Me and You - 40+ years of Poems V2
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Caring"Life, Love, Pain, Regrets, Struggles, Blessings
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Comment from Susan Larson
If this was intended to make me think, then you have met your objective. To love unconditionally or to give unconditionally we are encouraged to do, but to care unconditionally, well, you have me pondering this, which is what good writing should do.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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If this was intended to make me think, then you have met your objective. To love unconditionally or to give unconditionally we are encouraged to do, but to care unconditionally, well, you have me pondering this, which is what good writing should do.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thanks for the review and compliments. Blessings to you for your time to read and review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A unique senryu offering for the contest...so bright and colorful! ;) I would suggest, perhaps, removing all of the harsh over-capitalization as it does not allow the words to deliver your gentle message and detracts from any warm feelings of benevolence you were most likely hoping to evoke... :) Best of luck to you in the contest... :)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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A unique senryu offering for the contest...so bright and colorful! ;) I would suggest, perhaps, removing all of the harsh over-capitalization as it does not allow the words to deliver your gentle message and detracts from any warm feelings of benevolence you were most likely hoping to evoke... :) Best of luck to you in the contest... :)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the review and suggestions. As this 5-7-5 syllable only contains 7 words, I thought it important to Emphasize them in capital letters. Blessings to you for your time to read and review.
