Winter Garden
a bleak look at winter11 total reviews
Comment from gingermo
The picture and the well chosen words certainly give us an imaginative impression of your winter garden. The second line 'painted on a snowy plaster,' is a pleasurable metaphor. The last line with its impressive alliteration ends the poem beautifully and ties the three lines together. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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The picture and the well chosen words certainly give us an imaginative impression of your winter garden. The second line 'painted on a snowy plaster,' is a pleasurable metaphor. The last line with its impressive alliteration ends the poem beautifully and ties the three lines together. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, gingermo, for your kind praise of my garden haiku.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I love the picture you have chosen to go with this piece. Most people think of gardens only in the summer and see them in full bloom. They do not speak of the beauty they hold in the winter time while covered with snow.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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I love the picture you have chosen to go with this piece. Most people think of gardens only in the summer and see them in full bloom. They do not speak of the beauty they hold in the winter time while covered with snow.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you for sharing my garden haiku, Mia. Winter gardens can be lovely, especially after a fresh coating of snow.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Great entry for the 5/7/5 garden contest. Your syllables count is right. The presentation is beautiful. The satori line is surprising and has nice alliteration.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Hello my friend
Great entry for the 5/7/5 garden contest. Your syllables count is right. The presentation is beautiful. The satori line is surprising and has nice alliteration.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much, Gypsy, for the marvelous review of WINTER GARDEN.
Comment from victor 66
Well, my opinion is, if you think positive in a way which during the winter, you can still see your garden as it was, then your garden still is Good luck in the contest. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Well, my opinion is, if you think positive in a way which during the winter, you can still see your garden as it was, then your garden still is Good luck in the contest. Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2020
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Thank you, victor, for sharing my garden haiku.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from rspoet
You written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the garden contest
One doesn't often think of a garden in winter, but it is there
rain, snow, wind or sunshine.
Nice use of alliteration and imagery
Best wishes in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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You written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the garden contest
One doesn't often think of a garden in winter, but it is there
rain, snow, wind or sunshine.
Nice use of alliteration and imagery
Best wishes in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Many thanks, Robert, for your kind praise of my 5-7-5.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is an interesting entry for the 5-7-5 Garden writing prompt.
This short verse tells of a garden in winter, very nicely.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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I think this is an interesting entry for the 5-7-5 Garden writing prompt.
This short verse tells of a garden in winter, very nicely.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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I am very pleased you found my short poem interesting, Sharon. Thank you for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Hi!
5-7-5 is my favorite writing and reviewing preference. You post did not disappoint me.
As you did with your last line, I slip in alliterations whenever I can.
You chose a good word to plaster your fresco!
With small poems, the need for punctuation is often not needed. IMHO you may consider dropping the cap for 'my.' If you insist, then consider adding a period after fresco. I prefer a larger font size for your text to increase its presentation level/value for other FS reviewers.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Hi!
5-7-5 is my favorite writing and reviewing preference. You post did not disappoint me.
As you did with your last line, I slip in alliterations whenever I can.
You chose a good word to plaster your fresco!
With small poems, the need for punctuation is often not needed. IMHO you may consider dropping the cap for 'my.' If you insist, then consider adding a period after fresco. I prefer a larger font size for your text to increase its presentation level/value for other FS reviewers.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Thank you, Mark, for taking the time to comment in depth about my 5-7-5. Your praise is much appreciated. I am not tech savvy enough to know how to enlarge my font on a FanStory post or I surely would.
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go to advance editor mode below the text box and you can then adjust various elements including text alignment
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Thank you, Mark. I will experiment.
Comment from Lil' Mormon Boy
Your 5-7-5 Garden poem is perfect for the early spring in the high country or anywhere else the snow flies.
You have great thoughts that were gathered that tell a great story.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Your 5-7-5 Garden poem is perfect for the early spring in the high country or anywhere else the snow flies.
You have great thoughts that were gathered that tell a great story.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much for sharing my poem and your kind praise.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork.
-The syllable count is good.
-The imagery is effective and
paints a vivid word picture of hte
wintry scene.
-Good use of alliteration,
and a very good satori like ending.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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-Nice artwork.
-The syllable count is good.
-The imagery is effective and
paints a vivid word picture of hte
wintry scene.
-Good use of alliteration,
and a very good satori like ending.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much, Pam, for sharing my poem and your specific comments.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Frozen and beautiful fresco in the painting and also I the garden of your poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Frozen and beautiful fresco in the painting and also I the garden of your poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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I appreciate your taking the time to share and review my poem, Iza.
