Poor Me
Self Centered16 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. The poem sounds to me like the writer searching for identity and affirmation. I also detect the feeling of loneliness in the poem. I wish you well in the contest.
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Hello mystery writer. The poem sounds to me like the writer searching for identity and affirmation. I also detect the feeling of loneliness in the poem. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
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you're welcome
Comment from Susan Larson
What a conscience clearing confession. And expressing it so eloquently and sincerely really comes through. I imagine this was very therapeutic, especially sharing it with others.
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What a conscience clearing confession. And expressing it so eloquently and sincerely really comes through. I imagine this was very therapeutic, especially sharing it with others.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I love the message of this. Pride will indeed separate and cause one to miss out on relationships that could have been saved. This is really good and I enjoyed reading this inspirational, thought provoking, and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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I love the message of this. Pride will indeed separate and cause one to miss out on relationships that could have been saved. This is really good and I enjoyed reading this inspirational, thought provoking, and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from lauralumummu
I like it. I found it an insightful self-reflection poem. I have never tried this type of poetry. The rhyme scheme is interesting. Well done. All the best, Laura.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I like it. I found it an insightful self-reflection poem. I have never tried this type of poetry. The rhyme scheme is interesting. Well done. All the best, Laura.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Gail Denham
We do spend too much time dwelling on ourselves - worried over our affairs, thinking what others think of us - fretful that somthing bad will happen. think on these things - whatever is good, true, and of good reports - and the things of God.
A good poem of reminder.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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We do spend too much time dwelling on ourselves - worried over our affairs, thinking what others think of us - fretful that somthing bad will happen. think on these things - whatever is good, true, and of good reports - and the things of God.
A good poem of reminder.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much, and I will
Comment from Willie P. Smith
I am out of sixes or this would certainly receive one. "Pride
goeth before the fall." A bitter lesson for those who only think
of themselves. Exceptional poem, and very true.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I am out of sixes or this would certainly receive one. "Pride
goeth before the fall." A bitter lesson for those who only think
of themselves. Exceptional poem, and very true.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a wonderful poem about someone finally coming to the conclusion that "Know Thyself" means too much to be ignored. In the end, it causes vast loneliness when we use others to glorify ourselves. Your art is perfect.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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This is a wonderful poem about someone finally coming to the conclusion that "Know Thyself" means too much to be ignored. In the end, it causes vast loneliness when we use others to glorify ourselves. Your art is perfect.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt Ottava Rima about one who feels sorry for himself because all his efforts to find someone to love is fruitless because of his self importance that he can't let go.
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A very well-written heartfelt Ottava Rima about one who feels sorry for himself because all his efforts to find someone to love is fruitless because of his self importance that he can't let go.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Bill Pinder
I'm giving you six stars for the combination of well written poem that meets the contest rules, great creativity including words and images, and a great message ending with an excellent couplet. That's a great line, "expecting self desire to be my fortune."
"Building a lonely cocoon" is a great metaphor for a self-absorbed isolated life. Sounds like the author maybe choosing greater humility going forward.
Bill
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I'm giving you six stars for the combination of well written poem that meets the contest rules, great creativity including words and images, and a great message ending with an excellent couplet. That's a great line, "expecting self desire to be my fortune."
"Building a lonely cocoon" is a great metaphor for a self-absorbed isolated life. Sounds like the author maybe choosing greater humility going forward.
Bill
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you very much for your wonderful review and comments, very much appreciate all the stars
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
The content is well thought out and intriguing. Unfortunately, you do not follow the required rhyme scheme pattern for the Ottava Rima. It is an easy fix, so I will go with the five rather than rating it down. The Cambridge Dictionary shows the U.S. pronunciation of "fortune" as for-chun and it seems you are thinking it an 'oon' sound when it's not. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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The content is well thought out and intriguing. Unfortunately, you do not follow the required rhyme scheme pattern for the Ottava Rima. It is an easy fix, so I will go with the five rather than rating it down. The Cambridge Dictionary shows the U.S. pronunciation of "fortune" as for-chun and it seems you are thinking it an 'oon' sound when it's not. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the heads up and being kind with your stars, I think I fixed it now
