I See
What I see when I look at you...49 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent free verse poem using the sense of sight
to convey the the connection between two people
in all the little things that other might not notice
but one who loves another sees in twenty-twenty vision.
Very well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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You've written an excellent free verse poem using the sense of sight
to convey the the connection between two people
in all the little things that other might not notice
but one who loves another sees in twenty-twenty vision.
Very well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Robert, thank you.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a 'glowing' poem, extolling the virtue of a beloved in one's eyes - a tribute to the loved one, beautifully constructed and smooth in its free verse flow from line to line...
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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In my opinion, a 'glowing' poem, extolling the virtue of a beloved in one's eyes - a tribute to the loved one, beautifully constructed and smooth in its free verse flow from line to line...
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Eve, thank you.!
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You are very welcome, my pleasure...Eve
Comment from QC Poet
Nice interpretation of what your eyes drink in and the thoughts converted towards it's recipient.
Love sense topic writing, Good Luck in the contest. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Nice interpretation of what your eyes drink in and the thoughts converted towards it's recipient.
Love sense topic writing, Good Luck in the contest. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You mention what you see here but you don't mention the other four senses? Not sure that this fits the brief exactly but I enjoyed your free-write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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You mention what you see here but you don't mention the other four senses? Not sure that this fits the brief exactly but I enjoyed your free-write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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I am under the impression that it is forbidden to mention the other senses... I will revisit the rules thanks
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
You certainly met the requirements of the contest. I see you love her and it is an interesting poem. Perfect image for this piece. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. Good luck in the contest. ~Brenda
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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You certainly met the requirements of the contest. I see you love her and it is an interesting poem. Perfect image for this piece. Thank you for sharing this poem with us. Good luck in the contest. ~Brenda
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Brenda, thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written ten-line poem about the sense of seeing. We are so blessed when we can see, but we are most of the time take it for granted to be able to see perfectly. To enjoy seeing the love of your life is the highest blessing we can wish for.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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A very well-written ten-line poem about the sense of seeing. We are so blessed when we can see, but we are most of the time take it for granted to be able to see perfectly. To enjoy seeing the love of your life is the highest blessing we can wish for.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Sandra, thank you!
Comment from lauralumummu
I see you love seeing this woman. What a beautiful tribute to her. Well written and romantic with great imagery. Good work. All the best in the contest, Laura
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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I see you love seeing this woman. What a beautiful tribute to her. Well written and romantic with great imagery. Good work. All the best in the contest, Laura
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Laura, thank you!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a ten line Free Verse about the sense of sight. The content is obviously more about your relationship than the sense itself with the only clue that it is about sight being the repetition of the phrase "I see". Repetition is an often used tool to emphasize or to create dramatic pause within a piece and in this case it just comes across as redundant as there are other words which can be used to evoke a visual connection. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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This meets the contest requirements nicely as you deliver a ten line Free Verse about the sense of sight. The content is obviously more about your relationship than the sense itself with the only clue that it is about sight being the repetition of the phrase "I see". Repetition is an often used tool to emphasize or to create dramatic pause within a piece and in this case it just comes across as redundant as there are other words which can be used to evoke a visual connection. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Well then....I addressed the redundancy, thanks for being so honest!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork.
-You have written
a good poem about
the person that means
so much to you.
-The imagery is effective,
as well as the style.
-I like the line about
"...the wisps of hair, flowing on the wind."
-The last two lines are very good, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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-Nice artwork.
-You have written
a good poem about
the person that means
so much to you.
-The imagery is effective,
as well as the style.
-I like the line about
"...the wisps of hair, flowing on the wind."
-The last two lines are very good, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2019
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Thank you
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You are welcome.
