Unsealed
... said the irritated turtle7 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a cute poem. With the picture and the poem tells a whole story right there! The turtle had come on the beach during early tide so it was dark yet, Later this silly seal happened along the same path. The turtle, who was there first had settled down in the soft sand to sleep. The silly seal, paying no attention in the dark, laid down and went directly to sleep.. on the turtle's flipper! He pulled and pulled but he can't get loose. The turtle is hoping for a search party.
LOL I know I'm silly, but you have to admit it does tell a story!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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This is a cute poem. With the picture and the poem tells a whole story right there! The turtle had come on the beach during early tide so it was dark yet, Later this silly seal happened along the same path. The turtle, who was there first had settled down in the soft sand to sleep. The silly seal, paying no attention in the dark, laid down and went directly to sleep.. on the turtle's flipper! He pulled and pulled but he can't get loose. The turtle is hoping for a search party.
LOL I know I'm silly, but you have to admit it does tell a story!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Hahaha... Patty, that is sooo cute! I love your review more than my verse. Thanks so much!!
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LOL I don't know if you read my story. Kidnapped va telephone,,, in the story the lady calls 911 for help. The sheriff and the police both come to her aid. There had been 2 kidnapping in the next county and all happened the same way.
The detectives leave without a word and finds the baby plus the two that were kidnapped! Phew! I nned to take a breath there. ANY WAY, I get a review from I don't remember who. /but, he writes and said. The sheriff and the police would not arrive at the same time.
detectives wouldn't just leave and he said, it would have been all over the news and the lady wouldn't put the baby on the porch to nap. I wrote back and told him that my town I was talking about. My town was Mayberry and Andy the sheriff and Barney, the deputy most of the time they arrive together! because they only have one squad car! The detectives takng off without a word, I told him he's watching the wrong crime thriller movies Anyway he didn't appreciate it cuz he never wrote back LOL
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Haha... so fun to read your comments...thanks for letting me know... haha.
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LOL It doesn't takemuch to amuse me!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow this poem is amazing I wish I had a six star left; and the picture you choose goes so well with the poem. "this old big dipper
is lying on my flipper...
'bout to un~seal it!" Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Wow this poem is amazing I wish I had a six star left; and the picture you choose goes so well with the poem. "this old big dipper
is lying on my flipper...
'bout to un~seal it!" Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
such a clever poem. Like the poem. The seal looks so huge. The turtle is not too small either. I cannot imagine touching either one them. If they would land on the ocean shores, I wouldn't go near them.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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such a clever poem. Like the poem. The seal looks so huge. The turtle is not too small either. I cannot imagine touching either one them. If they would land on the ocean shores, I wouldn't go near them.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thank you. I would steer clear too!!
Comment from Lobber
Hi - I like your erotic approach to turtle sex ... one flipper (young or old) is better than no flipper at all... sealed with a kiss- or is it a wet sloppy kiss? Lobber
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Hi - I like your erotic approach to turtle sex ... one flipper (young or old) is better than no flipper at all... sealed with a kiss- or is it a wet sloppy kiss? Lobber
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from Susan X Smith
Ha ha, cute and humorous poem. I find the animal picture you chose to complement it very appealing. The seals look lovely and you get my seal of approval, ha ha.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Ha ha, cute and humorous poem. I find the animal picture you chose to complement it very appealing. The seals look lovely and you get my seal of approval, ha ha.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Haha.. Thank you!
Comment from Mark D. R.
Great use of your words for this contest entry.
'un-seal' is a terrific spin for your verse. Obviously, your illustration heightens our appreciation of your Senryu post.
Not a fan of initial caps for any short verse, but possibly 'this' should be?
Good luck in voting.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Great use of your words for this contest entry.
'un-seal' is a terrific spin for your verse. Obviously, your illustration heightens our appreciation of your Senryu post.
Not a fan of initial caps for any short verse, but possibly 'this' should be?
Good luck in voting.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Mark.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
The contest calls for a 5-7-5 and you have 6 syllables in the last line:
"I'm (1) 'bout (1) to (1) un~seal (2) it (1)!" = 6 syllables.
The idea is clever though. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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The contest calls for a 5-7-5 and you have 6 syllables in the last line:
"I'm (1) 'bout (1) to (1) un~seal (2) it (1)!" = 6 syllables.
The idea is clever though. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2019
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THANKS! I am off to edit!
