Forbidden Fire
5-7-5 Fire Poem Contest Entry8 total reviews
Comment from Dancemom
This is a great entry for the 575 fire contest. Your syllable count is correct. Your words are scary and enigmatic which made it a fun read. Great job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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This is a great entry for the 575 fire contest. Your syllable count is correct. Your words are scary and enigmatic which made it a fun read. Great job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Heather. Glad you liked this. I appreciate your time to read and review this piece. Yes, this was about a seductress so yep, it's going to be a bit scary. lol Have a great weekend.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Awesome entry, author. The sad part is that the committee will most likely threaten disqualification because they won't make the connection to fire if they don't read the title or author notes. They're idiotic that way sometimes. I love the killer pic you chose. Belisama looks like one nasty, set your ass on fire, beotch. Haha. Best of luck in the contest with this great entry that so few on here will get. Great piece.
DS
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Awesome entry, author. The sad part is that the committee will most likely threaten disqualification because they won't make the connection to fire if they don't read the title or author notes. They're idiotic that way sometimes. I love the killer pic you chose. Belisama looks like one nasty, set your ass on fire, beotch. Haha. Best of luck in the contest with this great entry that so few on here will get. Great piece.
DS
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Thank you D. I admit being disqualified never crossed my mind. I appreciate the sixer very much. Yeah, I fell in love with this picture. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Saradipidity2
Love it! Those scars might not burn, but there's no guarantee they won't get some new burn marks! With all that blazing hot passion! Love the choice of artwork. Perfect depiction of your poem.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Love it! Those scars might not burn, but there's no guarantee they won't get some new burn marks! With all that blazing hot passion! Love the choice of artwork. Perfect depiction of your poem.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Thank you Sara! (Love your profile name.) Also love this review. You totally 'get it' and that means a lot to me. Very much appreciated. And welcome to Fanstory!
Comment from Debbie Pope
What an intriguing photo. It's mesmerizing and so fitting to your sensual words. You say a lot with your 17 syllables. You raise mystery, danger, and hurt love. Your use of "step across" is interesting. I would have expected "surrender", but your word choice implies that there is a boundary to step over. That heightens the mystery of your piece. I like it.
Good luck in the contest. You should do well.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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What an intriguing photo. It's mesmerizing and so fitting to your sensual words. You say a lot with your 17 syllables. You raise mystery, danger, and hurt love. Your use of "step across" is interesting. I would have expected "surrender", but your word choice implies that there is a boundary to step over. That heightens the mystery of your piece. I like it.
Good luck in the contest. You should do well.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Thank you so much, Debbie! This is a killer review and you pretty much nailed it. "Step across" is a reference to fidelity. Surrender is also a good word! I appreciate these lovely, lovely comments and your time here. Thanks, again.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
No but they very well burn others! This temptress looks a bit scary to me. Your words for this poem are clever and there is much scandal behind these words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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No but they very well burn others! This temptress looks a bit scary to me. Your words for this poem are clever and there is much scandal behind these words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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LOL! ...much scandal.. Indeed there will be if he crosses that line. I love this review and appreciate all those stars. Lovely comments, Dolly. Thank you!
Comment from Supe
Your Belisama-Celtic Goddess of Fire is beautiful. Your word count is spot on. A nice job in such a short syllable count. I wish you luck in the contest. A great contender.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Your Belisama-Celtic Goddess of Fire is beautiful. Your word count is spot on. A nice job in such a short syllable count. I wish you luck in the contest. A great contender.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Thank you, Supe! Love that profile name. I got lucky finding this woman of fire. She was exactly what I was looking for. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this. Lovely comments. Thank you!
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you are most welcome.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
The scars won't burn... but the making of the wounds might hurt like he**!! ;) :) A great take on this prompt -- thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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The scars won't burn... but the making of the wounds might hurt like he**!! ;) :) A great take on this prompt -- thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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LOVED this review. You are right. It's the tempering! LOL! Thank you so much for reading this and responding with these awesome comments. Much appreciated. Thank you!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Hello fellow poet. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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How interesting. I knew I would hear from you on this. LOL! Thanks, dude. I went outside the Australia box on this. Glad you responded with all these stars. Means a lot! I appreciate it.
