Near Death
5-7-5 Nightmare Contest Entry12 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
You have followed the requirements for a haiku.
I have also heard a similar 'tale' .. if you die in your dream, you are dead.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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You have followed the requirements for a haiku.
I have also heard a similar 'tale' .. if you die in your dream, you are dead.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review this contest entry. I'm glad you commented on "...if you die in your dream, then you're dead." That was the whole point of this write. This is greatly appreciated. Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness! This is a scary nightmare in a 5-7-5 and our dreams turning to nightmares are realised within your words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Oh my goodness! This is a scary nightmare in a 5-7-5 and our dreams turning to nightmares are realised within your words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much, Dolly! I'm glad you liked this creepy thing. LOL! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Thanks!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 nightmare. It is said that our dreams/nightmares are product from our sub consciousness mind which our conscious are not aware about.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 nightmare. It is said that our dreams/nightmares are product from our sub consciousness mind which our conscious are not aware about.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Sandra! I'm glad you took the time to read and comment on this piece. Yes, dreams have always fascinated me but I can't remember ever dying in one. Yikes! This is a great review and I appreciate it very much. Thanks!
Comment from Dancemom
This is a good entry for the 575 nightmare contest. Your syllable count is correct. Your words powerfully describe the horror of the picture. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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This is a good entry for the 575 nightmare contest. Your syllable count is correct. Your words powerfully describe the horror of the picture. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much, Heather. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on this contest entry. Lovely review! Thanks!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Nightmare writing prompt.
The short verse tells of awakening before being taken, but the artwork is the actual nightmare.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Nightmare writing prompt.
The short verse tells of awakening before being taken, but the artwork is the actual nightmare.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Sharon. Yes, this art works is pretty creepy but fit the bill perfectly. I greatly appreciate this awesome review! Love the comments. Thanks!!
Comment from Ricky1024
"Near Death"
Is a 5-7-5 Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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"Near Death"
Is a 5-7-5 Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Wow, Doc!! What a review! These comments are lovely and encouraging and uplifting for one who has never posted horror before. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this contest entry. 5-7-5 poems are limiting, especially if they give you a subject. I loved that you took the time to let me know what you think. I'm grateful and thanking you again! Wow!
Comment from DragonSkulls
Dang, that scared the crap out of me. Lol. Yeah, I've heard you if you die in your sleep you really die. What a bummer to die to what she's dreaming about. Love the pic you came up with. Best of luck in the booth with this great offering.
DS
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Dang, that scared the crap out of me. Lol. Yeah, I've heard you if you die in your sleep you really die. What a bummer to die to what she's dreaming about. Love the pic you came up with. Best of luck in the booth with this great offering.
DS
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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From the fog... thank you, Mr. Skulls for the dazzling stars and excellent review. Creepy is the goal and I'm thrilled this entry appealed to your dark side. These words are nothing without the killer art designed for this. A suitable and successful pairing. Your comments are very much appreciated. Thank you!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Perfect syllabic adherence. This is alarming, eerie, and otherworldly at the same time. Stark, startling illustration, too!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Perfect syllabic adherence. This is alarming, eerie, and otherworldly at the same time. Stark, startling illustration, too!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thank you CC! I never post horror but when this idea hit me and the art was graciously provided I had to go with it. I thank you for this awesome review and I'm really happy you found it creepy. Much appreciated!
Comment from LisaMay
Horror is not my thing because it makes me fearful. Your poem makes me fearful, therefore it is horrible. Horribly effective. That image of her tender throat exposed to all those vicious teeth is scary stuff indeed.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Horror is not my thing because it makes me fearful. Your poem makes me fearful, therefore it is horrible. Horribly effective. That image of her tender throat exposed to all those vicious teeth is scary stuff indeed.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Thank you, sister o' mine. Whaaaaat? Lol.
First time I test the waters in the horror pond. The art is my gift today from the master. When I read this contest posting, my mind took an abrupt left turn and I posted the result. It's creepy but I'm glad this got to you. Lol. That's what I was going for. This monster visits me often. I'm always glad when I wake up in a cold sweat. I've bested him again.
Thanks for being creeped out! Lol!!
PS. Miss you.
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Shit oh dear - I'd hate to have dreams like that, being visited by a demon.
Hey sis - I've been so distracted by the Aussie bushfires, plus stuff happening closer to home. I'll write soon, promise. xx
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I figured as much. Just miss you, girlfriend. No worries. Kiss kiss
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Will try to write tonight; gotta be at work as tour guide all afternoon now - it's our busy tourism season with cruise ships arriving nearly every day, sometimes 2 at a time. We are getting overrun. We are only a small city, so a sudden influx of thousands makes an impact.
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I have the advantage over all your commitments in that I will wait until the congestion is gone from the bridge that binds us to receive you. Easy peasy, girlfriend. No worries. Kiss kiss 😘
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It's the Bridge of Sighs. xx
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Hahahaha! God, girl, I miss you! LMFAO !!!!
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I didn't mean to send an empty message. We shall live to laugh another day xx You no doubt will have stories to tell me. Good ones I hope.
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Of course they are. Heh, heh. Gotta get to bed. I have a truck driver to keep awake in a few hours. It's all good. Sooooo glad to hear from you. Really miss you. Kiss Kiss
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Aaaaack! That pic is awful for the more 'visual' folks out here! And your words are a perfect compliment to the 'nightmare' offering.... great job! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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Aaaaack! That pic is awful for the more 'visual' folks out here! And your words are a perfect compliment to the 'nightmare' offering.... great job! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2020
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LOL!!! Yes, this picture is exactly what I wanted to emphasize what I wanted to say. I really haven't posted horror before but this popped into my head when I read the contest offering today. Thank you so much for the Aaaaaack! I am so proud! HAHA! I so appreciate this review. Thank you!!
