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Comment from Badger_29
Urgent recycled forms managed to give me a great deal in a short space. This is my first experience with minimal count but you're haiku paints a vivid image in the reader's mind. I love roses, I take a lot of pictures of them and have included them in my poetry also . I like how you said her struggle instead of in her stroll a lot of is implied here.
I was referred by Helen.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Blessings
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Urgent recycled forms managed to give me a great deal in a short space. This is my first experience with minimal count but you're haiku paints a vivid image in the reader's mind. I love roses, I take a lot of pictures of them and have included them in my poetry also . I like how you said her struggle instead of in her stroll a lot of is implied here.
I was referred by Helen.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Blessings
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I'm so glad you stopped by to read and am truly appreciative of your wonderful review. I have done a lot of social work and much of my work involves personal experiences and bits and pieces gained from learning about the lives of my clients. Blessings always, Janet (Flowers rock!)
Comment from Mastery
Wonderful concept with this writing, my friend. The image given is incredible and the overall piece is splendidly wonderful. Bless you my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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Wonderful concept with this writing, my friend. The image given is incredible and the overall piece is splendidly wonderful. Bless you my friend. Bob
Comment Written 10-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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So good to hear from you, Bob. Thank you very much! :-)
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:) Bob
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:) Bob
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your prize! You certainly made every word count in this poignant piece. I also love the graphics, striking red and black--did you do that yourself, I wonder? Cheers.LIZ
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Congrats on your prize! You certainly made every word count in this poignant piece. I also love the graphics, striking red and black--did you do that yourself, I wonder? Cheers.LIZ
Comment Written 08-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Liz. I love illustrating my poetry as much as writing it. I do it all on the computer. Your lovely review is truly appreciated! --Smiles, Janet
Comment from juliaSjames
Congratulations on your win. Your poem resonates with me.
My dear departed mother suffered a stroke and lived for more than a decade using an electric wheelchair. She remained fiercely independent, even able to tend to the plants in her room at the nursing home. To her, the struggle was worthwhile.
I recall her indignation when a well meaning friend tried to coax her to eat with endearments. "How dare she! I'm not a baby." Alas, too many tend to equate physical disability and old age with vulnerability and mental weakness.
Children are much more pragmatic. After back surgery I asked my grandkids to bring me things. They obliged for a while, then told me bluntly. "Grandma, use your grabber. ":-))
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Congratulations on your win. Your poem resonates with me.
My dear departed mother suffered a stroke and lived for more than a decade using an electric wheelchair. She remained fiercely independent, even able to tend to the plants in her room at the nursing home. To her, the struggle was worthwhile.
I recall her indignation when a well meaning friend tried to coax her to eat with endearments. "How dare she! I'm not a baby." Alas, too many tend to equate physical disability and old age with vulnerability and mental weakness.
Children are much more pragmatic. After back surgery I asked my grandkids to bring me things. They obliged for a while, then told me bluntly. "Grandma, use your grabber. ":-))
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 08-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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This review holds so much understanding and your comments are greatly appreciated, Julia. The human spirit can be very noble...it appears it really was with your mother and grandmother.
Smiles, Janet
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 08-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2020
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Wow! I can't wait for the next meeting of the Poetry Society of Tennessee. We just met yesterday afternoon and were discussing haiku and I read this to them as one of my examples. They will be so surprised hearing such wonderful news! (And they will definitely want to know all about Fanstory.com.) I can get this haiku posted on our PST website, as well. Thank you so much!! Spangle
Comment from amada
This is a poem with much feeling and sentiment. I value your post to bring up the attention to the daily struggles with people with some physical problem. A couple of years ago I wrote here a poel about a lady in a wheelchair, left alone in the dark corridor...
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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This is a poem with much feeling and sentiment. I value your post to bring up the attention to the daily struggles with people with some physical problem. A couple of years ago I wrote here a poel about a lady in a wheelchair, left alone in the dark corridor...
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for this sensitive review. I can imagine how that poor lady was feeling as she was being neglected and actually abandoned. I truly appreciate your comments, amada.
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
That is quite sad! Indeed, handicapped people face this issue constantly, its a part of their daily life like they cannot enjoy some little things that would be absolutely normal for other people! Nice of you to write on this topic.best wishes for the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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That is quite sad! Indeed, handicapped people face this issue constantly, its a part of their daily life like they cannot enjoy some little things that would be absolutely normal for other people! Nice of you to write on this topic.best wishes for the contest!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your comments and good wishes. I appreciate them very much!
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You are most welcome! :-)
Comment from Bichon
This poem really says so much in such a few lines. I like how you kept the haiku aspect with the singular Rose, as well as adding personified aspects. Best of luck my friend!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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This poem really says so much in such a few lines. I like how you kept the haiku aspect with the singular Rose, as well as adding personified aspects. Best of luck my friend!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you greatly, Bichon. I'm glad that you like this posting. It's a situation that can use a lot more notice than it usually gets. Blessings always!!
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Spangle, that is a fantastic, haiku with a very strong imagery. The satoriline 'WWheelchair' stands out very strongly. it doesn't seem to have a specific kigo but that doesn't matter. Some would say this is a senryu. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Wow, Spangle, that is a fantastic, haiku with a very strong imagery. The satoriline 'WWheelchair' stands out very strongly. it doesn't seem to have a specific kigo but that doesn't matter. Some would say this is a senryu. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Ulla. I'm glad this posting is speaking to you. It's always wonderful when one's writing touches someone in a meaningful way. The rose is the kigo reference...a season doesn't has to be specifically mentioned. Even animals can provide the kigo such as pheasant for spring, and quail for autumn. 'The Haiku Handbook' by Higginson and Harter provides some common seasonal word lists under the categories of Season/Climate, Astronomy, Observances, Livelihood/Life, Animals, and Plants. Rose of Sharon and rose mallow are given as autumn kigo. There are others, as well..but I always consider it to be a bonus when a season is actually mentioned by name. I truly appreciate you reading this, and sharing your thoughts! :-) Janet
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Thanks a lot, Janet for this extended answer from which I've learned something new. It's very informative. Thanks again. I do love writing haiku and have done that extensively. Thanks again. Ulla:)))
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Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Spangle, this is a very good haiku. Unusual, with format in order, and touching words. I think this is a lovely entry to the contest and I wish you good luck. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Hello Spangle, this is a very good haiku. Unusual, with format in order, and touching words. I think this is a lovely entry to the contest and I wish you good luck. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Your lovely review is very much appreciated. Thank you Dorothy!
xo
Janet
