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Comment from Maria Millsaps
This is a very cute story with a poetic flair. I like the repeated verses to bridge the next thought. It adds sense of excitement and jubilee as they go to see the lizard.
I was unsure of the conclusion, but it sounded as if they died?
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This is a very cute story with a poetic flair. I like the repeated verses to bridge the next thought. It adds sense of excitement and jubilee as they go to see the lizard.
I was unsure of the conclusion, but it sounded as if they died?
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love your story and I think could be a wonderful resource for children programming. I really liked this part :"Because because because because because...
We're off to see the thunderful lizard of gauze."
"Word has it that the lizard is as mean as a wet cat.
But we courageous rats ain't worried 'bout that."
"Mostly what the lizard does is really gory tragic.
Don't say we told ya...but the lizard has secret magic."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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I love your story and I think could be a wonderful resource for children programming. I really liked this part :"Because because because because because...
We're off to see the thunderful lizard of gauze."
"Word has it that the lizard is as mean as a wet cat.
But we courageous rats ain't worried 'bout that."
"Mostly what the lizard does is really gory tragic.
Don't say we told ya...but the lizard has secret magic."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
Comment from Bill Pinder
That is a humorous story with a good twist. I like weird humor. You might have just inspired me. Sorry they ended up badly. hope you're doing well.
Bill
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That is a humorous story with a good twist. I like weird humor. You might have just inspired me. Sorry they ended up badly. hope you're doing well.
Bill
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
Comment from Miranda Langston
this is cute. i found this to be very clever. the only thing i would change is removing the quotation mark from this sentence: "We're gonna raid that castle...with egoistic cause." Because
it's a great poem though, and i love the line about the castle being haunted
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this is cute. i found this to be very clever. the only thing i would change is removing the quotation mark from this sentence: "We're gonna raid that castle...with egoistic cause." Because
it's a great poem though, and i love the line about the castle being haunted
Comment Written 08-Oct-2019
