Getting A Grip
(5-7-5) A family characteristic...15 total reviews
Comment from Minglement
I liked your unique approach for this entry to the 5-7-5 tree hugger contest - visualizing the family tree rather than the expected plant ;) Firmly rooted - good line. Good luck
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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I liked your unique approach for this entry to the 5-7-5 tree hugger contest - visualizing the family tree rather than the expected plant ;) Firmly rooted - good line. Good luck
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Thanks for this supportive review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This tree-hugger 5-7-5, Getting a Grip, has the proper formatting and uses the stressed look of these tree roots to represent the intentional holding of the family to its core values.
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This tree-hugger 5-7-5, Getting a Grip, has the proper formatting and uses the stressed look of these tree roots to represent the intentional holding of the family to its core values.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like your creative approach to the tree hugger prompt. Your extended metaphor is well-crafted. Your rhymes show great thought.
You should do well in the contest. Good luck.
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I like your creative approach to the tree hugger prompt. Your extended metaphor is well-crafted. Your rhymes show great thought.
You should do well in the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Lovely picture to go with a striking poem. The poem flowed well, made sense, and has a nice big font, which is much appreciated.
Good luck in the contest!
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Lovely picture to go with a striking poem. The poem flowed well, made sense, and has a nice big font, which is much appreciated.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet , I gave you your 2nd vote .
I enjoyed how you referred to your family as a well rooted tree which has strength and stability ...great qualities
I have read this metaphor before but out of all the entries I was still compelled to vote for yours maybe cause my family was totally the opposite ...
...we are drawn to things we missed out on....my life would have been so different had I had parents less distant.
I hope you do well in the contest
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Ciao mystery poet , I gave you your 2nd vote .
I enjoyed how you referred to your family as a well rooted tree which has strength and stability ...great qualities
I have read this metaphor before but out of all the entries I was still compelled to vote for yours maybe cause my family was totally the opposite ...
...we are drawn to things we missed out on....my life would have been so different had I had parents less distant.
I hope you do well in the contest
Comment Written 15-Mar-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 tree-hugger poem when the tree had good, strong roots that goes deep there is not many things that can unroot that tree where he is standing.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 tree-hugger poem when the tree had good, strong roots that goes deep there is not many things that can unroot that tree where he is standing.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
(5-7-5) A family characteristic...
Getting A Grip
Hello my friend
Your 5/7/5 poem doesn't make sense.
In our fam'ly tree holding to stability firmly rooted - see
If you connect all the lines grammatically it will make more Sense.
An example....
our family tree's
Roots are stable and deeply
United at heart
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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(5-7-5) A family characteristic...
Getting A Grip
Hello my friend
Your 5/7/5 poem doesn't make sense.
In our fam'ly tree holding to stability firmly rooted - see
If you connect all the lines grammatically it will make more Sense.
An example....
our family tree's
Roots are stable and deeply
United at heart
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Thanks for your review. I often leave room in my poems for the reader to mentally fill in the words themselves, just as you have done. The 'sense' of a meaning can usually be gained even if grammar and punctuation are not strictly adhered to, as in everyday conversation. I see you are a purist, but I am not. I have also bent the expected accuracy of grammar to accommodate rhymes. Thanks for your feedback - it is very helpful to see how reader's react to things done differently to 'the rules'.
(Could you explain to me why in your example the first letter (o) is not a capital letter but the other two are (R and U), and why there is a line break before the final line? Is that on purpose? Why?)
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I was just giving you an example. I was on my phone. When I hit enter the next word is automatically capitalized. As a reviewer is my job to be honest and helpful when I can. Feel free to ignore it. Sometimes I do the same. You use your own judgement and as poet, you hold the last word.
Comment from Monica Chaddick
I can really feel the deep roots as I read and then look at the picture. This is a wonderful poem based on a simple topic. Great imagination! I look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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I can really feel the deep roots as I read and then look at the picture. This is a wonderful poem based on a simple topic. Great imagination! I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review, Monica. I appreciate your high rating of my poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We often refer to the roots of a tree to cement our foundations as tree roots need to be so strong to hold up the tree, did you know that trees reach out to other tree roots to help each other stand firm, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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We often refer to the roots of a tree to cement our foundations as tree roots need to be so strong to hold up the tree, did you know that trees reach out to other tree roots to help each other stand firm, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Trees can be very community-minded - good examples of support.
Comment from QC Poet
Awesomely excellent 5-7-5 poem job for the accompanying photo included with your posting. It roots look like fingers holding on for dear life. Good Luck in the contest and may God Bless you.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Awesomely excellent 5-7-5 poem job for the accompanying photo included with your posting. It roots look like fingers holding on for dear life. Good Luck in the contest and may God Bless you.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review!
