His Freight Never Abates
It's his Fate10 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Your poem is a great entry for the contest. Very eye-appealing; love the title; excellent rhyme; includes a message; and 'weight' and 'wait' were clever. So much creativity in this 1-6-1 poem.
Awesome job!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Your poem is a great entry for the contest. Very eye-appealing; love the title; excellent rhyme; includes a message; and 'weight' and 'wait' were clever. So much creativity in this 1-6-1 poem.
Awesome job!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Gale. Once again, you saw everything that I was trying to do.
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I thought it uniquely stood out. Best wishes!
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I thought it uniquely stood out. Best wishes!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, this made me laugh, this poor fella has to carry his house wherever he goes! Imagine that! But there again, he needs no one else to survive. If you gained any weight here, you would outgrow your house! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Ha ha ha, this made me laugh, this poor fella has to carry his house wherever he goes! Imagine that! But there again, he needs no one else to survive. If you gained any weight here, you would outgrow your house! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks, Dolly. I have always felt so sorry for turtles. They have such an awkward life.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 1-6-1 poem about the turtle that seems too big for his house on his back. This fellow definitely doesn't go hungry and have no restrictions in his diet.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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A very well-written 1-6-1 poem about the turtle that seems too big for his house on his back. This fellow definitely doesn't go hungry and have no restrictions in his diet.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Sandra. I feel so sorry for turtles. They seem to have too much to bear.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL! Oh this one is too funny, Mystery Author! ;) Just a priceless look on that face to accompany words that just FIT!! ;) Thanx so much for that smile and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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LOL! Oh this one is too funny, Mystery Author! ;) Just a priceless look on that face to accompany words that just FIT!! ;) Thanx so much for that smile and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Yvette. It's no wonder the tortoise is painfully slow.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow short and sweet, and the image completes very well the writing prompt - "Weight,
they say, can shape your gait . . .
WAIT!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Wow short and sweet, and the image completes very well the writing prompt - "Weight,
they say, can shape your gait . . .
WAIT!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Iza. The poor turtle has so much to bear in life. I've always thought so.
Comment from Susan Larson
This is hilarious and weightier than it might look. I love the look on the turtle's face. Or is it a tortoise? It's like he doesn't like what he is hearing about his weight. And being annoyed that anyone should be annoyed waiting for him. And thinking, "Wait, I can't help it!"
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This is hilarious and weightier than it might look. I love the look on the turtle's face. Or is it a tortoise? It's like he doesn't like what he is hearing about his weight. And being annoyed that anyone should be annoyed waiting for him. And thinking, "Wait, I can't help it!"
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Your are on my page for sure, Susan. Poor turtles. Thank you for your charming review.
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is not an easy contest, but you did a terrific job.
You have the correct rhyming. This is a humorous poem.
Good luck with the contest and hope to read more of your poems.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This is not an easy contest, but you did a terrific job.
You have the correct rhyming. This is a humorous poem.
Good luck with the contest and hope to read more of your poems.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Barbaraj1. What a nice review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and
presentation.
-You have met the
prompt requirements
very well with syllables and rhyme.
-The description in the
middle is good, too.
-I like how you use
the font to emphasize your
point in the last line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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-Good image and
presentation.
-You have met the
prompt requirements
very well with syllables and rhyme.
-The description in the
middle is good, too.
-I like how you use
the font to emphasize your
point in the last line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Pam. Changing fonts is not my style. I thought that I would try it. I'm glad that you mentioned that you liked it.
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You are welcome. Sometimes trying something different can work out, and it adds interest.
Comment from Nowhereman1
HAHA funny poem. Very short and sweet. Nice choice on the picture. Simple but understandable. Thank you for sharing your poem
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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HAHA funny poem. Very short and sweet. Nice choice on the picture. Simple but understandable. Thank you for sharing your poem
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Nowhereman. That poor turtle is going nowhere as well.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 1-6-1, His Freight Never Abates, has the proper set up and finds the self-contained turtle pensive but prepared to join the race. He'll be slow, but sure.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This 1-6-1, His Freight Never Abates, has the proper set up and finds the self-contained turtle pensive but prepared to join the race. He'll be slow, but sure.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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That's for sure. Thank you, Bill.
