Warriors
The battle with cancer22 total reviews
Comment from Alex Rosel
Congratulations on your well deserved contest win.
Your consistent rhyming throughout, cell/hell/bell, is effective, and is indicative of the hideous manner of the topic you've breached. That's neatly constructed.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Congratulations on your well deserved contest win.
Your consistent rhyming throughout, cell/hell/bell, is effective, and is indicative of the hideous manner of the topic you've breached. That's neatly constructed.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Thank you Alex for the review.
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
Mmmmm this hits hope even though I never had cancer. I feel your pain, your hope, your relief. All these feelings are expressed succinctly and sharply. It is hard to do this challenge well, but you did. You are a warrior poet. Thanks for sharing your real life challenge regarding your daughter! I applaud you both.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Mmmmm this hits hope even though I never had cancer. I feel your pain, your hope, your relief. All these feelings are expressed succinctly and sharply. It is hard to do this challenge well, but you did. You are a warrior poet. Thanks for sharing your real life challenge regarding your daughter! I applaud you both.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the wonderful review!
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Beg pardon I neglected to correct the "hits hope" to be "hits home"
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Welcome!
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Thank you so much for your review!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written acrostic poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words that sounded like someone fighting it would say. Please check out this one thing:
Anger I am, mad as hell.
Do you think it should read - Angry I am....
Thank you for sharing! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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This is a very well written acrostic poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words that sounded like someone fighting it would say. Please check out this one thing:
Anger I am, mad as hell.
Do you think it should read - Angry I am....
Thank you for sharing! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2019
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Thank you Teri, I just repeat what I heard my daughter repeat...Anger is what was going on in her mind. Yes I am mad as hell. Anger was what the whole family felt so it was hard to place it all on her that's why I wrote it like I did. Thank you again for your review!
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You are so welcome. I am so sorry that is happening my friend. Thank you for letting me know! Please forgive me if I offended you! I truly did not mean to! May God bless you! Teri
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Teri you didn't offend me in any way. God Bless you!
Comment from Susan X Smith
Congratulations on fighting a tough battle - attitude is everything. Been there, done that. I enjoyed reading this poem. A deserving contest winner. Best wishes in your ongoing creative writing and continued good health.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Congratulations on fighting a tough battle - attitude is everything. Been there, done that. I enjoyed reading this poem. A deserving contest winner. Best wishes in your ongoing creative writing and continued good health.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you for your wonderful review!
Comment from Susan Larson
This poem is so powerful, so honest and so eloquent. My son lost a six year battle with brain cancer at age 39 after leading a healthy life. There are no guarantees and life is not fair. How thankful you must be that your daughter has won three battles with this dreaded curse.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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This poem is so powerful, so honest and so eloquent. My son lost a six year battle with brain cancer at age 39 after leading a healthy life. There are no guarantees and life is not fair. How thankful you must be that your daughter has won three battles with this dreaded curse.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Yes I am so Thankful, I Thank God everyday. Thank you so much for review.
Comment from jenintorre
This acrostic poem really touched my heart. It is written in such simple language and really puts the point across. Good luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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This acrostic poem really touched my heart. It is written in such simple language and really puts the point across. Good luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you Jen for the wonderful review...
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is strong tribute to your daughter and all who have fought the fight. My mother was a warrior at 79 when she was still bowling and won an award as the best in her league. She was filled with cancer but wanted to live her life to the fullest. She declined any treatment because it would affect on some of the tumors. She chose to have surgery to eliminate some pain. But she died of a heart attack. Hopefully other readers with feel free to share their warrior stories. Healing will come from your poem. Thank you. I am voting for this.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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This is strong tribute to your daughter and all who have fought the fight. My mother was a warrior at 79 when she was still bowling and won an award as the best in her league. She was filled with cancer but wanted to live her life to the fullest. She declined any treatment because it would affect on some of the tumors. She chose to have surgery to eliminate some pain. But she died of a heart attack. Hopefully other readers with feel free to share their warrior stories. Healing will come from your poem. Thank you. I am voting for this.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review.
Comment from Hitcher
It is a battle way too many have to fight and it takes no prisoners. I pray that I never have to step up to the plate and wage that particular war. I have seen the carnage left in its wake and have had to try and pick up the pieces and sooth the wounds of those left behind. She is indeed a true warrior friend.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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It is a battle way too many have to fight and it takes no prisoners. I pray that I never have to step up to the plate and wage that particular war. I have seen the carnage left in its wake and have had to try and pick up the pieces and sooth the wounds of those left behind. She is indeed a true warrior friend.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are strong, angry, creative and thought provoking.
The poem flows and connects well. Thank you for the author's notes.
The words of this poem became heartfelt thinking of those battling cancer. Your daughter is certainly a true Warrior. Thank you the strong expression
regarding the theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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The author's words are strong, angry, creative and thought provoking.
The poem flows and connects well. Thank you for the author's notes.
The words of this poem became heartfelt thinking of those battling cancer. Your daughter is certainly a true Warrior. Thank you the strong expression
regarding the theme of this poem.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for the review!
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet. I gave you your first vote.
I read your poem already yesterday and I have to confess that the words lingered in my mind until now..
Cancer is an ugly , sly enemy and I think your daughter is a very brave and courageous person.
" Warriors " is the perfect title for those like your daughter that have decided to fight this enemy with her claws.
The double meaning of cell in the phrase :
"Right or wrong did I deserve this cell. " is a smart line.
I wish you all the best in the competition.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Ciao mystery poet. I gave you your first vote.
I read your poem already yesterday and I have to confess that the words lingered in my mind until now..
Cancer is an ugly , sly enemy and I think your daughter is a very brave and courageous person.
" Warriors " is the perfect title for those like your daughter that have decided to fight this enemy with her claws.
The double meaning of cell in the phrase :
"Right or wrong did I deserve this cell. " is a smart line.
I wish you all the best in the competition.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the wonderful review. It's very hard for to talk about it. Its always on her mind and as her mother I pray continually for her peace.
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I can only imagine the pain you are going through..
I'm not a mother but I know it must be tremendously hard as a parent to see all the suffering your daughter is going through.
My thoughts go out to you both.. Continue to be strong for her.
God bless you.
