Angels
a hundred word story26 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Lovely photo and story, Bill.
-No wonder you are so proud
of these adorable kids, and I
love the decorations, too.
-I was wondering where my
last sixth star would land,
and it chose here!
-The story is written very well
from remembering your own childhood,
and I like the observation in the second paragraph.
-I like the "chirping and giggling" of the children,
and the conclusion comes from your heart.
-Very well done; good luck in the contest,
and Happy Easter, too!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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-Lovely photo and story, Bill.
-No wonder you are so proud
of these adorable kids, and I
love the decorations, too.
-I was wondering where my
last sixth star would land,
and it chose here!
-The story is written very well
from remembering your own childhood,
and I like the observation in the second paragraph.
-I like the "chirping and giggling" of the children,
and the conclusion comes from your heart.
-Very well done; good luck in the contest,
and Happy Easter, too!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Pam, for the terrific review. Bill
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You are very welcome and deserving, Bill. Adorable grandkids!
Comment from Spitfire
You've captured a joyful moment from childhood memories that does rejuvenate our jaded souls. Nice choice of verbs: chirped and giggled. Skillful alliteration that contrasts two moods: giddy and gloomy.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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You've captured a joyful moment from childhood memories that does rejuvenate our jaded souls. Nice choice of verbs: chirped and giggled. Skillful alliteration that contrasts two moods: giddy and gloomy.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Shari, for the kind review.
Comment from Aaron Milavec
Very nicely done! Your memories come through. On the one side is the youthful playfulness; but, in the shadows, one finds tears.
At various times I expected small changes:
U: looking to the living room
I: looking into the living room
U: wrong with a dysfunctional family
I: wrong with his dysfunctional family
Overall, 5 star,
Aaron
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Very nicely done! Your memories come through. On the one side is the youthful playfulness; but, in the shadows, one finds tears.
At various times I expected small changes:
U: looking to the living room
I: looking into the living room
U: wrong with a dysfunctional family
I: wrong with his dysfunctional family
Overall, 5 star,
Aaron
Comment Written 09-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Aaron, for your review and suggestions.
Comment from sunnilicious
Children and grandchildren sound like a real blessing. That was a nice story. Maybe I could make my own family someday. Well thought out. Clearly written. Nice visual imagery. Good storytelling. Beautiful story. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Children and grandchildren sound like a real blessing. That was a nice story. Maybe I could make my own family someday. Well thought out. Clearly written. Nice visual imagery. Good storytelling. Beautiful story. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
It's wonderful to be able to enjoy your grandchildren and family. But there seems to be something disconnected in the last stanza of your story can you look at it and tell me if I'm wrong or I just didn't get it. I enjoyed what I read so far because it seems like you're enjoying the grandchildren and seeing your life being reflected in them. Please check your last stanza, after the word rejuvenated
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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It's wonderful to be able to enjoy your grandchildren and family. But there seems to be something disconnected in the last stanza of your story can you look at it and tell me if I'm wrong or I just didn't get it. I enjoyed what I read so far because it seems like you're enjoying the grandchildren and seeing your life being reflected in them. Please check your last stanza, after the word rejuvenated
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Mary, for the excellent review. I stand by thee of all the words and meaning. Appreciate the view point.
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I enjoyed the read
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
When we're having a moment or moments in our older lives, children playing, carefree and innocent have a way of lifting our spirits as you've so eloquently stated. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done'
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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When we're having a moment or moments in our older lives, children playing, carefree and innocent have a way of lifting our spirits as you've so eloquently stated. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done'
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Jeffrey.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 100 Word Story contest.
This short story tells of a childhood remebered.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 100 Word Story contest.
This short story tells of a childhood remebered.
Well done and good luck to you with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
a hundred word story
Angels
Hello my friend
Fine entry for the
100 Word Story writing contest. I love your heartfelt story about the joy of childhood and subsequent generations living vicariously through their children and grandchildren. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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a hundred word story
Angels
Hello my friend
Fine entry for the
100 Word Story writing contest. I love your heartfelt story about the joy of childhood and subsequent generations living vicariously through their children and grandchildren. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Contains 100 words so meets that requirement of the contest. Covers not only your youth, but now your admiration of your grandchildren, and the enjoyment received from both. Well told.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Contains 100 words so meets that requirement of the contest. Covers not only your youth, but now your admiration of your grandchildren, and the enjoyment received from both. Well told.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Brett, for the kind review.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this story about the spark of life being felt as a child and remembering that when seeing your grandchildren. It is very important to feel some joy especially when times are tough. Bill
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thanks for sharing this story about the spark of life being felt as a child and remembering that when seeing your grandchildren. It is very important to feel some joy especially when times are tough. Bill
Comment Written 08-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Bill, for the kind review.
