Change in the Air
Joseph Star entry8 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is a very nice Joseph star poem. It goes from one extreme to the other. I guess that is like the cycle of the seasons. The format makes a very neat pattern. It's a great entry for the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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This is a very nice Joseph star poem. It goes from one extreme to the other. I guess that is like the cycle of the seasons. The format makes a very neat pattern. It's a great entry for the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2020
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This is an unusual pattern. Glad you liked it!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Joseph's Star writing prompt.
This lovely verse describes summer and winter hot and cold.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Joseph's Star writing prompt.
This lovely verse describes summer and winter hot and cold.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from RShipp
You have no rhyme in your poem and the syllable count seems accurate.
Your picture was a good choice.
Best of luck in the Joseph's Star writing contest.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
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You have no rhyme in your poem and the syllable count seems accurate.
Your picture was a good choice.
Best of luck in the Joseph's Star writing contest.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from LisaMay
From what I have read so far, yours seems to be the only one to have successfully stuck to the requirement of having a statement for each line. .. not easy to do, so I commend you for that, as well as for poetically conveying the scene and the changing season so well. Nice photo too; it looks to be a lovely place to visit when this is all over.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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From what I have read so far, yours seems to be the only one to have successfully stuck to the requirement of having a statement for each line. .. not easy to do, so I commend you for that, as well as for poetically conveying the scene and the changing season so well. Nice photo too; it looks to be a lovely place to visit when this is all over.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We are coming into spring, but your poem is about the transition from summer to fall and the cool breezes and forthcoming snow flakes, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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We are coming into spring, but your poem is about the transition from summer to fall and the cool breezes and forthcoming snow flakes, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Thank you for sharing your positive thoughts!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Excellent! A brilliant job done; each line is complete, gives a picture of change in the air and the environment, and there is good link to the theme with a free flow of thoughts; I liked; wish this entry should win the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Excellent! A brilliant job done; each line is complete, gives a picture of change in the air and the environment, and there is good link to the theme with a free flow of thoughts; I liked; wish this entry should win the contest.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent poem for the Joseph's Star contest
with wonderful description and exact syllables.
One possible problem, the prompt says no rhymes
and you used "breeze" twice, as well as freeze.
You could use "wind" or "gust" for breeze
freeze is a little harder, perhaps "frost" or "ice"
Otherwise your imagery is very good
and the photograph is a great match.
Best wishes to you.
Stay safe
Robert
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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You've written an excellent poem for the Joseph's Star contest
with wonderful description and exact syllables.
One possible problem, the prompt says no rhymes
and you used "breeze" twice, as well as freeze.
You could use "wind" or "gust" for breeze
freeze is a little harder, perhaps "frost" or "ice"
Otherwise your imagery is very good
and the photograph is a great match.
Best wishes to you.
Stay safe
Robert
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Thanks for the heads up. Have revised accordingly.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Expertly executed! The syllable Count was perfect. The colors and verse uplifting and ethereal. The shades of lavender made me happy. The artwork compliments this piece perfectly. Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Expertly executed! The syllable Count was perfect. The colors and verse uplifting and ethereal. The shades of lavender made me happy. The artwork compliments this piece perfectly. Beautifully done!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much! Glad you liked this piece. Tried to make it uplifting in these days of isolation and stress...
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You're welcome!
