Lights Out
(bill paid: no fair!) Deathbed revelations33 total reviews
Comment from Judy Lawless
You've done an interesting take on the theme of faith, Liz. At the beginning I was already to yell, Yes! I feel the same way about hanging around just for the chemo, with not quality of life left. But now you've got me worried about the pain. :) Thanks. lol Great writing. I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
You've done an interesting take on the theme of faith, Liz. At the beginning I was already to yell, Yes! I feel the same way about hanging around just for the chemo, with not quality of life left. But now you've got me worried about the pain. :) Thanks. lol Great writing. I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Judy. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
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You?re most welcome, Liz. It makes life interesting. 😏
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Hi Liz I don't know how I missed this amazing piece, but I say loved it from the beginning to the end. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and welcome back, I hope everything is okay with you and your family.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
Hi Liz I don't know how I missed this amazing piece, but I say loved it from the beginning to the end. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and welcome back, I hope everything is okay with you and your family.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Welcome back to you too, IZA! I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from judiverse
You're really great with these scripts. Yes, why fool around with too many stage directions, when you know the director will have his way with the action. I like your idea for the subtle changes in Anne's position. This is a gripping subject. My cousin was like Anne and decided she was not going to take any more chemo. She eventually died of cancer. Excellent handling of the conclusion. She sees a light and has thoughts of seeing people she's known. Them the light disappears into darkness. judi
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
You're really great with these scripts. Yes, why fool around with too many stage directions, when you know the director will have his way with the action. I like your idea for the subtle changes in Anne's position. This is a gripping subject. My cousin was like Anne and decided she was not going to take any more chemo. She eventually died of cancer. Excellent handling of the conclusion. She sees a light and has thoughts of seeing people she's known. Them the light disappears into darkness. judi
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Judi. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
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You're welcome. I didn't see anything to be offended about in this script. judi
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm sorry I missed this the first time around. Having done chemo with stage four breast cancer, I can tell you it's not fun, but reasonable at a chance for life. I've lived 10 years now. This is very creative and I'm glad I caught it this time.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
I'm sorry I missed this the first time around. Having done chemo with stage four breast cancer, I can tell you it's not fun, but reasonable at a chance for life. I've lived 10 years now. This is very creative and I'm glad I caught it this time.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Barbara. Glad you caught up to this. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, I guess it's like what they say, we have all got to go through it. I thought about trying to cheat the system and make a deal with the devil. I mean, with God, paybacks come after death. But with the devil, I could enjoy the benefits while I'm still alive. But, wouldn't you know it, I keep calling the devil and the line is always busy with other callers. LOL. Now, I'll be looking up all the time, even after saying that I'm just joking. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
Well, I guess it's like what they say, we have all got to go through it. I thought about trying to cheat the system and make a deal with the devil. I mean, with God, paybacks come after death. But with the devil, I could enjoy the benefits while I'm still alive. But, wouldn't you know it, I keep calling the devil and the line is always busy with other callers. LOL. Now, I'll be looking up all the time, even after saying that I'm just joking. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Good to see you, Rick. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. As to the six, it's the thought that countssssss.
Comment from robyn corum
Liz,
If I had paid money to see this show, I would be so mad when it ended this way. I really thought you were going to show something clever and different. blah. yuck. I don't like it one bit. (Sorry.)
It was well-written and I appreciated the part about the psychic and how she interpreted things in her own way. Nice.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
Liz,
If I had paid money to see this show, I would be so mad when it ended this way. I really thought you were going to show something clever and different. blah. yuck. I don't like it one bit. (Sorry.)
It was well-written and I appreciated the part about the psychic and how she interpreted things in her own way. Nice.
Thanks!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Hello, Robyn. I don't "like" this any more than you do. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Liz,
A powerful piece here, my dear. Well-written. I think the most important thing that people will take from this is it will get them thinking about God and Heaven. So many people these days are living for the here and now... what's fun, what's easy, comfort, food, trips, games, shopping... anything to keep them occupied. They might have some well-hidden thoughts of God from their childhood, things they were taught in Sunday School perhaps. But they think they've buried it, for now. They can always haul it out if needed. God always has room for the sinner, right? Even the thief on the cross became a Christian in his dying moments. And Jesus said, 'Truly I tell you, today you will be with me in paradise.' Luke 23:43 So it's never too late. Or is it? What about those who die instantly in a car crash? It's too late for them. They had their chance. Many chances, likely as not.
As I read along about poor unfortunate Anne, I thought of this song by Don Francisco. It's called "He Still Loves You"
https://youtu.be/GbBO_jsvoCM
It's good to be searching, and I think this story is a prime example of your own searching. Searching leads to decision. And the biggest decision you will make in your lifetime is to accept Jesus, God's Son, as your Savior ... or reject Him.
So, "Bravo" in sharing this. Who knows? If even one person who reads this starts thinking about God... Father, Son and Holy Spirit... and begins searching, and makes the decision to accept Christ as their personal Savior, there will be so much rejoicing in Heaven.
"Just so, I tell you, there is joy before the angels of God over one sinner who repents." Luke 15:10
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
Hi Liz,
A powerful piece here, my dear. Well-written. I think the most important thing that people will take from this is it will get them thinking about God and Heaven. So many people these days are living for the here and now... what's fun, what's easy, comfort, food, trips, games, shopping... anything to keep them occupied. They might have some well-hidden thoughts of God from their childhood, things they were taught in Sunday School perhaps. But they think they've buried it, for now. They can always haul it out if needed. God always has room for the sinner, right? Even the thief on the cross became a Christian in his dying moments. And Jesus said, 'Truly I tell you, today you will be with me in paradise.' Luke 23:43 So it's never too late. Or is it? What about those who die instantly in a car crash? It's too late for them. They had their chance. Many chances, likely as not.
As I read along about poor unfortunate Anne, I thought of this song by Don Francisco. It's called "He Still Loves You"
https://youtu.be/GbBO_jsvoCM
It's good to be searching, and I think this story is a prime example of your own searching. Searching leads to decision. And the biggest decision you will make in your lifetime is to accept Jesus, God's Son, as your Savior ... or reject Him.
So, "Bravo" in sharing this. Who knows? If even one person who reads this starts thinking about God... Father, Son and Holy Spirit... and begins searching, and makes the decision to accept Christ as their personal Savior, there will be so much rejoicing in Heaven.
"Just so, I tell you, there is joy before the angels of God over one sinner who repents." Luke 15:10
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your eloquent engagement.
Comment from tfawcus
I found this fascinating, Liz, and that is probably because the views expressed closely parallel my own. The promise of a perfect afterlife has always seemed to me to be a big con designed to make the powerless more compliant in the face of undeserved adversity in this one.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
I found this fascinating, Liz, and that is probably because the views expressed closely parallel my own. The promise of a perfect afterlife has always seemed to me to be a big con designed to make the powerless more compliant in the face of undeserved adversity in this one.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks, Tony. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. You were among the first readers of my first post--Holy Terror. You gave me a six and became a fan!
Comment from Sanku
Very powerful piece . For a few seconds I was shocked to think you were sick and then I realised it i just a scene from a play. The end is devastating for all believers...
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
Very powerful piece . For a few seconds I was shocked to think you were sick and then I realised it i just a scene from a play. The end is devastating for all believers...
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Thanks. I must say, the Christians on this site have been overwhelmingly gracious to me, despite my controversial pieces (per the footnotes). I have long suffered religious torment--it's inspired a lot of stories, that's for sure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from karenina
I call them as I see them and know what? This is a sixer!
I have zero "acting chops" but would love to see this, you as Anne, on stage!
I've read it through three times now (like a trinity) and it's more impressive as I consider each nuance!
Totally believable "voice"-- This no nonsense woman will not go the " tossing double cookies" route... (great line!)
This Medium thing... Oh my gosh! Leave it in! I'd say it "spoke to me"--but that's to easy.
(Grin)
Anne's punched her final ticket, she's waiting for the train! Of course she'd want one last stab at considering Charlie and John somehow made it ... wherever ... just in case. Their loss was worse than cancer...they'd be that light to cling to...
And, ahem, such a clever skewering of all those phoney baloney psychics with their cold readings. Do not remove this part...
As for God, Jesus, faith, and the big theistic questions...
I've very nearly slid into "home plate"/ post cancer and I'd be lying if I didn't admit to thinking that maybe I believed (aka Catholic School indoctrination)--in God..... but heh... "He" didn't believe in me!
All that bravado (either way) really distills down to those final moments...
This is genius, Liz.
Anne screaming out: "Jesus, God help me, Jesus!...I can't see..."
I could wrote a thesis on that, alone!
(Well, if I had purchased that Flash-Deal PhD on Amazon.)
I've cruised the cancer chemo seas, my heart stopped during surgery, you know I've had psychic experiences, I'm a collapsed Catholic but a Christian who hopes God grades on a Bell Curve or else!
(Also, one final confession--as a child I totally hoped the Holy Spirit was really Casper, the Friendly Ghost!)
Anne spoke to all sides of me...
Curtains up!
Standing ovation!
Take a bow, Liz.
Proud to know you, SAB!
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
I call them as I see them and know what? This is a sixer!
I have zero "acting chops" but would love to see this, you as Anne, on stage!
I've read it through three times now (like a trinity) and it's more impressive as I consider each nuance!
Totally believable "voice"-- This no nonsense woman will not go the " tossing double cookies" route... (great line!)
This Medium thing... Oh my gosh! Leave it in! I'd say it "spoke to me"--but that's to easy.
(Grin)
Anne's punched her final ticket, she's waiting for the train! Of course she'd want one last stab at considering Charlie and John somehow made it ... wherever ... just in case. Their loss was worse than cancer...they'd be that light to cling to...
And, ahem, such a clever skewering of all those phoney baloney psychics with their cold readings. Do not remove this part...
As for God, Jesus, faith, and the big theistic questions...
I've very nearly slid into "home plate"/ post cancer and I'd be lying if I didn't admit to thinking that maybe I believed (aka Catholic School indoctrination)--in God..... but heh... "He" didn't believe in me!
All that bravado (either way) really distills down to those final moments...
This is genius, Liz.
Anne screaming out: "Jesus, God help me, Jesus!...I can't see..."
I could wrote a thesis on that, alone!
(Well, if I had purchased that Flash-Deal PhD on Amazon.)
I've cruised the cancer chemo seas, my heart stopped during surgery, you know I've had psychic experiences, I'm a collapsed Catholic but a Christian who hopes God grades on a Bell Curve or else!
(Also, one final confession--as a child I totally hoped the Holy Spirit was really Casper, the Friendly Ghost!)
Anne spoke to all sides of me...
Curtains up!
Standing ovation!
Take a bow, Liz.
Proud to know you, SAB!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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I am awed by this stupendous review. As I write this, I am mourning that you've left the site.
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Error. My work has been restored. Thanks.
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I'm relieved to know you'd meant you were "leaving" as in signing off for the night! DUH. Cheers.
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So glad they resolved the glitch--normally, a portfolio gets pulled only when someone fails to pay their dues. I would have freaked out to find my work erased!
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Oh, man! What a nightmare! All's well that ends....
Oh right, Shakespeare already used that!
:)
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"DUH" is my middle name!!!!
;)