Murmurations of the Heart
You...inside and out59 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, Yvette.
-The syllable count is good.
-I like the quite imagery with
"silken whispers" and "quiet solace."
-A good message in the poem, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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-Nice image and
presentation, Yvette.
-The syllable count is good.
-I like the quite imagery with
"silken whispers" and "quiet solace."
-A good message in the poem, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thanx, Pam -- glad you enjoyed this one! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week, my lady! ;) Yvette
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You are very welcome, Yvette. We do need those comforting things in our lives. Here's some extra sunshine for you😊
Comment from Mrs. KT
Your 5 line poetic offering is a 'stunner,' dear Yvette!
There is a gentle, yet evocative, implication with your employment of the word "whispers." And your presentation streams like a feather over one's jaded soul... Just beautiful!
Have a wonderful week!
diane
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Your 5 line poetic offering is a 'stunner,' dear Yvette!
There is a gentle, yet evocative, implication with your employment of the word "whispers." And your presentation streams like a feather over one's jaded soul... Just beautiful!
Have a wonderful week!
diane
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Oh, Diane - thank you!! Your comments and those lovely stars are certainly a bright spot to all the gray that seems to hover around here these days...ugh (make it go away!!). :) ;) Seriously, though, we do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) Thanx again, my lady -- and may sunshine and solace find you this week up there (especially the sunshine!)! ;) Yvette
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match. Your words are few yet the message had a huge calmness to it. Yes we all need a quite time alone some time.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match. Your words are few yet the message had a huge calmness to it. Yes we all need a quite time alone some time.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thanx, Miss Cookie -- glad you enjoyed this one! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week, my lady! ;) Yvette
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your very welcome Thank you for your uplifting words.
Cookie
Comment from Minglement
Wow, this is a excellent entry for the five line poem contest. I found myself reading it over and over, which e er happens. Loved all your s sounds and your presentation was perfect. I hope you don 't really have a jaded soul.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Wow, this is a excellent entry for the five line poem contest. I found myself reading it over and over, which e er happens. Loved all your s sounds and your presentation was perfect. I hope you don 't really have a jaded soul.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Let's just say I'm working on it... :) :) Thanx so much, Marcia -- your comments and those lovely stars are certainly a bright spot to all the gray that seems to hover around here these days...sigh. :) ;) Seriously, though, I am truly glad you enjoyed this one... we do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) Thanx again, my lady -- and may sunshine and solace find you this week! ;) Yvette
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You are so welcome, Yvette. I truly enjoyed it. I don't lie. Yes we do need that and thanks for your kind wishes. I'm thankful for your friendship, and I trust you to tell me if you ever think I'm off base on my story. Take care and stay well ;)
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You are so welcome, Yvette. I truly enjoyed it. I don't lie. Yes we do need that and thanks for your kind wishes. I'm thankful for your friendship, and I trust you to tell me if you ever think I'm off base on my story. Take care and stay well ;)
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Sometimes we all need that gentle touch to our body, soul and/or spirit; this poem concerns our inner life. It's a beautiful image, the caressing of a soul by these silken whispers. They can even bring refreshment to a "jaded soul." It makes me think of Psalm 23: He makes me lie down in green pastures... leads me beside still waters... restores my soul. The silken whispers are loving ones. Well done -- beautiful words! And the image is the perfect illustration.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Sometimes we all need that gentle touch to our body, soul and/or spirit; this poem concerns our inner life. It's a beautiful image, the caressing of a soul by these silken whispers. They can even bring refreshment to a "jaded soul." It makes me think of Psalm 23: He makes me lie down in green pastures... leads me beside still waters... restores my soul. The silken whispers are loving ones. Well done -- beautiful words! And the image is the perfect illustration.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thanx, Mary Kay -- glad you enjoyed this one! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week, my lady! ;) Yvette
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You're very welcome. And I'm so glad it's "Murmurations of the Heart" and not "Heart Murmurs." I went to the doctor this week, and since my regular primary doctor was booked solid, I saw one of her associates. She listened to my heart and said, "You have a heart murmur, right?" I said, "I DO?" So she listened again and said to never mind, it was my breathing. Way to make a person panic! I don't need any additional medical problems. I would rather enjoy calming poetry, like yours :-)
Thank you for your kind wishes, and may God bless you.
Comment from gingermo
The use of the sibilant 's' throughout the poem is effective in conveying a gentle mood which suits the subject of the poem - solace for the soul. The painting of the feather complements the lightness of the poem. the painting and the poem capture a feeling of peace. Than you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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The use of the sibilant 's' throughout the poem is effective in conveying a gentle mood which suits the subject of the poem - solace for the soul. The painting of the feather complements the lightness of the poem. the painting and the poem capture a feeling of peace. Than you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thanx, gingermo -- glad you enjoyed this one! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
As long as those whispers are good and kind then we shall be in peace and enjoy the tranquility you describe here, an uplifting write Yvette, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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As long as those whispers are good and kind then we shall be in peace and enjoy the tranquility you describe here, an uplifting write Yvette, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Oh, yeah, the whispers are once we're home and away from the madness, yes? :) Thanx for dropping by for this one, Dolly! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week, my lady! ;) Yvette
Comment from Ricky1024
"Murmations of the Heart"
Is a 5 Line Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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"Murmations of the Heart"
Is a 5 Line Poetry Contest Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly and good luck with this.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thanx, Ricky -- glad you enjoyed this one! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week! ;) Yvette
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Gentle 's' alliteration with 'silken,' 'spirit,' 'solace,' and 'soul.' Keeping things quieter can definitely help rejuvenate the person who might feel life gets too loud and fast-paced, a common, everyday feeling all right (and understandably so in a school setting). Quite the feather closeup on that art. Nice post.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Gentle 's' alliteration with 'silken,' 'spirit,' 'solace,' and 'soul.' Keeping things quieter can definitely help rejuvenate the person who might feel life gets too loud and fast-paced, a common, everyday feeling all right (and understandably so in a school setting). Quite the feather closeup on that art. Nice post.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much, Crystie, for your detailed and in-depth review! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week! ;) Yvette
Comment from royowen
There are a few things in life can calm us down and one of the best are certain colours, and the ,materials used, I like your entry in this 5 line poetry contest Yvette, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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There are a few things in life can calm us down and one of the best are certain colours, and the ,materials used, I like your entry in this 5 line poetry contest Yvette, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thanx, Roy! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week, sir! ;) Yvette
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Well done
