Flying In The Face of Fear
A naani poem in 23 syllables:11 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
The dove wings in danger of breaking into fire? We often react in that manner, fear and anger, stress and worry - color our thoughts and bring us to the brink of breaking into smoke. And we laugh, because we're anxious.
nice poem
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The dove wings in danger of breaking into fire? We often react in that manner, fear and anger, stress and worry - color our thoughts and bring us to the brink of breaking into smoke. And we laugh, because we're anxious.
nice poem
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, Flying in the Face of Fear, uses twenty-three syllables and sets the battle up between who we are and what we are afraid to find out.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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This naani, Flying in the Face of Fear, uses twenty-three syllables and sets the battle up between who we are and what we are afraid to find out.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2019
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You have understood my intention perfectly.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very moving and skillfully--created naani. To me, the dove represents the peace that the world lacks. Wars are fought FOR eventual peace, yet they destroy present-day peace. God bless those who have fought, the memory of those who have gone on.
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This is a very moving and skillfully--created naani. To me, the dove represents the peace that the world lacks. Wars are fought FOR eventual peace, yet they destroy present-day peace. God bless those who have fought, the memory of those who have gone on.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an unusual write and the artwork is quite shocking and sometimes we laugh at people's downfalls and have no empathy for others, a moral write here, love Dolly x
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This is an unusual write and the artwork is quite shocking and sometimes we laugh at people's downfalls and have no empathy for others, a moral write here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
Comment from Pantygynt
This Naani takes a common enough expression, Flying in the Face of Fear, and creates the poem around it very effectively. It meets the reqirements stated for the contest.
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This Naani takes a common enough expression, Flying in the Face of Fear, and creates the poem around it very effectively. It meets the reqirements stated for the contest.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Naani Poem contest.
You tell of flying in the face of fear in a very colorful manner.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Naani Poem contest.
You tell of flying in the face of fear in a very colorful manner.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a very powerful image you've begun for your offering in this contest! ;) I would suggest, perhaps, a slight change in your wording to help with flow/delivery... ;) Thank you for sharing and best of luck ... ;)
......of angels
As a dove's wings singe
Flying in the face of fear.
......of angels,
singeing the dove's wings
that fly in the face of fear
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Such a very powerful image you've begun for your offering in this contest! ;) I would suggest, perhaps, a slight change in your wording to help with flow/delivery... ;) Thank you for sharing and best of luck ... ;)
......of angels
As a dove's wings singe
Flying in the face of fear.
......of angels,
singeing the dove's wings
that fly in the face of fear
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thanks for your review and helpful comments.
That would make it flow more smoothly, but... I think your suggested change might make it look like either the laughter of the songs of angels are singeing the dove's wings, which isn't what I intended.
Comment from Michael McCottry Bell Jr
I love the sentiment and how you used the dove which is an innocent bird and converting it into a Phoenix, very clever! Great imagery used here in your words and I definitely dug the picture. Good luck in the contest
Mike
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I love the sentiment and how you used the dove which is an innocent bird and converting it into a Phoenix, very clever! Great imagery used here in your words and I definitely dug the picture. Good luck in the contest
Mike
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
Comment from Susan X Smith
This poem is an excellent contest entry, well meeting the requirements. You did a great job in choosing your words. They paint a vivid picture which is matched by the Fan Art you selected.
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This poem is an excellent contest entry, well meeting the requirements. You did a great job in choosing your words. They paint a vivid picture which is matched by the Fan Art you selected.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
Comment from Alex Rosel
"Hollow laughter" is a great first line; it immediately pulls the reader into the poem {smiles}.
Your "Swallows the songs of angels" is neat. Its avian connotations plays well with your subsequent inclusion of "a dove's wing", and the "flying in the face of fear".
I enjoyed the read, and appreciated your word choices {thumbs up}.
Here's wishing you the best when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
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"Hollow laughter" is a great first line; it immediately pulls the reader into the poem {smiles}.
Your "Swallows the songs of angels" is neat. Its avian connotations plays well with your subsequent inclusion of "a dove's wing", and the "flying in the face of fear".
I enjoyed the read, and appreciated your word choices {thumbs up}.
Here's wishing you the best when the voting booth opens {smiles}.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
