Charlie Goes to Church
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Comment from GE Parson
Super story about last time you saw Charlie. I like it spcially because you quoted Scripture. Yeah, gonna have to get ol' lazy Grandpa out of bed for to go to preaching
service.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Super story about last time you saw Charlie. I like it spcially because you quoted Scripture. Yeah, gonna have to get ol' lazy Grandpa out of bed for to go to preaching
service.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. This is the very first time I have written a story, so your comments are greatly appreciated.
Blessings....
Comment from Drew Delaney
The last time I saw Charlie, he was on his way to Big Mama's house said, Alicia, Charlie's mother. (You need quotation marks here) Before "The last ....house," said Alicia,
Before church began Charlie said, "We forgot to tell Big Daddy I was going to church."
Big Mama said, "I did not forget, I left a note for your sleepy-head grandfather so that he would know that you are with me." When you change the speaker, each one needs a new paragraph beginning. Also, it would sound better if you placed he said, she said following the quotation.
Big Daddy replied, (") I just woke up and have not see Charlie today, but your mother left a note saying, Charlie is with her at church(").
Just a few things that should be edited.
Nice story you have related.
Drew
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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The last time I saw Charlie, he was on his way to Big Mama's house said, Alicia, Charlie's mother. (You need quotation marks here) Before "The last ....house," said Alicia,
Before church began Charlie said, "We forgot to tell Big Daddy I was going to church."
Big Mama said, "I did not forget, I left a note for your sleepy-head grandfather so that he would know that you are with me." When you change the speaker, each one needs a new paragraph beginning. Also, it would sound better if you placed he said, she said following the quotation.
Big Daddy replied, (") I just woke up and have not see Charlie today, but your mother left a note saying, Charlie is with her at church(").
Just a few things that should be edited.
Nice story you have related.
Drew
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Drew,
Thanks so much for your review, rating and most welcomed support and kindness in pointing out my errors. This is the very first time I have penned a story. I have made the corrections, please know that your kindness is greatly appreciated. Thanks to you, I have learned about how to used quotation marks correctly.
Have a wonderful and blessed Sunday...
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You are too kind.
