Bad blood
They suffered through no fault of their own8 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Yes, it does remind me of Romeo and Juliet. But at least, they lived and hopefully, found another one to love. The story is well done in verse and yes, sometimes, love gets deterred by families. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Yes, it does remind me of Romeo and Juliet. But at least, they lived and hopefully, found another one to love. The story is well done in verse and yes, sometimes, love gets deterred by families. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Many thanks Helen
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I very much enjoyed reading it and had a similar personal experience. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I very much enjoyed reading it and had a similar personal experience. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind words.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I wonder how many love stories have bitten the dust because of some stupid feud two families began many decades before! Your poem is very well-written and moving, telling a heart-wrenching story.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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I wonder how many love stories have bitten the dust because of some stupid feud two families began many decades before! Your poem is very well-written and moving, telling a heart-wrenching story.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thanks Janice.
Comment from Richard J
What a gorgeously presented Romeo and Juliette-esque tale you've so skillfully composed and generously shared with us.
One that should fare very well, indeed, in the contest.
Thank you, and the best of luck! ~ Richard : )
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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What a gorgeously presented Romeo and Juliette-esque tale you've so skillfully composed and generously shared with us.
One that should fare very well, indeed, in the contest.
Thank you, and the best of luck! ~ Richard : )
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thank you Richard. So glad you liked it.
Comment from A Little Bird
Congratulations on this rather sorrowful, but well-written poem. It does remind me of Romeo and Juliet, however I prefer how in your piece the lovers don't die tragic deaths.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Congratulations on this rather sorrowful, but well-written poem. It does remind me of Romeo and Juliet, however I prefer how in your piece the lovers don't die tragic deaths.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for the review and the super6*s. So glad you liked it.
Comment from LisaMay
This is a Romeo and Juliet scenario where the family history gets in the way of true love. Wouldn't it be great if love was left alone to be enjoyed, and family rifts could become a thing of the past. Holding onto a grudge spoils so many things. Forgiveness can fix things, then happiness has a chance.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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This is a Romeo and Juliet scenario where the family history gets in the way of true love. Wouldn't it be great if love was left alone to be enjoyed, and family rifts could become a thing of the past. Holding onto a grudge spoils so many things. Forgiveness can fix things, then happiness has a chance.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Well said Lisa May. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Sallyo
one summers' day.
one summer's day.
That kind of Montague and Capulet family thing could do it! Just one thing... I wondered why, if they didn't know their families were enemies, did they meet in secret? Did they have any other reason to hide their relationship?
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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one summers' day.
one summer's day.
That kind of Montague and Capulet family thing could do it! Just one thing... I wondered why, if they didn't know their families were enemies, did they meet in secret? Did they have any other reason to hide their relationship?
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Good point. I'll change it. Thanks for the review
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a touching poem. In the start it reminded me of Romeo and Juliet, but luckily this couple did not end up dead. The picture is a welcome addition to complement the words.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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This is a touching poem. In the start it reminded me of Romeo and Juliet, but luckily this couple did not end up dead. The picture is a welcome addition to complement the words.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Thanks Susan. When I read it back I thought it sounded a bit Romeo & Julietish.
