To Dream Again
A Senryu12 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, To Dream Again, has the proper 5-7-5 framework and uses the feathery bird to emphasize that we can't always stay in the air, but we can always attempt to relaunch and fly again.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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This senryu, To Dream Again, has the proper 5-7-5 framework and uses the feathery bird to emphasize that we can't always stay in the air, but we can always attempt to relaunch and fly again.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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Thank you for sharing your insightful comments!
Comment from robyn corum
June,
Yummy! It's clear to see why this poem took the ribbon. I love the idea of picking up those broken dreams, bandaging them and setting them free to fly again. Lovely! Thanks and congrats!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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June,
Yummy! It's clear to see why this poem took the ribbon. I love the idea of picking up those broken dreams, bandaging them and setting them free to fly again. Lovely! Thanks and congrats!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
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I am so glad this piece resonated with you! Thanks for taking the time to read and share your sentiments.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is a very interesting way to look at unfulfilled dreams. I've never thought of them like that. I guess dreams do take flight when they're fulfilled, and lame and broken when not. I like it! You've done a fine job with this clever and well thought out work. I enjoyed reading it! Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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This is a very interesting way to look at unfulfilled dreams. I've never thought of them like that. I guess dreams do take flight when they're fulfilled, and lame and broken when not. I like it! You've done a fine job with this clever and well thought out work. I enjoyed reading it! Well done!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your encouraging feedback!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You touched me with these words, when must have that tenacity to keep trying and never give up so that we succeed in life, an uplifting senryu and you won my vote here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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You touched me with these words, when must have that tenacity to keep trying and never give up so that we succeed in life, an uplifting senryu and you won my vote here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thank you for reading and sharing your insightful comments.
Comment from lyenochka
A very nicely phrased senryu! I like how you personify the dreams and that you call the reader to heal those bird-like dreams to soar again. And sometimes, we need to change those dreams in the healing. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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A very nicely phrased senryu! I like how you personify the dreams and that you call the reader to heal those bird-like dreams to soar again. And sometimes, we need to change those dreams in the healing. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thank you for reading and sharing your insightful comments.
Comment from LisaMay
Hmmm.... in an abstract sense I can see that sharing emotion through language skill could demonstrate poetic ability; but how about the a-hole boyfriend/girlfriend who sends a nasty break-up text and breaks your heart?
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Hmmm.... in an abstract sense I can see that sharing emotion through language skill could demonstrate poetic ability; but how about the a-hole boyfriend/girlfriend who sends a nasty break-up text and breaks your heart?
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
Comment from BeasPeas
So very true. I think that is what we aim for each time we write something. Hopefully it will resonate with others. If not we have to be content that it was meaningful to us personally. Nice job. Marilyn
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So very true. I think that is what we aim for each time we write something. Hopefully it will resonate with others. If not we have to be content that it was meaningful to us personally. Nice job. Marilyn
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
Comment from Mark D. R.
Of course, he can also be a she! Since you use capitalization, I would recommend some punctuation mark after your second line and third line. IMHO it gives a greater snap to the meaning of your Senryu.
Your selected artwork is eye catching!
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Of course, he can also be a she! Since you use capitalization, I would recommend some punctuation mark after your second line and third line. IMHO it gives a greater snap to the meaning of your Senryu.
Your selected artwork is eye catching!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. That is a very simple, direct poem describing the reward the poet finds in his writing. Good luck in the contest. You complied with the terms of the senryu.
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Hello mystery writer. That is a very simple, direct poem describing the reward the poet finds in his writing. Good luck in the contest. You complied with the terms of the senryu.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
Comment from Susan Larson
What a wonderful thought worth contemplating. I think even prose needs a certain rhythm to flow into the heart of another and have some impact there. Very thought provoking.
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What a wonderful thought worth contemplating. I think even prose needs a certain rhythm to flow into the heart of another and have some impact there. Very thought provoking.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
