lead to magic? You definitely have my head spinning! Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Thank you
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a short poem in a 1-5-7 form, which I have never tried before, but here it seems Love gets defined in new ways which make the reader think about every single word. It's always more than chemistry, but it still remains a mystery. Once you experience the beginning of love, you can't help but crave it. But love also has a tendency to bring pain, with breakups, etc. Good love stories are definitely magical, and they definitely unfold! Nice job on a short one! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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This is a short poem in a 1-5-7 form, which I have never tried before, but here it seems Love gets defined in new ways which make the reader think about every single word. It's always more than chemistry, but it still remains a mystery. Once you experience the beginning of love, you can't help but crave it. But love also has a tendency to bring pain, with breakups, etc. Good love stories are definitely magical, and they definitely unfold! Nice job on a short one! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind comments
Comment from lyenochka
A fascinating way to define Love as a mystery. And that the second line introduces "pain" shows us the risks involved in giving love. But the final line tells us that the magic is all worth it.
Best to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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A fascinating way to define Love as a mystery. And that the second line introduces "pain" shows us the risks involved in giving love. But the final line tells us that the magic is all worth it.
Best to you in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Gail Denham
There is pain in love, that's for sure. Even if the two come together, there can be misunderstanding and sometimes one didn't vet the other well. But then there is the magic of true love
You point all these out in your nice poem
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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There is pain in love, that's for sure. Even if the two come together, there can be misunderstanding and sometimes one didn't vet the other well. But then there is the magic of true love
You point all these out in your nice poem
Comment Written 10-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This poem is a very subtle one for me, which I found a bit difficult. But I especially liked the resonance, and the image was perfection. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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This poem is a very subtle one for me, which I found a bit difficult. But I especially liked the resonance, and the image was perfection. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind words
Comment from Aussie
Good luck with your 1-5-7 contest entry. I stumbled on the second line, "mystery craved pain," love is a mystery, I guess pain is involved until the love is secured. Many types of love. Many magic stories too. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Good luck with your 1-5-7 contest entry. I stumbled on the second line, "mystery craved pain," love is a mystery, I guess pain is involved until the love is secured. Many types of love. Many magic stories too. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your kind words
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 1-5-7 poem about love between lovers often cause them more pain than pleasure and yet they claim they love each other and will never part that is the mystery of love.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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A very well-written 1-5-7 poem about love between lovers often cause them more pain than pleasure and yet they claim they love each other and will never part that is the mystery of love.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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So well said😃thank you
Comment from humpwhistle
I will admit, love is a baffling mystery to me.
A craved pain? You may be right about that--and eloquently stated.
Magic? I don't buy that part. Love is work. Hard work.
Best of luck
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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I will admit, love is a baffling mystery to me.
A craved pain? You may be right about that--and eloquently stated.
Magic? I don't buy that part. Love is work. Hard work.
Best of luck
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thank you
