Reborn
A freestyle poem of my faith.41 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the inspiration for your spiritual poem and the lovely, matching picture. I admired your mood-setting title and freestyle form, plus your "pitched tent" metaphor. Best wishes in the Faith Poetry Contest- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you for sharing the inspiration for your spiritual poem and the lovely, matching picture. I admired your mood-setting title and freestyle form, plus your "pitched tent" metaphor. Best wishes in the Faith Poetry Contest- Joan
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you, dear Joan. You always seem to catch up with me and I'm so glad. This contest is far away, but I felt compelled to post early. It had been burning in my heart for weeks.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
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I always admire your work and try to stay caught up. Be well- Joan
Comment from Diana L Crawford
What can I say! Simply elegant, and exquisitely written! (sigh...) Some people tell me they don't like when I use script font, but I think it is such a lovely font to show a delicate touch to the piece. Your entire presentation is spot on beautiful! Love Mercy Me! xoxo
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2020
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What can I say! Simply elegant, and exquisitely written! (sigh...) Some people tell me they don't like when I use script font, but I think it is such a lovely font to show a delicate touch to the piece. Your entire presentation is spot on beautiful! Love Mercy Me! xoxo
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2020
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Dear sweet friend, thank you for returning with a six for me. You have blessed me from head to toe. You are easy to please with music. I love Mercy Me. Just the name says it all. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxoxoxo
Comment from Irish Rain
What a beautiful faith entry Miss Sally.
I love the way you've presented this,
and the final message...being reborn.
Makes all that's going on in the world
a little less scary.
Blessings...
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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What a beautiful faith entry Miss Sally.
I love the way you've presented this,
and the final message...being reborn.
Makes all that's going on in the world
a little less scary.
Blessings...
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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My dear Irish Rain, how kind you are. This poem had been burning in my heart for so long, I had to post early. I'm really glad I did. Your wonderful review and star shower just blessed me so. Thank you! I hope you have a wonderful day and be extra safe out there. I'm praying for you and us all.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxoxo
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Bless you and yours!!
Comment from Father Flaps
Very nice, Sally. Thank you for sharing your faith.
My favorite verse,
"I know what they said
because I was there.
I heard them.
I watched them.
I could barely look.
Such physical suffering
was too much to take in.
I looked, anyway.
How did you do it?
You didn't say a word
in your own defense."
You know, Sally, many times when I'm reading the Bible, I put myself into the mix... perhaps as an unknown observer, but often as a real character in the story. When I do this, I see so much more. I feel things, unexpected things that I never would have thought from just reading the words. I think you have done this, too.
Once, I became Jonah. I didn't realize how afraid Jonah was of traveling to Nineveh as God had directed. One of his greatest fears was that he (a well-known prophet) would succeed. And if he succeeded, there would be no destruction as he warned. The people wouldn't have his respect as a prophet anymore.
He was even willing to be tossed overboard into a raging sea! Yet, God needed Jonah. He wasn't about to abort his plan for the salvation of the Assyrians. He sent a whale to swallow Jonah and deliver him to shore, vomited up on a dry beach. But there in the whale's belly, he repented. To be saved, we must repent. The same can be said of the people of Nineveh.
Bottom line, the story became very real to me. I even wrote a song about it, and my brother illustrated it. I called it, "Jonah On The Beach". I wrote it in a humorous way, and it always got some laughs when I used it in a concert.
"Here I sit on the beach.
The Lord came by to teach.
I'm gonna go to Nineveh after all.
I do remember when...
Thought I was at the end,
But instead became dinner to a wall... (er, a whale).
I guess that I
Cried and cried and cried,
Slippin' to that dark cold lonely place.
I remember the smell.
"Lord, ain't this just swell?"
And swimmin' by, I think I saw a base (er, a bass).
(chorus): Lord, even in that whale You saw me,
An immature and reluctant servan.........t.
Lord, don't know why You want to use me,
But I am happy that can.
I never prayed so hard,
Threw away my guard,
Offered up my heart and soul to Him.
Three days and nights,
I know I look a fright,
But better in the whale cuz I could not of swim (er, swam... er, swum!)
(Chorus): Lord, even in that whale You saw me,
An immature and reluctant servan.........t.
Lord, don't know why You want to use me,
But I am happy that can.
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Anyway, you get the idea, Sally. I like the way you put it, that you were right there...
"I know what they said
because I was there.
I heard them.
I watched them.
I could barely look."
The only thing I'd change in your poem would these lines...
"The end of your life
was the beginning of mine."
I'd suggest,
(The end of your earthly life
was the beginning of my spiritual life."
Thanks for sharing this timely poem, Sally.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Very nice, Sally. Thank you for sharing your faith.
My favorite verse,
"I know what they said
because I was there.
I heard them.
I watched them.
I could barely look.
Such physical suffering
was too much to take in.
I looked, anyway.
How did you do it?
You didn't say a word
in your own defense."
You know, Sally, many times when I'm reading the Bible, I put myself into the mix... perhaps as an unknown observer, but often as a real character in the story. When I do this, I see so much more. I feel things, unexpected things that I never would have thought from just reading the words. I think you have done this, too.
Once, I became Jonah. I didn't realize how afraid Jonah was of traveling to Nineveh as God had directed. One of his greatest fears was that he (a well-known prophet) would succeed. And if he succeeded, there would be no destruction as he warned. The people wouldn't have his respect as a prophet anymore.
He was even willing to be tossed overboard into a raging sea! Yet, God needed Jonah. He wasn't about to abort his plan for the salvation of the Assyrians. He sent a whale to swallow Jonah and deliver him to shore, vomited up on a dry beach. But there in the whale's belly, he repented. To be saved, we must repent. The same can be said of the people of Nineveh.
Bottom line, the story became very real to me. I even wrote a song about it, and my brother illustrated it. I called it, "Jonah On The Beach". I wrote it in a humorous way, and it always got some laughs when I used it in a concert.
"Here I sit on the beach.
The Lord came by to teach.
I'm gonna go to Nineveh after all.
I do remember when...
Thought I was at the end,
But instead became dinner to a wall... (er, a whale).
I guess that I
Cried and cried and cried,
Slippin' to that dark cold lonely place.
I remember the smell.
"Lord, ain't this just swell?"
And swimmin' by, I think I saw a base (er, a bass).
(chorus): Lord, even in that whale You saw me,
An immature and reluctant servan.........t.
Lord, don't know why You want to use me,
But I am happy that can.
I never prayed so hard,
Threw away my guard,
Offered up my heart and soul to Him.
Three days and nights,
I know I look a fright,
But better in the whale cuz I could not of swim (er, swam... er, swum!)
(Chorus): Lord, even in that whale You saw me,
An immature and reluctant servan.........t.
Lord, don't know why You want to use me,
But I am happy that can.
*****************************************************
Anyway, you get the idea, Sally. I like the way you put it, that you were right there...
"I know what they said
because I was there.
I heard them.
I watched them.
I could barely look."
The only thing I'd change in your poem would these lines...
"The end of your life
was the beginning of mine."
I'd suggest,
(The end of your earthly life
was the beginning of my spiritual life."
Thanks for sharing this timely poem, Sally.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2020
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Aw, dear Kimbob, how kind and generous of are. Thank you so much for such a wonderful and meaty review. I love to go deep with you about the things of God. This has been stirring in my heart for sometime. I wrote this is just a few minutes without much revision and decided to post it early. I'm glad I did. Jesus is always a wonderful person to focus on. His love and sacrifice move me to tears and worship daily.
I love your song. I hope you'll revive this for us all here on FanStory. It's so beautiful and worshipful. :))
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
Amen to the truth
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, it is a perfect match.
Like Jesus he knew his time has come, he showed people its beauty and love he passed on to others his work is done.
Unlike Jesus His work is still going on.
Thank you for sharing, have a safe and bless week end.
Cookie
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Amen to the truth
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, it is a perfect match.
Like Jesus he knew his time has come, he showed people its beauty and love he passed on to others his work is done.
Unlike Jesus His work is still going on.
Thank you for sharing, have a safe and bless week end.
Cookie
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, dear Cookie. I am glad you enjoyed my poem and that we share this wonderful faith. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
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Your welcome have a safe and bless week end.
Cookie
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
That is good to know about since it inspired such a beautiful poem, I will definitely look for it. Your deep concentration of our Lord's death is prevalent here and the washing away of our sins also predominates. A very gentle inspirational read. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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That is good to know about since it inspired such a beautiful poem, I will definitely look for it. Your deep concentration of our Lord's death is prevalent here and the washing away of our sins also predominates. A very gentle inspirational read. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for the excellent review of my work. I am so pleased you found my poem inspiring. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sally, your poem just shows your deep faith. I'm so happy for you. It was beautifully written and I wish you the best of luck in the upcoming contest. All best, Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Hi Sally, your poem just shows your deep faith. I'm so happy for you. It was beautifully written and I wish you the best of luck in the upcoming contest. All best, Ulla xxx
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Thank you, dear Ulla. Yes, my faith is deep and has carried me for a long time. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xoxo
Comment from poetwatch
If you have faith you will be reborn your sins will be forgotten. You will sit at the table with our Lord Jesus Christ and He will smile as the Voice of God welcomes you into his Kingdom. This is a good entry for the Faith Poetry Contest. Thank you Sally for writing from your heart.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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If you have faith you will be reborn your sins will be forgotten. You will sit at the table with our Lord Jesus Christ and He will smile as the Voice of God welcomes you into his Kingdom. This is a good entry for the Faith Poetry Contest. Thank you Sally for writing from your heart.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Thank you, dear poet. I'm so glad to see you and appreciate the kind review and affirmations of our mutual faith. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment from Lil' Mormon Boy
Sally,
Your poetry speaks to the love that God has for all his children of the world, from the first generation to the last.
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Sally,
Your poetry speaks to the love that God has for all his children of the world, from the first generation to the last.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for the lovely review and kind words. It is so appreciated.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Beautiful free verse for the Easter Season, Lady Sal -- very good translation of the impact it had on you into words... Powerful testimony! ;) Our Bible Study group read the book and there were times I couldn't actually make it through the reading... chills. Thank you for sharing such a large piece of your heart... :) Yvette
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Beautiful free verse for the Easter Season, Lady Sal -- very good translation of the impact it had on you into words... Powerful testimony! ;) Our Bible Study group read the book and there were times I couldn't actually make it through the reading... chills. Thank you for sharing such a large piece of your heart... :) Yvette
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2020
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind commemts, dear one. It is always so appreciated and needed. It had been mulling in my heart for some time. That book changed and stirred me in many ways. It still does.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
